纸— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 質問には、紙で作ったものがあるかを直接答えましょう。「play」ではなく「make/do origami」を使います。「native crafts by Olivi」は意味が伝わりにくいため、作った作品の例を挙げてください。

示例: Yes, I used to make origami when I was a child. I was quite good at folding paper into simple animals, such as cranes and dogs.

建议: 過去の習慣なので「I like」ではなく「I liked」を使いましょう。「fold paper into ...」の形にすると自然です。「bars」は何を指すのか不明なので、作ったものを正確に表す単語を選びましょう。

示例: I liked making origami when I was a child. I often folded paper into animals, especially dinosaurs, because I enjoyed seeing a flat sheet turn into a three-dimensional shape.

建议: 最初に「No」で答え、その後に理由を一つ説明しましょう。言い直しの重複を避け、「I send emails to my clients」のように簡潔に述べます。「physical letters are inconvenient in today’s digital society」のように、主語と動詞の一致にも注意してください。

示例: No, I rarely write physical letters because I usually email my clients. Email is much faster and more convenient in today’s digital world.

建议: 意見に理由と対比を加えられている点はよいです。ただし、「letters」は複数なので「are」を使い、「reliable messages」はこの文脈では不自然です。手紙が大切な思い出や気持ちを伝える点を具体的に説明すると、内容がより明確になります。

示例: Yes, I think some people still keep handwritten letters, especially those from family members or close friends. Although email is more convenient, a handwritten letter can feel more personal and become a meaningful keepsake.

建议: 「I don’t carry ...」のように主語を入れて、質問に直接答えましょう。「take notes on my laptop」が自然な表現です。また、「convenient for share」ではなく「convenient for sharing」とし、情報共有が便利な理由を簡潔に述べてください。

示例: No, I don’t usually carry paper and pens because I take my laptop with me. I use it to take notes and share information, which is more convenient for my work.

× I like origami folding papers when I was a child.

✓ I liked folding paper when I was a child.

The phrase when I was a child refers to a past time, so use the past-tense verb liked. Folding is the natural form after like here.

× I like origami folding papers when I was a child.

✓ I liked folding paper when I was a child.

Paper refers to the material used for origami, so it is normally uncountable and does not take a plural ending in this context. Say folding paper, not folding papers.

× I don't think so as I mentioned, handwritten letters is inconvenient in digital society.

✓ I don't think so. As I mentioned, handwritten letters are inconvenient in a digital society.

Handwritten letters is a plural subject, so it takes the plural verb are, not is.

× I don't think so as I mentioned, handwritten letters is inconvenient in digital society.

✓ I don't think so. As I mentioned, handwritten letters are inconvenient in a digital society.

Use the article a before the singular countable noun phrase digital society when referring to any digital society.

× But on the other hand when people want to send reliable messages, sometimes handwritten letters is better than emails.

✓ But, on the other hand, when people want to send reliable messages, handwritten letters are sometimes better than emails.

Handwritten letters is plural, so the verb must be are rather than is. Sometimes can also be placed before the adjective phrase better than emails.

× Don't carry papers and pens because I always bring my laptop when I go out.

✓ I don't carry paper and pens because I always bring my laptop when I go out.

The original sentence omits its subject. Add I to make the statement a complete sentence.

× Don't carry papers and pens because I always bring my laptop when I go out.

✓ I don't carry paper and pens because I always bring my laptop when I go out.

Paper refers to writing material in this context, so it is generally uncountable. Use paper rather than papers.

× I always take note by using laptops and it is convenient for share the information

✓ I always take notes using a laptop, and it is convenient for sharing information.

The usual expression is take notes, with notes in the plural. A laptop refers to one device here, so use the singular form with the article a.

× I always take note by using laptops and it is convenient for share the information

✓ I always take notes using a laptop, and it is convenient for sharing information.

After the preposition for, use a gerund ending in -ing. Therefore, say for sharing, not for share.