纸— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 句子有时态、语法和用词错误，表达略显冗长且部分信息不够连贯。建议注意时态一致（描述过去事件用过去时），避免重复，使用连接词使句子更清晰。例如将三个句子简化为主题句+1-2个细节，并修正动词形式。

示例: I used to make paper crafts as a child. I often did paper-cutting and made little animals, like rabbits, because it was fun and helped me be creative. I also sometimes made festival decorations to give to my family.

建议: 表达中时态、动词形式和重复问题明显，信息重复（多次强调“when I was a child”）。建议用一到两句主题句说明喜好，接着用连接词补充具体例子并用正确时态与搭配。

示例: I loved drawing cartoon characters on paper when I was a child. I was a big fan of the Chinese cartoon Xiang Yu Hui Tai Long, so I often copied the main characters’ faces and scenes to practise my drawing.

建议: 时态混用与语法错误（例如 don't have → didn't have，use → used，each others → each other）。建议用一到两句回答当前情况，再用过去时简短说明过去的做法，注意人称和冠词。

示例: No, I don't write physical letters anymore. When I was a child my friends and I used to swap handwritten notes because we didn't have phones then, so it was our main way to keep in touch.

建议: 表达重复、语法和用词问题（例如 'are still a lot of people keep' 应为 'still keep', 'I'm the one of them' → 'I'm one of them', 'in a clearly way' → 'in a clear way'）。建议用主题句直接回答并用1-2个具体理由支持，使用连接词如 'because'。

示例: Yes, I think many people still keep handwritten letters, and I am one of them. I keep letters because handwriting feels personal and it helps me express feelings more clearly than digital messages.

建议: 回答未直接对应问题（问题是是否随身携带纸和笔，但回答谈写信和读贺卡），且有语法错误（mores → more, helps → help）。建议直接回答“是否携带”，并给出具体场景或频率作为支持，修正语法错误。

示例: Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and a pen when I go out. For example, I use them to write quick notes or to sign greeting cards for birthdays and special occasions because handwritten messages feel more personal.

× Sometimes I make decorations for festivals and gave them to my families.

✓ Sometimes I made decorations for festivals and gave them to my family.

问题类型: 5 (Past tense issue) 和 1 (Singular and plural issue)。句中有时态混用：开头用“Sometimes I make”现在时，而后文“gave”用过去式，且上下文在描述过去（When I was a child），应统一用过去时，故改为“made”。另外“my families”用法不正确，表示“家人”应使用不可数集合名词或复数名词“family”或“family members”；更自然为“my family”或“my family members”。建议在讲过去的事情时全文使用过去时，并使用“my family”来表示“我的家人”。

× So when I was a child I usually use paper to draw some cartoon characters.

✓ So when I was a child I usually used paper to draw some cartoon characters.

问题类型: 6 (Present tense issue)。句子在描述过去的习惯（When I was a child），却错误使用现在时“use”，应使用过去时“used”。建议把动词时态与时间状语保持一致。

× I'm really a big fan of a Chinese cartoon equals Xiang Yu Hui Tai Long, so I always draw the main characters on the paper when I was a child.

✓ I was really a big fan of a Chinese cartoon called Xiang Yu Hui Tai Long, so I always drew the main characters on paper when I was a child.

问题类型: 27 (Subject-verb agreement errors) 及 5 (Past tense issue) 和 26 (Sentence structure errors)。原句中“I’m really a big fan”与后文时间“when I was a child”时态不一致，应使用过去时“I was”。“equals”用法不当，介绍作品名称应使用“called”。动词“draw”在过去习惯应为“drew”。此外“on the paper”更自然为“on paper”。建议将全句统一为过去时，使用“called”来介绍作品名称，保持句子结构清晰。

× No, I don't write letters now but I used to do.

✓ No, I don't write letters now, but I used to.

问题类型: 4 (Modal verb usage) 与 26 (Sentence structure errors)。原句“used to do”后面缺少具体动词，且常用表达是“used to”表示过去常做某事。将句子改为“No, I don't write letters now, but I used to.” 更简洁准确。建议使用完整的固定表达“used to”来表示过去的习惯，不重复多余动词。

× When I was a child, my friend and I would swap letters to share what we did each day because we don't have phone at the time.

✓ When I was a child, my friend and I would swap letters to share what we did each day because we didn't have phones at the time.

问题类型: 5 (Past tense issue) 和 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions/words)。句中有时态不一致：主句描述过去应使用过去时“didn't have”而不是“don't have”。另外“phone”应使用复数或更自然的复数形式“phones”或不可数“a phone”视语境而定，且“at the time”前通常使用过去时态的否定。建议全句使用过去时并将“phone”改为复数形式或使用“a phone”。

× We can't send messages so we use this way to chat each others.

✓ We couldn't send messages, so we used this way to chat with each other.

问题类型: 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns) 及 5 (Past tense issue)。“can't/send”应与上下文过去时一致改为“couldn't”。“each others”不正确，正确应为“each other”。另外“use”改为过去时“used”，并在“chat”前加介词“with”。建议注意代词短语“each other”的固定形式并统一时态。

× Yes, of course, in my opinion, I think there are still a lot of people keep handwritten letters today and I'm the one of them.

✓ Yes, of course. In my opinion, I think there are still a lot of people who keep handwritten letters today, and I'm one of them.

问题类型: 1 (Singular and plural issue) 和 26 (Sentence structure errors)。原句缺少关系代词“who”连接定语从句；“I'm the one of them”不自然，正确应为“I'm one of them”。建议在“people”后加“who”，并将“the one of them”改为“one of them”。

× I think that the handwriting is very meaningful and we can share our feelings in a clearly way.

✓ I think that handwriting is very meaningful and we can share our feelings in a clear way.

问题类型: 13 (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs)。“clearly”是副词，但在此处需要形容词“clear”来修饰名词短语“a clear way”。此外“the handwriting”改为更一般的“handwriting”更自然。建议注意形容词与副词的用法区别；用“a clear way”表示“以清晰的方式”。

× Yes, I think many people still write handwritten letters and I'm one of them.

✓ Yes, I think many people still write handwritten letters, and I'm one of them.

问题类型: 6 (Present tense issue)（轻微标点和连词搭配）。原句语法总体正确，但缺少逗号使句子连接不够自然。建议在两部分之间加逗号。

× For example, I often read cards for birthdays or special occasions because handwritten notes feel mores personal and helps me express my feelings more clearly.

✓ For example, I often read cards for birthdays or special occasions because handwritten notes feel more personal and help me express my feelings more clearly.

问题类型: 13 (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs) 和 27 (Subject-verb agreement errors)。“mores”拼写错误，应为“more”。主语“handwritten notes”为复数，谓语动词应为“help”而不是“helps”。建议注意拼写并确保主谓一致。