纸— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答基本相关，但开头的时态和表达不自然。应使用过去时，例如“when I was in primary school”，并具体说明做过什么纸艺，如折纸、剪纸或纸花。注意“those years”应改为“back then”，“a photo about it”应改为“a photo of it”。最后可以说明为什么这段经历令人难忘。

示例: Yes, I made some paper crafts when I was in primary school. I remember making a paper flower and decorating it with colorful pens. I still have a photo of it, so it remains a memorable childhood experience.

建议: 内容回答了问题，也提供了原因，但动词形式和句子结构需要改进。“I like write”应为“I liked writing”，“drawing and cut”应保持平行结构，如“drawing pictures and cutting paper”。建议先直接说明喜欢做什么，再用“because”补充具体好处，并使用“in my free time”。

示例: As a child, I liked writing short stories, drawing pictures, and cutting out different shapes from paper. I enjoyed these activities because they allowed me to use my imagination. They were also a relaxing way to spend my free time.

建议: 回答没有准确回应“是否仍然写信”，而是说“从未读过实体信件”。应直接回答“No, I don't”，然后解释现在主要使用短信或电子邮件。表达“younger vocation”“the older one”和“roll the physical letters”不正确，建议使用“younger generation”“older generations”和“write/send letters”。

示例: No, I don't write physical letters anymore. I belong to a younger generation, so I usually use messaging apps or email instead. My parents used to write letters occasionally, but I have never really developed that habit.

建议: 回答有明确观点和原因，但问题问的是“人们是否保存手写信”，而你主要谈到了自己是否写信，因此需要更直接地讨论人们的行为。不要重复使用“but”；可以用“Although”“nowadays”和“as a result”组织逻辑。“raise the handwritten letters”应改为“write or keep handwritten letters”。

示例: Some people still keep handwritten letters, especially older people, because they have sentimental value. However, most people rarely write them nowadays, since texting and email are much faster and more convenient. As a result, handwritten letters have become less common.

建议: 回答的核心观点清楚，即不常携带纸笔，但语法和结尾表达不完整。可以直接说“I don't usually carry them”，并说明手机备忘录可以替代纸笔。注意“the application which called notebook”应改为“an app called Notes”，“when I play outside”在此语境中不自然，可改为“when I go out”。

示例: No, I don't usually carry paper and pens when I go out. If I need to take notes, I use an app called Notes on my phone instead. It is more convenient because I always have my phone with me.

× Yeah, it's in the primary school actually.

✓ Yeah, I did. It was in primary school, actually.

问题发生在过去（上小学时），所以不能使用现在时“it's”。回答过去的经历时，应使用过去时，例如“I did”和“It was”。

× I couldn't remember what I did that years, but I had a photo about it and I thought it's a very memorable experience.

✓ I couldn't remember what I did that year, but I had a photo of it, and I thought it was a very memorable experience.

“that”后面通常接单数名词，因此应说“that year”，不能说“that years”。另外，“thought”是过去时，后面的“is”也应改为过去时“was”。“a photo of it”比“a photo about it”更符合英语习惯。

× I couldn't remember what I did that years, but I had a photo about it and I thought it's a very memorable experience.

✓ I couldn't remember what I did that year, but I had a photo of it, and I thought it was a very memorable experience.

主句使用了过去时“thought”，因此宾语从句中应使用过去时“was”，保持时态一致。

× I like write the stories that I want to write on the paper or drawing and cut the paper.

✓ I like writing stories that I want to write on paper, drawing, and cutting paper.

“like”后面可以接动名词，所以“write”应改为“writing”。并列结构中的动词形式应保持一致，因此应使用“writing, drawing, and cutting”。

× Uh, it's interesting because it can improve my creativity and also gives me a hobby in the free time.

✓ It’s interesting because it can improve my creativity and also give me a hobby in my free time.

情态动词“can”后面必须接动词原形，因此“gives”应改为“give”。例如：“can improve and give”。

× Uh, it's interesting because it can improve my creativity and also gives me a hobby in the free time.

✓ It’s interesting because it can improve my creativity and also give me a hobby in my free time.

表示“在我的空闲时间”时，应使用“in my free time”，而不是“in the free time”。“free time”前使用物主代词“my”更自然。

× No, I never read the physical letters.

✓ No, I never write physical letters.

问题询问的是是否仍然写实体信，而不是是否阅读实体信。因此应使用与问题一致的动词“write”。一般现在时“never write”用于表达目前的习惯或事实。

× Umm this is maybe because I'm the younger vocation so the older one such as my mom and my father, they roll the physical letters before but umm I never touched them.

✓ Maybe this is because I’m from the younger generation. Older people, such as my mother and father, used to write physical letters, but I never touched them.

“before”表示过去的习惯，因此应使用“used to write”，不能使用现在时“roll”。“used to”后面必须接动词原形“write”。

× Umm this is maybe because I'm the younger vocation so the older one such as my mom and my father, they roll the physical letters before but umm I never touched them.

✓ Maybe this is because I’m from the younger generation. Older people, such as my mother and father, used to write physical letters, but I never touched them.

“the older one”是单数代词，但后面列举的是多人“my mother and father”，因此应使用复数表达“older people”。同时，避免在同一个主语后重复使用代词，例如“older people ... they”。

× No, I never try the handwritten letters, but I learn how to write them in school, but I never send them to others because for now we have the phone and the Internet is so popular, we don't need to raise the handwritten letters.

✓ No, I’ve never tried writing handwritten letters, but I learned how to write them at school. I’ve never sent them to anyone because we have phones now and the Internet is so popular that we don’t need to write handwritten letters.

“have never”后面必须接过去分词，因此“try”应改为“tried”，“send”应改为“sent”。“writing”表示“写信”这一活动，比“try the letters”更准确。

× No, I never try the handwritten letters, but I learn how to write them in school, but I never send them to others because for now we have the phone and the Internet is so popular, we don't need to raise the handwritten letters.

✓ No, I’ve never tried writing handwritten letters, but I learned how to write them at school. I’ve never sent them to anyone because we have phones now and the Internet is so popular that we don’t need to write handwritten letters.

“learn how to write them in school”描述过去在学校学会的事情，应使用过去时“learned”。“at school”是更正确的地点表达。

× No, I never try the handwritten letters, but I learn how to write them in school, but I never send them to others because for now we have the phone and the Internet is so popular, we don't need to raise the handwritten letters.

✓ No, I’ve never tried writing handwritten letters, but I learned how to write them at school. I’ve never sent them to anyone because we have phones now and the Internet is so popular that we don’t need to write handwritten letters.

“we have”后面表示泛指的手机，应使用复数“phones”，而不是单数“the phone”。泛指一类事物时通常使用复数形式。

× No, I never try the handwritten letters, but I learn how to write them in school, but I never send them to others because for now we have the phone and the Internet is so popular, we don't need to raise the handwritten letters.

✓ No, I’ve never tried writing handwritten letters, but I learned how to write them at school. I’ve never sent them to anyone because we have phones now and the Internet is so popular that we don’t need to write handwritten letters.

“handwritten letters”在这里是泛指，不需要使用定冠词“the”。“phones”也是泛指手机，因此不应说“the phone”。

× No, I never try the handwritten letters, but I learn how to write them in school, but I never send them to others because for now we have the phone and the Internet is so popular, we don't need to raise the handwritten letters.

✓ No, I’ve never tried writing handwritten letters, but I learned how to write them at school. I’ve never sent them to anyone because we have phones now and the Internet is so popular that we don’t need to write handwritten letters.

原句使用多个“but”连接许多完整句子，结构过长且不清晰。应拆分成两个句子，并使用“so ... that ...”连接因果关系，使表达更清楚。

× Now if I need to take notes at school or there's something important when I play outside, I can write them on my phone, such as the application which called notebook.

✓ Now, if I need to take notes at school or if there’s something important when I’m outside, I can write them on my phone, using an application called Notebook.

“something important”是单数概念，后面应使用单数代词“it”，而“notes”是复数时可以使用“them”。这里为了避免指代不清，改写为“using an application called Notebook”。

× Now if I need to take notes at school or there's something important when I play outside, I can write them on my phone, such as the application which called notebook.

✓ Now, if I need to take notes at school or if there’s something important when I’m outside, I can write them on my phone, using an application that is called Notebook.

“application”是“被称为Notebook”的对象，需要使用被动语态“is called”。不能说“which called”，因为被动语态中必须有助动词“is”。

× Now if I need to take notes at school or there's something important when I play outside, I can write them on my phone, such as the application which called notebook.

✓ Now, if I need to take notes at school or if there’s something important when I’m outside, I can write them on my phone, using an application called Notebook.

“application”是第一次提到的可数名词，前面应使用不定冠词“an”，而不是定冠词“the”。因为“application”以元音音素开头，所以使用“an”。

× So I didn't they're not necessary.

✓ So I don’t think they’re necessary.

“I didn't they're”不是完整且正确的英语句子。表达“我认为它们没有必要”时，应使用“I don’t think they’re necessary”。其中“they’re”是“they are”的缩写，指代前面的纸和笔。