纸— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答内容切题，使用了过去经历和现在情况进行对比，结构清晰。建议将“but I was at primary school”改为“but I made them when I was in primary school”，因为原句表达不自然；同时在列举活动时使用“such as”会更自然。最后可以补充一个具体作品或结果，使细节更丰富。

示例: Yes, I have, although I made them when I was in primary school. In art class, I made simple crafts such as paper cuttings and folded paper animals. I really enjoyed it because it was creative and relaxing, but I haven’t made anything like that in recent years.

建议: 回答直接并包含了两个具体活动，但“Is was”是明显的拼写和语法错误，应改为“It was”。“fold them into small toys like paper airplanes”可以改为“fold paper into small toys, such as paper airplanes”，表达更准确。建议增加一个原因或结果，例如说明画画和折纸为什么吸引你。

示例: When I was a child, I liked drawing on pieces of paper and folding paper into small toys, especially paper airplanes. It was a cheap and easy pastime, and I enjoyed seeing how a flat sheet of paper could turn into something fun. Sometimes I even had competitions with my friends to see whose airplane could fly the farthest.

建议: 回答观点明确，也给出了使用即时通信的原因。不过“send messages to on social media”存在语法错误，应改为“send messages on social media”或“send messages to people on social media”。“Nowadays”和“Currently”重复，可以删去一个；同时建议加入“because”连接原因，让逻辑更自然。

示例: I almost never write physical letters now because messaging apps are much faster and more convenient. I usually contact people by sending messages on social media or using instant-messaging apps. I would only write a letter on a special occasion, such as someone’s birthday or graduation.

建议: 回答结构完整，先回答观点，再解释原因，最后进行对比，连接自然。可以将“carry personal feelings”改为更地道的“express personal feelings”，并避免“keep”重复；此外，可以举一个具体例子，例如保存家人或朋友的信件，以进一步增强内容的具体性。

示例: Yes, I think some people still keep handwritten letters, especially letters from family members or close friends. They express personal feelings and often become precious memories because they are unique and personal. However, most young people prefer digital communication since it is quicker and easier to use.

建议: 回答简洁、切题，并使用了“but”进行转折，整体表达自然。建议将“take papers and pens outside”改为“carry paper and pens with me”，因为“paper”在这里通常用不可数形式；“help me to take notes”可简化为“let me take notes”。可以补充一个具体场景，例如参加考试、会议或旅行时会携带纸笔。

示例: Not really. I usually don’t carry paper and pens with me because my smartphone lets me take notes quickly. However, I bring them when I attend a meeting, go to an exam, or know that I need to write down something important.

× When I was a child, I liked to draw on pieces of paper. Sometimes I preferred to fold them into small toys like paper airplanes. Is was a cheap and easy pastime for me.

✓ When I was a child, I liked to draw on pieces of paper. Sometimes I preferred to fold them into small toys like paper airplanes. It was a cheap and easy pastime for me.

“Is”是一般现在时，不能用于描述过去的童年经历。这里应使用过去时“was”。另外，“It”指代前面提到的这种消遣活动。

× Currently, I just send messages to on social media to contact other people.

✓ Currently, I just send messages on social media to contact other people.

“send messages”后面直接使用“on social media”表示“在社交媒体上发送消息”。“to”和“on”不能连续放在这里，因此应删除多余的“to”。

× Normally I don't take papers and pens outside.

✓ Normally, I don't take paper and pens with me when I go out.

这里的“paper”表示作为书写材料的“纸”，通常是不可数名词，不能使用复数“papers”。“papers”通常表示多份文件或试卷。同时，“with me when I go out”比“outside”更自然地表达“外出时随身携带”。