纸— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and use accurate vocabulary. The phrases “paper plain,” “pour the same for plains,” and “parry ground” are unclear; the intended words are probably “paper planes,” “fold them,” and “playground.” Also, keep the tense consistent: use the past tense when describing childhood activities. Avoid repeating the same idea and organize the answer with a topic sentence followed by one or two specific details.

示例: Yes, I used to make paper planes when I was a child. I would fold them and give them to my friends so that we could fly them in the playground. It was a fun and inexpensive activity, and we often tried to improve our designs to make the planes fly farther.

建议: Begin with a clear answer, such as “I liked making paper planes.” Correct the grammar by using “used to” or the past tense instead of “I use,” and use “flying them” rather than “wasting them.” Complete the final sentence and add a specific detail about how you enjoyed this activity with your friends. Use a linking word such as “because” or “so” to connect your ideas.

示例: When I was a child, I liked making paper planes. I used to fly them with my friends in the playground because it was fun and inexpensive. We sometimes had competitions to see whose plane could fly the farthest.

建议: Use the correct structure “prefer writing” or “prefer to write.” Several expressions are unclear, including “pieces lecture,” “a fit,” and “deliver my sinner”; use precise phrases such as “physical letters,” “more personal,” and “express my feelings.” Answer the question naturally and explain when or why you write letters, rather than making a general statement about relationships.

示例: Yes, I still prefer writing physical letters occasionally because they feel more personal than text messages. I usually write them on birthdays or other special occasions to express my feelings. Although messaging is faster, a handwritten letter seems more thoughtful.

建议: Give a direct answer and use the correct vocabulary: “handwritten letters,” “special occasions,” “write letters,” “emotions,” and “loved ones.” The current answer contains several unclear or incorrect words, such as “water,” “white water,” and “shoes,” which make the meaning difficult to understand. Improve the structure by giving one example, such as keeping a birthday letter or a note from a family member.

示例: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters, especially if they are connected to an important memory. For example, they might save a birthday card or a letter from a family member. These letters allow people to preserve their emotions and remember their loved ones.

建议: Answer with the correct nouns “paper and pens,” not “paper or pants.” Also, “take notes on my palm” and “using my pon” are unclear; say “take notes on my phone.” Explain the contrast clearly: you do not carry stationery because your phone is more convenient. Use a complete final sentence and avoid repeating the idea of solving problems.

示例: No, I usually don’t carry paper and pens when I go out because I can take notes on my phone. It is more convenient, and I always have it with me. However, I sometimes carry a small notebook when I attend a meeting or travel.

× Yes, I used to enjoy making paper plain when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I used to enjoy making paper planes when I was a child.

The plural noun planes is needed because the speaker is talking about making more than one paper plane. Use a plural noun when referring to multiple objects.

× It is fun and inexpensive and we love trying to improve our design to make them fly further.

✓ It was fun and inexpensive, and we loved trying to improve our designs to make them fly farther.

The answer describes activities in childhood, so the past tense was is more appropriate than is, and loved is more appropriate than love. The plural noun designs agrees with them.

× It is fun and inexpensive and we love trying to improve our design to make them fly further.

✓ It was fun and inexpensive, and we loved trying to improve our designs to make them fly farther.

The pronoun them refers to multiple paper planes, so the related noun should normally be plural: designs. Pay attention to whether the noun refers to one item or several items.

× When I was a child I did like to make a paper plane because I use it to enjoy wasting them with my friends in the playground.

✓ When I was a child, I liked making paper planes because I used to enjoy flying them with my friends in the playground.

The whole experience happened in the past. Therefore, use used to or liked instead of the present-tense verb use. Used to is especially useful for describing repeated past habits.

× When I was a child I did like to make a paper plane because I use it to enjoy wasting them with my friends in the playground.

✓ When I was a child, I liked making paper planes because I used to enjoy flying them with my friends in the playground.

The verb enjoy is followed by a gerund, or verb plus -ing. Therefore, say enjoy flying, not enjoy fly or enjoy to fly.

× It was very fun and inexpensive so we enjoyed

✓ It was very fun and inexpensive, so we enjoyed it.

The verb enjoyed needs an object in this sentence. Adding it completes the meaning and makes the sentence grammatically complete. A comma before so also clearly separates the two clauses.

× Yes, I still prefer write pieces lecture rather than sending a message because it is more romantic for relationship with each other and it's a fit to deliver my sinner.

✓ Yes, I still prefer writing physical letters to sending messages because it is more romantic in a relationship and a better way to express my feelings.

Prefer can be followed by a gerund when comparing two activities: prefer writing to sending. The verb after prefer should therefore be writing, not write.

× Yes, I still prefer write pieces lecture rather than sending a message because it is more romantic for relationship with each other and it's a fit to deliver my sinner.

✓ Yes, I still prefer writing physical letters to sending messages because it is more romantic in a relationship and a better way to express my feelings.

When comparing two activities after prefer, use the pattern prefer A to B. Also, the natural preposition is in a relationship, not for a relationship.

× Yes, many people still keep handwritten water today for in special occasions for example, many people use it to white water on paper to express their emotion to their shoes.

✓ Yes, many people still keep handwritten letters today, especially for special occasions. For example, many people use them to write on paper and express their emotions to their loved ones.

Use on with occasions when referring to a particular event or time: on special occasions. The preposition for in the original phrase is incorrect. The sentence is also divided to avoid joining too many clauses together.

× Yes, many people still keep handwritten water today for in special occasions for example, many people use it to white water on paper to express their emotion to their shoes.

✓ Yes, many people still keep handwritten letters today, especially for special occasions. For example, many people use them to write on paper and express their emotions to their loved ones.

The pronoun them refers to multiple handwritten letters, so it must be plural. Emotions is also plural because people may express more than one feeling.

× Yes, many people still keep handwritten water today for in special occasions for example, many people use it to white water on paper to express their emotion to their shoes.

✓ Yes, many people still keep handwritten letters today, especially for special occasions. For example, many people use them to write on paper and express their emotions to their loved ones.

Use the plural pronoun them because it refers to handwritten letters. The singular pronoun it cannot correctly refer to multiple letters.

× Yes, many people still keep handwritten water today for in special occasions for example, many people use it to white water on paper to express their emotion to their shoes.

✓ Yes, many people still keep handwritten letters today, especially for special occasions. For example, many people use them to write on paper and express their emotions to their loved ones.

The original sentence contains several clauses joined without appropriate punctuation or structure. Separate the ideas into two sentences and use For example to introduce the second idea clearly.

× Now I usually don't carry paper or pants when I go out because I can take notes on my palm and user situations I can solve any problem using my pon without paper.

✓ Now, I usually do not carry paper or pens when I go out because I can take notes on my phone. In most situations, I can solve problems using my phone without paper.

The original sentence joins several ideas without a clear connector. Dividing it into two sentences makes the structure easier to understand. Use In most situations as a complete introductory phrase before the second idea.

× Now I usually don't carry paper or pants when I go out because I can take notes on my palm and user situations I can solve any problem using my pon without paper.

✓ Now, I usually do not carry paper or pens when I go out because I can take notes on my phone. In most situations, I can solve problems using my phone without paper.

The natural expression is in most situations, not user situations. Use in before situations when describing the circumstances in which something happens.