纸— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答基本直接，但有较多语法和表达问题。应使用复数形式“paper crafts”，并说“I’m not very good at art”。“Singho one”含义不清，可能想表达“a single one”或某种具体纸艺；“I found this difficult”应改为“I found it difficult”。此外，句子过长，建议用“However”连接转折，并补充一个具体的纸艺例子。

示例: Not really. I haven’t made many paper crafts because I’m not very good at art. I usually prefer sports or reading, although I once tried making a paper flower. However, I found it quite difficult.

建议: 内容具体，也解释了原因，整体结构较好。需要注意时态一致：过去经历应使用“loved”，而不是“love”。“a scenery”不自然，应说“scenery”或“a scene”；“a trees”应改为“trees”或“a tree”。可以加入“because”或“which”使细节衔接更自然。

示例: When I was a child, I loved drawing on paper, especially scenes outside my window. I often sketched the trees and a small house near my home because it helped me relax and use my imagination.

建议: 回答观点明确，也提供了个人经历，但存在明显语法问题。“Actually, no”比“Actually not”更自然；“using social media ... is”需要重组为“Social media is...”。“when I was living going abroad”应改为“when I was living abroad”，并且过去经历中的“want”应改为“wanted”。建议先直接回答，再说明原因和例子。

示例: No, I don’t. I usually use social media to keep in touch with my family and friends because it is faster and more convenient. However, I wrote a physical letter once when I was living abroad because I wanted to send my relatives something personal.

建议: 回答直接，并给出了原因和例子，但观点过于绝对。“I don’t think so”容易理解为人们完全不保存信件，建议改为“Not as many as before”。“most of people”应改为“most people”，并在“Nowadays”后加逗号。可以承认少数人仍会保存有纪念意义的信件，使回答更自然、更有层次。

示例: Not as many as before. Nowadays, most people use instant messaging and social media because they are more convenient. However, some people still keep handwritten letters if they have sentimental value, such as letters from family members.

建议: 回答包含具体场景和物品，但有明显的重复、停顿和搭配错误。“in my back”应改为“in my bag”或“in my backpack”；“At the airport Or”应改为“At the airport, for example”。避免重复“I bring”以及“or or”，并使用更自然的表达“sign forms or documents”。

示例: Yes, I usually carry a pen, especially when I travel abroad. For example, I may need it at the airport to sign a form or fill in a document. I also carry a small notebook for writing down important information.

× I haven't made many paper craft because I'm not very good at art.

✓ I haven't made many paper crafts because I'm not very good at art.

many 后面必须接可数名词复数形式，因此 craft 要改为 crafts。建议记住：many + 可数名词复数。

× I usually avoid them and prefer other activities such as sport or reading a lot although I once tried Singho one but I found this difficult.

✓ I usually avoid them and prefer other activities such as sport or reading a lot, although I once tried making one but I found this difficult.

try 后面表示“尝试做某事”时，通常使用 try + 动词-ing 形式，所以 tried Singho one 应改为 tried making one。

× I usually avoid them and prefer other activities such as sport or reading a lot although I once tried Singho one but I found this difficult.

✓ I usually avoid them and prefer other activities such as sport or reading a lot, although I once tried making one and found this difficult.

although 和 but 不能在同一个让步结构中同时使用。可以使用 although...，也可以使用..., but...。本句使用 although，因此删除 but。

× I usually avoid them and prefer other activities such as sport or reading a lot although I once tried Singho one but I found this difficult.

✓ I usually avoid them and prefer other activities such as sport or reading a lot, although I once tried making one and found it difficult.

这里的 it 指代前面提到的 craft，是一个已经提到的具体事物，因此应使用 it，而不是 this。

× When I was a child I always drew on paper, usually sketching a scenery outside the window. I love drawing a trees and a house near my home because it helped me relax and use my imagination.

✓ When I was a child, I always drew on paper, usually sketching scenery outside the window. I loved drawing trees and a house near my home because it helped me relax and use my imagination.

整段描述的是童年时期的习惯，主要时间背景是过去，所以 love 应改为过去式 loved。描述过去经历时，要保持动词时态一致。

× When I was a child I always drew on paper, usually sketching a scenery outside the window. I love drawing a trees and a house near my home because it helped me relax and use my imagination.

✓ When I was a child, I always drew on paper, usually sketching scenery outside the window. I loved drawing trees and a house near my home because it helped me relax and use my imagination.

scenery 是不可数名词，通常不能与 a 连用；trees 是复数名词，也不能使用 a。应分别改为 scenery 和 trees。

× When I was a child I always drew on paper, usually sketching a scenery outside the window. I love drawing a trees and a house near my home because it helped me relax and use my imagination.

✓ When I was a child, I always drew on paper, usually sketching scenery outside the window. I loved drawing trees and a house near my home because it helped me relax and use my imagination.

trees 是复数形式，表示不止一棵树，因此不能使用单数冠词 a。应使用 trees，或改成 a tree。

× Actually not because I normally use social media to keep in touch with my family and friends is much more convenient and faster.

✓ Actually, no, because using social media to keep in touch with my family and friends is much more convenient and faster.

原句中 use social media... 不能直接充当主语。需要将动词短语改为动名词短语 using social media...，使整个句子结构完整。

× I only wrote a physical letter once when I was living going abroad because I want to send something personal to my relatives.

✓ I only wrote a physical letter once when I was living abroad because I wanted to send something personal to my relatives.

letter 是可数名词单数，前面需要使用 a。原句已经使用了 a physical letter，这一项实际上没有错误；更自然的完整修正见本句中的其他语法修改。

× I only wrote a physical letter once when I was living going abroad because I want to send something personal to my relatives.

✓ I only wrote a physical letter once when I was living abroad because I wanted to send something personal to my relatives.

living going abroad 结构错误。表示“居住在国外”应使用 living abroad，不能在 living 后再接 going。建议区分 live abroad（居住在国外）和 go abroad（去国外）。

× I only wrote a physical letter once when I was living going abroad because I want to send something personal to my relatives.

✓ I only wrote a physical letter once when I was living abroad because I wanted to send something personal to my relatives.

wrote 和 was living 都描述过去发生的事情，因此 want 也应使用过去式 wanted。描述过去事件时，相关动词通常要保持过去时。

× I don't think so nowadays digital communication like social media is much more convenient.

✓ I don't think so. Nowadays, digital communication such as social media is much more convenient.

原句把 I don't think so 和后面的陈述直接连接，句子边界不清楚。应在 so 后使用句号，并在 Nowadays 后加逗号，使两个完整句子结构清晰。

× So most of people no longer keep handwritten letters.

✓ So most people no longer keep handwritten letters.

most 后面直接接复数可数名词时，不使用 of。应说 most people；只有在特指某个群体时才使用 most of the people。

× Yes, I always carry a pen in my back especially when I go abroad.

✓ Yes, I always carry a pen in my bag, especially when I go abroad.

表示把笔放在包里，应使用 in my bag。in my back 表示“在我的背部”，不符合句意。

× So I bring I always bring a pen and I also keep a small notebook for notes.

✓ So I always bring a pen, and I also keep a small notebook for notes.

原句重复了主语和谓语结构 bring I always bring，导致句子结构错误。删除多余的 I bring，只保留 I always bring。