纸— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly, then give one or two clear examples. Use plural forms such as “a lot of crafts” and “greeting cards,” and correct the phrase “I like it a colorful decoration” to “I like colorful decorations.” Avoid repeating the same idea.

示例: Yes, I’ve made quite a few paper crafts. At school, I used to make greeting cards, and at home I enjoyed creating decorations for New Year. I liked using bright colors to make them festive.

建议: Your answer includes relevant details, but avoid starting a sentence with “And” and reduce repetition of “used to” and “my family.” Correct “Katoon” to “cartoons,” and use a linking phrase to connect the drawings with showing them to others.

示例: As a child, I loved drawing on paper, and I still enjoy it today. I often drew pets, family members, and characters from cartoons. I was proud of my colorful pictures and liked showing them to friends and relatives.

建议: This is a clear, direct answer with a relevant reason and example. To sound slightly more natural, say “use my phone or send emails” rather than “use my phone or email,” and consider varying “usually” if you expand the answer.

示例: Not really. These days, I usually use my phone or send emails because it’s much quicker. For instance, I text my friends and email relatives instead of writing letters by hand.

建议: Give a more balanced answer because some people do keep handwritten letters. Avoid repeating “I think,” and correct the missing verb in “still handwritten postcards” to “still send handwritten postcards.” Use “for birthdays” or “for a birthday.”

示例: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters, especially if they have sentimental value. However, most people now communicate by text or email because it’s faster and more convenient. People may also send handwritten postcards for birthdays or holidays.

建议: Your main point is clear, but correct “use mobile phone” to “use my mobile phone” and replace “safe spaces on my back” with “save space in my bag.” Avoid repeating “whenever,” and link your reason more smoothly.

示例: No, I don’t usually carry paper or pens. I use my mobile phone to take notes because it’s more convenient and saves space in my bag. I also prefer to travel light whenever possible.

× Oh yes, I have made lot of craft in my life.

✓ Oh yes, I have made a lot of crafts in my life.

The quantifier phrase is a lot of, not lot of. Use a before lot when referring to a large number or amount.

× Oh yes, I have made lot of craft in my life.

✓ Oh yes, I have made a lot of crafts in my life.

Craft is countable here, so it should be plural after a lot of because the speaker means multiple handmade items.

× When I was a child we usually made greeting carts at school and I enjoyed creating new year decoration in my home because I like it a colorful decoration.

✓ When I was a child, we usually made greeting carts at school, and I enjoyed creating New Year's decorations at home because I like colorful decorations.

The phrase like it a colorful decoration is not grammatically structured. Use like followed directly by the thing being liked, such as like colorful decorations. The correction also uses decorations to make the count noun plural.

× When I was a child we usually made greeting carts at school and I enjoyed creating new year decoration in my home because I like it a colorful decoration.

✓ When I was a child, we usually made greeting carts at school, and I enjoyed creating New Year's decorations at home because I like colorful decorations.

Decoration is a countable noun in this context. Use the plural decorations when referring to multiple decorations.

× But some people still handwritten postcards for birthday, for example.

✓ But some people still send handwritten postcards for birthdays, for example.

The original sentence has no main verb after the subject people. Add send to show what people do. Handwritten describes the postcards; it cannot function as the sentence's verb.

× But some people still handwritten postcards for birthday, for example.

✓ But some people still send handwritten postcards for birthdays, for example.

Use the plural birthdays to refer generally to occasions when people might send postcards. The correction also adds the missing verb send.

× No, I don't carry paper or pens. With me I use mobile phone to make notes since it's more convenient and safe spaces on my back and I prefer to travel light whenever whenever possible.

✓ No, I don't carry paper or pens. I use my mobile phone to make notes because it's more convenient and saves space in my bag, and I prefer to travel light whenever possible.

With me is awkwardly placed before the subject and verb; begin the clause with I use. The phrase safe spaces on my back does not form a grammatical clause, so use saves space in my bag. The repeated whenever is also removed.

× No, I don't carry paper or pens. With me I use mobile phone to make notes since it's more convenient and safe spaces on my back and I prefer to travel light whenever whenever possible.

✓ No, I don't carry paper or pens. I use my mobile phone to make notes because it's more convenient and saves space in my bag, and I prefer to travel light whenever possible.

Mobile phone is a singular count noun and needs a determiner. My mobile phone is appropriate here because the speaker is referring to their own phone.