纸— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and use the correct past-tense structure: “Yes, I did.” Use natural expressions such as “make paper crafts” and “showed me how to make them.” Avoid unclear phrases such as “how to detail did it” and “IFI.” Add one specific detail about the activity and explain how you felt about it.

示例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I made pop-up cards and paper flowers because my teacher showed me how to make them. I found the activity very relaxing and enjoyable, especially when I gave the crafts to my family.

建议: Your main idea is clear, but “create imagination” is not natural English; say “use my imagination” or “express my creativity.” Keep the answer in the past tense by changing “find” to “found.” Add a specific example of what you liked to draw to make the answer more developed.

示例: When I was a child, I loved drawing on paper. It allowed me to use my imagination, so I often drew houses, animals, and imaginary characters. I found it really enjoyable because I could create my own little stories.

建议: Give a clear negative answer and use the plural form “physical letters.” The phrase “very hard to live” is unclear; you probably mean “time-consuming” or “inconvenient.” Use “emails” or “electronic messages” instead of “electronic letters,” and replace “rewise” with “revise” or, more naturally here, “edit.” Add a brief comparison between letters and emails.

示例: No, I don’t. I rarely write physical letters because they are time-consuming and less convenient than emails. I prefer electronic messages because I can write, edit, and send them immediately.

建议: Avoid making an overly absolute claim such as “No, they don’t”; say “not many people do” to sound more accurate. Use “handwritten letters” and “electronic messages” correctly, and replace unclear phrases such as “they fires very easy easy” and “transfer to other people.” Explain that some people keep letters for sentimental reasons, which gives your answer a more balanced and specific response.

示例: Many people do not keep handwritten letters because they prefer electronic messages, which are faster and easier to send. However, some people still keep old letters from family members because they have sentimental value and remind them of special memories.

建议: Use a complete sentence with natural word order: “No, I don’t. I usually carry a tablet instead.” Clarify “go out or work on sites” by saying “when I go to work” or “when I work at different locations.” Replace “share the something I take note” with “share the notes I take.” Give one specific advantage of using a tablet, such as editing or sending notes quickly.

示例: No, I don’t. I usually carry a tablet instead, especially when I work at different locations. It is more convenient because I can take notes, edit them, and share them with my colleagues immediately.

× Yes, I have made pop up paper and flower paper when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I made pop-up paper crafts and paper flowers when I was a child.

The phrase when I was a child refers to a finished period in the past, so the simple past tense made is more appropriate than the present perfect have made.

× This is because my teacher taught me how to detail did it.

✓ This is because my teacher taught me how to make them in detail.

The structure how to detail did it is grammatically incorrect. After taught me, use how to + base verb. The unnecessary auxiliary did must be removed.

× IFI is very relaxed and very fun for me.

✓ I find it very relaxing and fun.

Relaxed describes a person's feeling, while relaxing describes something that causes that feeling. The correct structure is I find it..., not IFI is....

× This is because it helped me to create imagination and I find it very fun.

✓ This is because it helped me to use my imagination, and I found it very fun.

The answer describes a past childhood experience, so found should be used instead of find to keep the tense consistent.

× No I don't still write physical letter this is because I think it's very hard to live so I prefer to use electronic letter.

✓ No, I still don't write physical letters because I think they are difficult to write, so I prefer to use electronic letters.

The adverb still should be placed before the auxiliary verb don't: I still don't write. This sentence also needs conjunctions and punctuation to connect its ideas clearly.

× No I don't still write physical letter this is because I think it's very hard to live so I prefer to use electronic letter.

✓ No, I still don't write physical letters because I think they are difficult to write, so I prefer to use electronic letters.

Physical letters and electronic letters refer to letters in general, so the plural form letters is required rather than the singular form letter.

× No I don't still write physical letter this is because I think it's very hard to live so I prefer to use electronic letter.

✓ No, I still don't write physical letters because I think they are difficult to write, so I prefer to use electronic letters.

Several independent ideas were joined without appropriate punctuation or conjunctions. Use because and so to show the relationships between the ideas.

× It's very convenient to write and rewise it.

✓ It is very convenient to write and revise them.

The pronoun them correctly refers to the plural noun letters. A plural noun must be referred to by them rather than it.

× They use electronic letter instead of handwriting letters for today.

✓ They use electronic letters instead of handwritten letters nowadays.

Letters is countable and plural in this general statement, so both types of letters should be plural. The plural form also agrees with the general meaning of the sentence.

× They use electronic letter instead of handwriting letters for today.

✓ They use electronic letters instead of handwritten letters nowadays.

Handwritten is the correct past-participle adjective for letters written by hand. Handwriting is a noun or present-participle form and does not correctly modify letters here.

× They use electronic letter instead of handwriting letters for today.

✓ They use electronic letters instead of handwritten letters nowadays.

For today is not the natural expression for a general present-time meaning. Nowadays or today should be used without the preposition for.

× This is because they fires very easy easy and is very useful when they would like to transfer to other people.

✓ This is because they find it very easy and useful when they want to send letters to other people.

The subject they is plural, so it must be followed by the base-form verb find, not fires. The verb phrase find it also requires the object it before the adjectives.

× No, I don't I carry tablets when I go out or work on sites.

✓ No, I don't. I carry a tablet when I go out or work on sites.

The sentence contains two complete clauses joined without appropriate punctuation. Use a full stop after don't to separate the two sentences.

× This is because it is very convenient for me to share the something I take note to my colleagues and other people.

✓ This is because it is very convenient for me to share the things I take note of with my colleagues and other people.

Something is an indefinite pronoun and cannot normally be preceded by the definite article the. The noun phrase the things is grammatical when referring to specific notes or information.

× This is because it is very convenient for me to share the something I take note to my colleagues and other people.

✓ This is because it is very convenient for me to share the things I take note of with my colleagues and other people.

The correct expression is take note of something, not take note to something. Also, information is shared with people, so with is the appropriate preposition.