纸— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and avoid the unclear phrase “ever since that was killed,” which makes the meaning difficult to understand. Use the natural expression “since I was a child” if that is what you mean. Also, say “aircraft” rather than “aircrafts,” and use more natural descriptions such as “paper cars” instead of “luxurious cars.” Add one specific detail about how you made or used the crafts.

示例: Yes, I made many paper crafts when I was a child. I folded paper into cars, military aircraft, and cargo ships. I especially enjoyed making the vehicles because I could create different designs and play with them afterward.

建议: The answer is relevant and well developed, but keep the tense consistent: use “I loved” and “I practiced” when talking about childhood. Say “practice my Mandarin and English handwriting on it” or “write in Mandarin and English,” rather than “on them.” You can make the response more natural by briefly explaining why calligraphy interested you.

示例: As a child, I preferred practicing calligraphy to making origami. I regularly practiced writing in Mandarin and English, and sometimes I even copied Arabic letters, although I couldn’t understand the language. I enjoyed it because the beautiful handwriting made ordinary pieces of paper look artistic.

建议: Give a clear direct answer and avoid unnecessary emphasis such as “still do write” and “nowadays” together. The second sentence should be joined with a linking word or divided into two sentences. Also, “I hope my mother appreciates my handwriting” is more natural than “will appreciate,” and you can specify when you leave her notes.

示例: Yes, I still write physical letters and handwritten notes. I usually leave short notes for my mother at home because I hope she appreciates my handwriting. It feels more personal than sending her a quick text message.

建议: Use the correct phrase “handwritten letters,” not “countriting letters,” and avoid beginning a sentence with “Because” when it is not connected to the previous sentence. “For communication purposes” and “for artistic reasons” are more natural expressions. Your main idea is clear, but explain more specifically who keeps these letters or why they value them.

示例: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters, although they are no longer used mainly for communication. In my opinion, people preserve them because they have artistic or sentimental value. For example, a beautifully written letter from a family member can become a meaningful keepsake.

建议: Answer more naturally with “when I go out” and correct the unclear product names and phrases. You may mean “a Lamy pen from Germany” and “a Jabin pen from Japan,” but make sure the names are accurate. Replace “twist my handwriting” with “practice my handwriting” or “write calligraphy.” Explain briefly what you use the paper and pens for.

示例: Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and a couple of pens when I go out. I use them to practice calligraphy whenever I have some free time, such as while waiting for a bus. I’m especially fond of my Lamy pen because it writes smoothly.

× I turned paper into luxurious cars, magnificent military aircrafts as well as large cargo container ships.

✓ I turned paper into luxurious cars, magnificent military aircraft, as well as large cargo container ships.

Aircraft has the same form in both the singular and plural. Do not add -s when referring to more than one aircraft. A comma before as well as also improves the sentence's readability.

× My favorite thing to do with paper was actually practicing my calligraphy instead of origami. I love to practice my Mandarin and English handwriting on them, and occasionally I even tried Arabic handwriting on paper as well, even though I didn't understand any Arabic at all.

✓ My favorite thing to do with paper was actually practicing my calligraphy instead of origami. I loved practicing my Mandarin and English handwriting on paper, and occasionally I even tried Arabic handwriting on paper as well, even though I didn't understand any Arabic at all.

The question asks about activities during childhood, so the verbs should be in the past tense. Change love to loved to keep the time reference consistent with tried and didn't understand.

× My favorite thing to do with paper was actually practicing my calligraphy instead of origami. I love to practice my Mandarin and English handwriting on them, and occasionally I even tried Arabic handwriting on paper as well, even though I didn't understand any Arabic at all.

✓ My favorite thing to do with paper was actually practicing my calligraphy instead of origami. I loved practicing my Mandarin and English handwriting on paper, and occasionally I even tried Arabic handwriting on paper as well, even though I didn't understand any Arabic at all.

Paper is an uncountable noun in this context, so it should not be replaced by the plural pronoun them. Repeat paper or use the singular pronoun it when referring to paper.

× Yes I still do write physical letters nowadays. I hope that my mother will appreciate my handwriting, I love to leave handwritten notes to my mother.

✓ Yes, I still write physical letters nowadays. I hope that my mother will appreciate my handwriting, and I love to leave handwritten notes for her.

The second sentence contains a comma splice: two independent clauses are joined only with a comma. Use a coordinating conjunction such as and, or separate the clauses with a full stop. I also removed the unnecessary do because still write is the natural structure here.

× Yes, people still keep countriting letters today, but not for communicational purposes. Because in my opinion, calligraphy is an important form of art. People just want to keep them for artistic purposes.

✓ Yes, people still keep countriting letters today, but not for communicational purposes, because, in my opinion, calligraphy is an important form of art. People just want to keep them for artistic purposes.

The sentence beginning with Because is a dependent clause and cannot stand alone as a complete sentence. Join it to the preceding independent clause to form a complete sentence. The unusual word countriting is not corrected because it is a vocabulary or word-choice problem, not one of the listed grammar types.

× My favourite pens include a lamin made from Germany and some job pin made from Japan.

✓ My favourite pens include a lamin made in Germany and some job pin made in Japan.

Use made in when referring to the country where a product was manufactured. Use made from when describing the material from which something is produced, such as made from wood.

× My favourite pens include a lamin made from Germany and some job pin made from Japan.

✓ My favourite pens include a lamin made from Germany and some job pins made from Japan.

Some is generally used with plural countable nouns. Since some refers to more than one pen, the following noun should be plural: pins. The word choices lamin and job pin are not corrected because they are vocabulary problems rather than problems in the listed grammar categories.