礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 用词和表达不准确，句子混乱，信息不够具体。建议用更自然明确的句型直接回答（主题句），然后用一两句具体细节支持。注意词汇选择：不要用 “collide with people” 或 “show more refers to elderly people”。可说 “taught me manners”，“respect elderly” 等；控制在最多5句内，使用连接词如 “for example” 或 “because”。例如可补充具体情境（谁教的、怎样教、什么时候开始）。

示例: I learned to be polite from my family. For example, my grandparents and parents always reminded me to say “please” and “thank you” and to greet older people respectfully. At home we practised polite phrases every day, which helped them become a habit.

建议: 回答含糊且很多不恰当词汇和比喻（例如 “collide with people”，“Barbarians”，“jungle”），影响表达清晰度和礼貌主题的关联。建议先给出明确立场（Yes, it is important），然后用一到两句具体理由并用连接词如 “because” 或 “for example”。保持句子简洁，避免无关或夸张的比喻。可以提到社交、工作或日常生活中的具体好处。

示例: Yes, I believe being polite is very important because it helps people get along and avoid conflicts. For example, being polite at work can create a more cooperative atmosphere, and in daily life small courtesies make interactions smoother.

× I think it's a family legacy.

✓ I think it's a family tradition.

原句用 word "legacy" 意思偏向遗产、遗产精神，语境更常用 "tradition"（传统）。这是词汇选择问题，不是时态或主谓错误。建议多注意语境中常用搭配：family tradition。

× My grandparents and my parents told me how to collide with people.

✓ My grandparents and parents taught me how to behave with other people.

原句中用 "collide with"（碰撞）完全不合语境，应该用表示礼貌、行为的动词，如 "behave" 或 "treat"。这是句子结构与词汇选择错误。建议使用固定搭配：teach someone how to behave / treat others politely。

× In China especially, you have to show more refers to elderly people, but I don't think so.

✓ In China especially, you have to show more respect to elderly people, but I don't always agree.

原句有多处错误："show more refers to" 是错误搭配，应为 "show more respect to"（向……表示更多尊重）；"elderly people" 前后的介词用法改为 "to elderly people"。另外句尾的 "I don't think so" 不明确，改为 "I don't always agree" 更清楚。建议记住固定搭配：show respect to sb.。

× Yeah, of course. I think in the modern society we all have to collide with people that are civilized things the like some Barbarians in the. And it's in the jungle. We have to be alive.

✓ Yes, of course. I think in modern society we all have to interact with many different kinds of people, including those who are less civilized. It's like being in a jungle; we have to look out for ourselves.

原句问题包括词汇、句子结构和不完整的片段："collide with people" 用词错误，应该是 "interact with"（与……交往）；"that are civilized things the like some Barbarians in the." 完全不通，需要重组为 "including those who are less civilized"（包括那些不太文明的人）；原文后半句断裂且逻辑混乱，重写为比喻句 "It's like being in a jungle; we have to look out for ourselves." 建议：使用合适的动词（interact），注意从句结构和完整表达比喻意图。