纸— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 答えは直接的ですが、不正確な語彙（"grasswood paper"）や説明の繰り返しがあり、より自然で明確な表現にする余地があります。また、接続語を使って理由を明確にし、文を簡潔に保つと良いです。具体的には誤った単語を正し、1〜2文で完結する構成にしてください。

示例: I haven't really made paper crafts because paper is often too thin and fragile to hold a shape. Instead, I prefer working with fabric or wood because they’re more durable for crafting.

建议: 回答は主旨が伝わりますが、繰り返しや未完の文があり流暢さと文法で減点されます。過去形の一貫性を保ち、冗長な語句を省き、1〜2の具体的な例（例えば何を書いたか、どのくらいの頻度か）を付け加えてください。

示例: As a child, I enjoyed writing letters and practicing calligraphy because I took lessons. I used to write regularly, doing short essays and letters to family to improve my handwriting.

建议: 良い内容ですが、表現をもう少し自然にし、文のつながりを改善するとさらに良くなります。"write a dialogue"は少し不明瞭なので具体的に説明し、接続詞で理由をつなげ、短くまとめてください。

示例: Yes, I still write physical letters or short journal entries. For example, I write a short dialogue or journal paragraph every night, which helps me remember vocabulary and reflect on personal experiences.

建议: 考えは明確ですが、文法や語彙の誤りが多く、冗長で意味が取りにくい箇所があります。不要な言葉（"much more much"、"mask"）を削り、理由を簡潔にまとめ、具体例（例：メールやSNSの普及）を提示してください。

示例: I don't think many people keep handwritten letters nowadays because most communication is done via email or messaging apps. For instance, in cafes I usually see people using smartphones or laptops instead of writing by hand.

建议: 回答は明確で理由も述べられていますが、表現をもう少し自然にし、理由の説明を簡潔にするとさらに良くなります。また"disrespectful"の主張は具体例で補強すると説得力が増します。

示例: Yes, I always carry a notebook and pen when I go out. For example, I bring them to work because taking notes on a phone or laptop can be distracting, so handwriting is quieter and more polite in meetings.

× When I was a child, I like I liked to write letters on paper because I took calligraphy lessons when I was a child, so I like writing writing so I wrote a lot on my paper and I practised to

✓ When I was a child, I liked to write letters on paper because I took calligraphy lessons, so I wrote a lot and practised.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses and contains repetition. Use past tense consistently when referring to childhood actions (liked, took, wrote, practised). Remove redundant words and complete the verb phrase 'practised' with its object or leave it intransitive as 'practised' to be grammatical. Suggestion: maintain a single past tense narrative and eliminate duplicated words.

× For example, I write a dialogue every night and doing so helps me to remember vocabulary and personal experiences more effectively.

✓ For example, I write a dialogue every night, and doing so helps me remember vocabulary and personal experiences more effectively.

The gerund phrase 'doing so helps me to remember' is acceptable, but 'helps me remember' is more natural; remove the unnecessary 'to'. Keep parallel structure after 'helps'. Also add a comma before 'and' connecting two independent clauses.

× Actually I have never made any grasswood paper because it's very thin and fragile to hold shape.

✓ Actually, I have never made any grasswood paper because it is too thin and fragile to hold its shape.

Use 'too' to indicate excessive degree ('too thin'), and include the possessive 'its' for 'shape'. Also add comma after 'Actually' for natural pacing. These changes correct adjective/adverb usage and clarify meaning.

× So I prefer making with fabric or wood.

✓ So I prefer making them with fabric or wood.

The verb 'prefer' followed by 'making' needs an object ('them' referring to crafts) and the preposition 'with' introduces the materials. Adding 'them' clarifies what is being made and corrects the prepositional structure.

× When I was a child, I like I liked to write letters on paper because I took calligraphy lessons when I was a child, so I like writing writing so I wrote a lot on my paper and I practised to

✓ When I was a child, I liked to write letters on paper because I took calligraphy lessons, so I wrote a lot and practised.

Repeated sentence handled above: ensure past tense for past habits. Remove present tense 'like' and duplicates. Use 'liked' and 'wrote' for consistent past narration.

× I don't think people keep handwriting letters much more much anymore because when I go to a cafe I usually see people using computers or smartphones.

✓ I don't think people keep handwritten letters much anymore because when I go to a cafe I usually see people using computers or smartphones.

Use the adjective 'handwritten' to modify 'letters' rather than the verb form 'handwriting'. Remove the redundant 'much'. This corrects pronoun/word choice issues and redundancy.

× I rarely see people writing on paper and mask and in the present mask communication tool is email or message up.

✓ I rarely see people writing on paper; nowadays the main communication tools are email and messaging apps.

Original sentence is fragmented and contains unclear words like 'mask' and 'message up'. Reorganize into two clear clauses: one stating rarity of handwriting and one identifying common communication tools. Use 'nowadays' for present reference and correct nouns 'email' and 'messaging apps'.

× Yes, of course I always carry them when I go out. For example, when I go to my workplace, I always carry them, because taking notes on screens is kind of disrespectful to other employees.

✓ Yes, of course I always carry them when I go out. For example, when I go to my workplace, I always carry them because taking notes on screens is kind of disrespectful to other employees.

Remove the unnecessary comma before 'because' in the second sentence; the adverb placement and adjective usage are fine otherwise. The repetition of 'I always carry them' is acceptable for emphasis but could be varied for style.

× Have you made any crafts with paper?

✓ Have you made any crafts out of paper?

The preposition 'out of' or 'from' is more natural when describing materials used to make crafts. 'With paper' is not incorrect but 'out of paper' clarifies that paper is the material. This also addresses plurality: 'crafts' is fine.

× I don't think people keep handwriting letters much more much anymore because when I go to a cafe I usually see people using computers or smartphones.

✓ I don't think people keep handwritten letters much anymore because when I go to a cafe I usually see people using computers or smartphones.

No third person singular verb error in corrected sentence; change focuses on word choice as above. Ensure verbs agree with subjects in other contexts (e.g., 'people use').