纸— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答了问题并给出了具体例子，但语法、搭配和结尾表达不自然。应使用一般过去时或现在完成时：如“I made...”或“I have made...”，而不是“had made”。“make crafts with paper”比“make craft with paper”更自然；“he is very lucky”不能准确表达“他很喜欢/很开心”。删除无关的“Hello”，并用 because 引出原因。

示例: Yes, I have made several paper crafts because I enjoy doing creative activities. For example, I made a paper plant for my son last week, and he was really happy with it.

建议: 回答提到了和哥哥一起做手工，但没有清楚说明具体做什么。由于问题询问过去，应统一使用过去时，例如“liked”“made”和“played”。“premier”不是合适的词，可能想表达“paper crafts”或“paper airplanes”。建议先直接回答，再补充一起制作和玩耍的细节，并使用“and”或“because”连接。

示例: When I was a child, I liked making paper airplanes with my brother. We would decorate them and then fly them in the park. It was a simple activity, but we had a lot of fun together.

建议: 回答意图不够清晰，且有大量重复和不自然的表达。应直接说明“偶尔会写”，并区分写信和写笔记。“if I join a course, I will write the paper”不符合语境，可改为“if I take a course, I take handwritten notes”。“clear and personal”应使用形容词形式，且“because”后要说明具体原因。

示例: Yes, but only occasionally. I usually use messaging apps for everyday communication because they are faster. However, when I take a course, I still write notes by hand because it helps me remember the information better.

建议: 答案没有准确回应“人们是否保存手写信件”，而且大部分词语无法表达清楚的意思。“finished all my colors in our company”以及“play with handwriting”与问题无关。应先明确回答“Yes, many people do”，然后说明保存手写信件的原因，例如纪念意义、情感价值或特殊回忆。注意使用“personal”而不是“personally”来修饰名词。

示例: Yes, I think many people still keep handwritten letters, especially letters from family members. They may save them because the letters feel personal and remind them of important memories. In contrast, digital messages are much easier to lose or delete.

建议: 使用“It depends”是合适的，也提供了不同场景，但时态、词汇和句子结构需要改进。“today I go out”应改为“today I went out”或“when I go out”；“create the paper and pen”应改为“bring/carry paper and pens”；“text them”与携带纸笔的语境不符，应改为“bring them”。建议用 while/however 清楚连接两个情况。

示例: It depends on where I am going. If I am taking my son to the park, I usually leave them at home because I do not need them. However, if I am going to a class, I always carry a notebook and a couple of pens.

× Sure, I had made craft with paper and 'cause I like it.

✓ Sure, I have made crafts with paper because I like doing it.

这里是在回答“是否做过”某事，应该使用现在完成时“have made”，而不是过去完成时“had made”。过去完成时通常表示在过去某个时间点之前已经完成的动作。

× Sure, I had made craft with paper and 'cause I like it.

✓ Sure, I have made crafts with paper because I like doing it.

“craft”是可数名词。泛指做过不止一种纸艺作品时，应使用复数“crafts”。

× Sure, I had made craft with paper and 'cause I like it.

✓ Sure, I have made crafts with paper because I like doing it.

单数可数名词前需要冠词，例如“a craft”。本句改成复数“crafts”后，不需要使用冠词。正式表达中应使用“because”，而不是口语缩写“'cause”。

× When I was a child, I think I like, We often make premier with my brother and we play together.

✓ When I was a child, I think I liked making paper crafts with my brother, and we played together.

句子谈论的是童年时期的事情，因此相关动词应该使用过去时：“like”改为“liked”，“make”改为“made”，“play”改为“played”。

× When I was a child, I think I like, We often make premier with my brother and we play together.

✓ When I was a child, I think I liked making paper crafts with my brother, and we played together.

“like”后面可以接动名词，因此应说“liked making”，表示“喜欢做某事”。

× When I was a child, I think I like, We often make premier with my brother and we play together.

✓ When I was a child, I think I liked making paper crafts with my brother, and we played together.

原句在“I like”后突然开始新的句子，结构不完整。可以把内容连接成一个完整句子，并在并列分句之间使用“and”。

× It depends when I when I meeting, I will wait, I will write it.

✓ It depends. When I meet someone, I will write to them.

“when”后面表示将来条件时，通常使用一般现在时，因此应说“When I meet”，不能说“When I meeting”。“meet”后需要宾语，使用“someone”后句子意思更完整。

× It depends when I when I meeting, I will wait, I will write it.

✓ It depends. When I meet someone, I will write to them.

“when”引导的条件从句中不能直接使用“meeting”作为谓语。这里需要使用完整的谓语“meet”。

× This computer happen, but if I join a course, I will write the paper because it's clearly and personally.

✓ Since computers became common, if I join a course, I will write on paper because it is clear and personal.

表达“在纸上写”时，应使用介词“on”，所以应说“write on paper”，而不是“write the paper”。

× This computer happen, but if I join a course, I will write the paper because it's clearly and personally.

✓ Since computers became common, if I join a course, I will write on paper because it is clear and personal.

“computers became common”表示过去发生并影响现在的情况，因此“happen”应根据语境改为过去时“became”。

× This computer happen, but if I join a course, I will write the paper because it's clearly and personally.

✓ Since computers became common, if I join a course, I will write on paper because it is clear and personal.

“clear”和“personal”在这里描述“写在纸上”这种方式的特点，需要使用形容词。不能使用副词“clearly”和“personally”。

× Yes, I finished all my colors in our company, which they often play with handwriting because it's very special and it's personally.

✓ Yes, I think people in our company often write by hand because it is very special and personal.

“which they”在这个句子中重复使用了关系代词和主语，造成代词指代错误。可以直接使用“people in our company”作为主语。描述“handwriting”时使用“it”，指代应保持清楚。

× Yes, I finished all my colors in our company, which they often play with handwriting because it's very special and it's personally.

✓ Yes, I think people in our company often write by hand because it is very special and personal.

“personal”在这里表示“有个人特色的”，是形容词；“personally”是副词，不能放在系动词“is”后面作表语。因此应使用“personal”。

× Yes, I finished all my colors in our company, which they often play with handwriting because it's very special and it's personally.

✓ Yes, I think people in our company often write by hand because it is very special and personal.

原句包含多个成分，但缺少清晰的主语、谓语和逻辑连接，导致句子结构混乱。建议使用“people ... write ... because ...”的基本结构表达。

× For example, today I go out with my son, go to the park, I don't create the paper and pen, but if I go to the class to study, I will text them.

✓ For example, when I go out with my son and go to the park, I don't take paper and pens, but if I go to class to study, I will take them.

题目询问的是通常情况，因此使用“when I go out”比“today I go out”更合适。一般现在时“go”用于描述习惯或反复发生的情况。

× For example, today I go out with my son, go to the park, I don't create the paper and pen, but if I go to the class to study, I will text them.

✓ For example, when I go out with my son and go to the park, I don't take paper and pens, but if I go to class to study, I will take them.

这里泛指纸和笔这类物品，通常使用复数“paper and pens”。“pen”是可数名词，和“paper”并列时应使用复数“pens”。

× For example, today I go out with my son, go to the park, I don't create the paper and pen, but if I go to the class to study, I will text them.

✓ For example, when I go out with my son and go to the park, I don't take paper and pens, but if I go to class to study, I will take them.

“go to class”表示去上课，是固定表达，通常不使用“the”。只有指特定的教室或课程时才需要使用“the”。