纸— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答方向是相关的，但句子没有完整结束，且存在明显语法和搭配问题，例如“crafts with papers”应改为“paper crafts”，“a famous hoster”应改为“a famous host”，“teaches us build”应改为“teaches us to make”。建议直接回答做过什么，再补充一个具体作品和制作过程；不要加入忘记主持人名字这一无关细节。

示例: Yes, I have. When I was a child, I often made paper crafts, especially simple animals and greeting cards. I learned some of these ideas from a popular TV show. It was enjoyable because I could create something interesting with very cheap materials.

建议: 虽然回答了“做什么”，但时态混乱且表达不清。“I liked to use paper to build”比“use the paper to build”更自然；“readed”应为“read”，“I will use”应改为“I would use”，“The house always built”应改为“I always built the house”。建议说明报纸的来源、使用的材料以及房子的外观，并使用because、so等连接词。

示例: As a child, I liked making small houses out of old newspapers. My parents often bought newspapers, so I reused them instead of throwing them away. I also used cardboard and glue to make the houses stronger. I usually designed them like castles because I loved fairy tales.

建议: 回答没有清楚说明现在是否写信，而且“write physical letters”和“read physical letters”被混淆。建议开头直接回答“Yes, I do”或“No, I don’t”，再用具体经历解释原因；注意主语和代词一致，例如朋友是复数时使用“they”，并避免“different functions”这种不够具体的表达。

示例: No, I don’t write physical letters very often anymore. I usually send messages because they are much faster and more convenient. However, I once received a handwritten letter from a friend who was leaving the company. It felt very personal, so I kept it as a memento.

建议: 观点基本相关，但句子过长，且“the population of the computers”表达错误，应使用“the popularity of computers and digital devices”。“use a handwrite”应改为“write by hand”，“the occasion”在此处可改为“the opportunity”。建议先给出明确观点，再解释数字设备的影响，最后补充手写信仍有纪念价值。

示例: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters, although they are less common than before. The popularity of computers and smartphones means that most people communicate digitally. However, handwritten letters can feel more personal and memorable. For example, people may keep letters from loved ones or special occasions.

建议: 回答有明确观点和理由，但存在数量、时态和句子结构问题。“a very small notebooks”应改为“a very small notebook”，“papers and pens”可改为“paper and a pen”；“thoughts that come to mind”更自然。建议说明为什么不用手机，并用一个具体例子收尾；同时避免最后一句不完整。

示例: Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and a pen when I go out. I use them to write down ideas as soon as they come to mind. Writing by hand helps me remember things better, and I do not need to unlock my phone. For example, I sometimes record ideas for my work or travel plans.

× When I was a kid, I made so many different crafts with papers because one of my favorite TV shows is making crafts by papers.

✓ When I was a kid, I made so many different crafts with paper because one of my favorite TV shows is making crafts by paper.

“Paper”表示制作材料时通常是不可数名词，不能使用复数“papers”。只有表示不同的报纸或纸张时，才可以使用“papers”。

× When I was a kid, I made so many different crafts with papers because one of my favorite TV shows is making crafts by papers.

✓ When I was a kid, I made so many different crafts with paper because one of my favorite TV shows is making crafts with paper.

表示“用纸制作”时，应使用介词“with”，表示使用某种材料；“by”通常表示方式、交通工具或动作的执行者。

× He always teaches us build a different

✓ He always teaches us to build different crafts.

“teach somebody”后面接动词时，通常使用“to + 动词原形”，不能直接接“build”。原句末尾缺少名词，导致句子不完整。

× My parents ordered a lot of papers.

✓ My parents ordered a lot of newspapers.

这里指父母看完的许多“报纸”，应使用可数名词“newspapers”。“Paper”通常表示纸这种材料，是不可数名词。

× After he readed the news, I will use the paper as a house and also with other materials.

✓ After they read the news, I would use the newspapers to build a house with other materials.

“read”的过去式拼写仍然是“read”，但读音不同，不能写成“readed”。因为整个故事发生在过去，“will use”应改为过去将来时“would use”。

× After he readed the news, I will use the paper as a house and also with other materials.

✓ After they read the news, I would use the newspapers to build a house with other materials.

“My parents”是复数，因此要用代词“they”，不能用单数“he”。代词必须与它所指代的名词在人称和数上保持一致。

× The house always built like a castle.

✓ The house was always built like a castle.

被动语态需要助动词“be”加过去分词。这里的过去时间背景下应使用“was built”，不能只使用“built”。

× I just I didn't remember last time I read physical letters.

✓ I just don't remember the last time I read physical letters.

“Honestly”后的内容是在表达现在的记忆状态，所以使用一般现在时“don't remember”。“I just”后不能重复使用主语“I”。

× I just I didn't remember last time I read physical letters.

✓ I just don't remember the last time I read physical letters.

固定表达是“the last time”，因为这里指特定的“上一次”。可数名词“time”在这种特指用法中需要使用定冠词“the”。

× The last time I received physical letters from my friends, he left this company.

✓ The last time I received physical letters from my friends, they had left the company.

“My friends”是复数，所以应使用“they”，不能使用“he”。如果强调朋友在收到信之前已经离开公司，可以使用过去完成时“had left”。

× The last time I received physical letters from my friends, he left this company.

✓ The last time I received physical letters from my friends, they had left the company.

“The company”表示双方都知道的特定公司，因此应使用定冠词“the”，而不是“this company”。

× I know that's kind of feeling.

✓ I know that's a kind of feeling.

“Kind”在这里是可数名词单数，前面需要不定冠词“a”。正确结构是“a kind of + 名词”。

× People just don't have the occasion to use a handwrite to express their feelings or their thoughts.

✓ People just don't have the occasion to use handwriting to express their feelings or thoughts.

“Handwrite”是动词，不能在“use”后直接作名词使用。表示书写这种活动时应使用不可数名词“handwriting”，不需要冠词；并列名词前的重复物主代词也可以省略。

× The population of the computers and digital devices not allow people to use more about handwriting letters.

✓ The popularity of computers and digital devices does not allow people to write handwritten letters.

主语中心词“popularity”是单数，因此谓语应使用“does not allow”。如果使用复数主语“computers and digital devices”，则应使用“do not allow”。

× The population of the computers and digital devices not allow people to use more about handwriting letters.

✓ The popularity of computers and digital devices does not allow people to write handwritten letters.

“Use more about handwriting letters”不是正确的英语搭配。表示“写手写信”时，应使用“write handwritten letters”。

× But as a kid they need to know.

✓ But as kids, they needed to know.

“As a kid”与复数主语“they”不一致，应改为“as kids”。由于上下文谈论童年时期，动词应使用过去式“needed”。

× But as a kid they need to know.

✓ But as kids, they needed to know.

“They”是复数代词，不能与单数短语“as a kid”搭配。应根据主语的数量使用“as kids”。

× I had a very small notebooks and pen to record the thoughts I have every time came from my mind.

✓ I had a very small notebook and a pen to record the thoughts that came to my mind.

“A”后面的可数名词必须是单数，所以应使用“a very small notebook”。“Pen”也是单数可数名词，前面需要加冠词“a”。

× I had a very small notebooks and pen to record the thoughts I have every time came from my mind.

✓ I had a very small notebook and a pen to record the thoughts that came to my mind.

单数可数名词“pen”前需要使用不定冠词“a”。此外，关系代词“that”可以连接“thoughts”和后面的从句。

× I had a very small notebooks and pen to record the thoughts I have every time came from my mind.

✓ I had a very small notebook and a pen to record the thoughts that came to my mind.

“every time came from my mind”缺少明确的主语和连接结构。表达“浮现在我脑海中的想法”时，可以使用完整的关系从句“that came to my mind”。

× Normally it will take nowhere or no place, so you have to remember it to use the notebook instead of your phone.

✓ Normally, the notebook takes up very little space, so you can use it instead of your phone.

这里是在说明笔记本通常的特点，应使用一般现在时“takes”，而不是“will take”。“Take up space”是表示“占空间”的正确搭配。

× Normally it will take nowhere or no place, so you have to remember it to use the notebook instead of your phone.

✓ Normally, the notebook takes up very little space, so you can use it instead of your phone.

原句中的“it”指代不清，而且前文的“thoughts”是复数，不能用单数代词“it”。改写后使用明确的名词“the notebook”和代词“it”，指代关系更清楚。

× And next time if you want to collect the idea

✓ And next time, if you want to collect ideas, you can write them down.

泛指多个想法时，应使用复数“ideas”。相应地，代词也应使用复数“them”。

× And next time if you want to collect the idea

✓ And next time, if you want to collect ideas, you can write them down.

原句只有“if”引导的条件从句，没有主句，因此句子不完整。需要补充主句，例如“you can write them down”。