礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitations and repetitive phrases. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., "respect for older people is very important", "we use a different pronoun for older people").

示例: I learned to be polite at home in Ethiopia. For example, we use a special pronoun when addressing older people, and calling them with casual language is considered disrespectful. Also, when elders visit our home, we stand to welcome them as a sign of respect.

建议: Good direct response and relevant example. Improve by tightening language, avoiding minor errors ("upbringing" singular), and adding a linking phrase to strengthen coherence. Keep answer within 2–3 sentences and include a brief personal viewpoint or contrast.

示例: Yes, being polite is very important because it reflects your upbringing and overall manners. For instance, in job interviews or meetings, courtesy can improve your chances of being hired, whereas rudeness might make employers reject you.

× respect for older people is very crucial thing.

✓ respect for older people is a very crucial thing.

Missing article 'a' before 'very crucial thing' makes the noun phrase ungrammatical. Use 'a' to modify singular countable noun 'thing'. Suggestion: include appropriate articles before nouns (a/an/the).

× Uh, there is a, there is a different pronoun we use for older people.

✓ Uh, there is a different pronoun we use for older people.

Redundant repetition 'there is a, there is a' is unnecessary and awkward. Remove the duplicate 'there is a' to make the sentence concise and grammatical. Ensure single 'there is' when introducing existence of one item.

× And if you, if you use, pronounce that you use, uh, for young people, for all, to old people to call old people, people will look at you like, how did you?

✓ And if you use the form we use for young people to address older people, people will look at you as if you are being disrespectful.

Original sentence has unclear pronoun reference and awkward phrasing. 'Pronounce that you use' is incorrect; use 'use the form' or 'use the form we use for young people'. 'How did you?' is incomplete; replace with 'as if you are being disrespectful' to express reaction. Clarify pronoun references and simplify structure.

× So that's where I learned it, respect, I think, and politeness.

✓ So that's where I learned respect and politeness, I think.

Comma splices and awkward word order create a sentence structure error. Combine ideas into one coherent clause: 'learned respect and politeness' and place 'I think' at end. Avoid multiple commas joining independent clauses without conjunctions.

× And we if older people come home, we spend so that like as a sign of respect.

✓ And if older people come home, we stand up as a sign of respect.

'we spend so that like' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'stand up'. This is a lexical/quantifier misuse causing meaning loss. Replace with correct verb 'stand up' to convey customary action. Also remove extra 'we' after 'And'.

× Yes, I think being polite is very important because it reflects your upbringings and general manners.

✓ Yes, I think being polite is very important because it reflects your upbringing and general manners.

'Upbringings' is plural but 'upbringing' is an uncountable noun referring to the way someone was raised. Use the singular/uncountable form 'upbringing'. This fixes noun number and collocation.