纸— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms), and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking word for clarity.

示例: Yes. I made many paper gifts when I was a child. For example, I folded paper flowers and small boxes to give to my mother, which always made me feel proud.

建议: Correct vocabulary and grammar (airplanes, fold not sew), keep it concise, and give a specific example with a linking word to explain why you did it.

示例: I liked folding paper airplanes as a child. Often, I would make different designs and give them to classmates during breaks because it was fun and helped me make friends.

建议: Make the reason clearer and grammatically correct. Use one linking word and a concise explanation of purpose or effect.

示例: Yes, I still write physical letters because writing by hand feels more personal and helps me express my true feelings to friends and family.

建议: Avoid filler words and correct compound nouns (handwritten). Start directly, use a linking word, and give a specific cultural example.

示例: Yes, many people here still keep handwritten letters. For instance, we often give birthday cards with personal messages that recipients keep as memories.

建议: Be concise and fix word choice errors (papers and pens, not pants). Start with a clear topic sentence, use a linking word to explain why, and give a specific example of how you use them.

示例: Yes, I always carry a notebook and pens because I'm a university student. For example, I take quick lecture notes and jot down ideas for assignments, which improves my academic work.

× Yes, I made a lot of gift with paper when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I made a lot of gifts with paper when I was a child.

The noun 'gift' should be plural 'gifts' because 'a lot of' requires a plural countable noun. Use plural form to match the quantifier. Suggestion: change 'gift' to 'gifts'.

× I usually used papers to fold some decorations to my mother and I felt a sense of achievement.

✓ I usually used paper to make some decorations for my mother and I felt a sense of achievement.

'Papers' is unnecessary; 'paper' as an uncountable material is correct. 'Fold some decorations to my mother' is wrong: use 'make' or 'fold decorations for my mother' and use preposition 'for' not 'to' when indicating the recipient. Also 'fold papers' can be 'fold paper' or 'fold paper into decorations'. Suggestion: use 'paper' and 'for'.

× I liked to fold papers to paper airplans when I was a child and I often sew those those paper airplants to my classmates during the lessons.

✓ I liked to fold paper into paper airplanes when I was a child and I often gave those paper airplanes to my classmates during lessons.

Multiple issues: 'papers to paper airplans' should be 'paper into paper airplanes' using 'into' to show transformation. 'Airplans' misspelled; use 'airplanes'. 'Sew' is incorrect verb; 'gave' (past tense of give) fits context. Also remove duplicate 'those'. Suggestion: use 'fold paper into paper airplanes' and 'gave'.

× Yes, I still write physical letters nowadays because I think if I write something on papers and give those papers to my friends or my family's members and let me receive my true emotions and what I want to say.

✓ Yes, I still write physical letters nowadays because I think if I write something on paper and give it to my friends or family members, I can express my true emotions and what I want to say.

Use 'paper' (uncountable) instead of 'papers'; 'give those papers to my friends or my family's members' is awkward — use 'it' or 'them' and 'family members' (no possessive). 'Let me receive' is incorrect; intended meaning is 'allow me to express' or 'help me express', so use 'I can express'. Also ensure verb tense/modal fits present habitual action. Suggestion: replace phrases as above and use 'express'.

× And yes, in my country a lot of people still keep hand writing letters today because we usually celebrate others' birthdays with a card and people may write something they want to convey to those people on the cards.

✓ Yes, in my country a lot of people still keep handwritten letters today because we usually celebrate others' birthdays with a card and people may write something they want to convey to those people on the cards.

Starting with 'And yes' is informal; 'hand writing letters' is wrong form — use the adjective 'handwritten'. The sentence structure otherwise is acceptable. Suggestion: use 'handwritten letters'.

× Yes, I carry papers and pens every day and I study at university right now so I need to take a lot of notes with my papers and pants and these tools help me a lot on my academic performances.

✓ Yes, I carry paper and pens every day and I study at university right now, so I need to take a lot of notes with my paper and pens, and these tools help me a lot with my academic performance.

Use 'paper' (uncountable) instead of 'papers' for material; the original 'pants' is a typo for 'pens'. 'Academic performances' is unnatural — use singular 'academic performance'. Use preposition 'with' not 'on' here. Suggestion: correct typos and use appropriate singular/uncountable forms and prepositions.'}]} নয়