礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clearer and more grammatically accurate. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct vocabulary (e.g., 'well-mannered person', 'respectful') and verb forms (learned, have practiced) will improve clarity. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and avoid redundancy.

示例: I learned to be polite from my older sister. She was very well-mannered and always used phrases like “please” and “thank you”, so I copied her behaviour and practised those phrases when speaking to others.

建议: Make a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (because, so, therefore). Use natural phrasing (e.g., 'others will respect you back', 'it helps build relationships') and correct grammar. Keep sentences concise and logical.

示例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect for others and makes social interactions smoother. As a result, people are more likely to respond kindly and this helps to build stronger relationships.

× She's a well mannered people and treats everybody very respectful.

✓ She's a well-mannered person and treats everybody with respect.

The original uses the plural noun 'people' incorrectly to refer to one person and uses the adjective 'respectful' where a noun or prepositional phrase is needed. Change 'people' to the singular 'person' and hyphenate 'well-mannered' as a compound adjective. Also replace 'treats everybody very respectful' with 'treats everybody with respect' because 'treat X with respect' is the correct collocation; 'respectful' would need an adverb (treats everybody very respectfully) but the noun phrase is clearer.

× For example, she always says thank you, please and I learn from her and practice from now.

✓ For example, she always says 'thank you' and 'please,' and I learned from her and have practiced her habits since then.

The sentence mixes tenses and uses 'practice from now' incorrectly. Use past tense 'learned' to show the learning happened in the past, and present perfect 'have practiced' + time expression 'since then' to show continued action up to now. Also separate the quoted phrases with commas and use 'habits' to clarify what was practiced.

× Yes, I think it's important to being polite a because exist but to the people and the other people will respect back to you and it can close the relationship between the people.

✓ Yes, I think it's important to be polite because people will respect you in return, and it can strengthen relationships.

The original has several tense and structure problems: use the infinitive 'to be polite' not 'to being polite.' Remove extraneous words 'a because exist but to the people' which are ungrammatical; replace with a clear reason 'because people will respect you in return.' Also use 'strengthen relationships' for a natural expression instead of 'close the relationship between the people.' The corrected sentence is concise and grammatically correct.

× When I was a child I learned to be bright from my older sister.

✓ When I was a child, I learned to be polite from my older sister.

The sentence uses 'bright' which likely is a wrong word choice rather than a plural issue; however it also needs a comma after the introductory clause. The intended meaning is learning politeness, so replace 'bright' with 'polite.' This correction addresses word choice and punctuation for clarity; although not listed exactly, it aligns with the pronoun/word usage issues in the list.