纸— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms.

示例: Yes. I once made a layered paper birthday card for my best friend. For example, I cut several concentric flower shapes and glued them in layers to create a 3D effect, and then I wrote a short heartfelt message inside.

建议: Use correct tense and fewer redundant words. Give a clear topic sentence in past tense, then one or two specific examples linked by a connector.

示例: As a child, I enjoyed making paper crafts. For instance, I often folded paper to make dinosaurs and cut petals to assemble paper flowers.

建议: Improve grammar (prepositions and tense) and streamline the answer. Start with a direct answer, then give a concise timeline with linking words.

示例: Yes, I still write physical letters to my childhood friend in Taiwan. We have been exchanging handwritten letters since we finished junior high school, and we write to each other a few times a year.

建议: Be precise with vocabulary and spelling, and separate ideas with linking words. Give one clear example and correct noun forms.

示例: Yes, handwritten letters are still used for formal purposes. For example, people often submit signed documents when applying to government offices or making official requests.

建议: Fix basic grammar and vocabulary, and make the response coherent. Answer directly, then explain理由 with one clear reason and a correct concluding statement. Avoid confusing words (pants vs. pens).

示例: No, I don't usually carry paper because it gets creased easily in my bag. Instead, I only carry a pen and use my phone or a small notebook when I need to write something.

× I designed a lot of little different layers of flowers and writing.

✓ I designed many small, different layers of paper flowers and wrote a message.

The original sentence misuses 'writing' as a noun in a list of actions. 'Writing' should be a verb form; here 'wrote a message' fits the past tense context. Also 'a lot of little different' is awkward; use 'many small, different' to correct adjective order and quantity.

× Well, when I was a child, I love to make a lot of paper craft handcraft for example, make a paper dinosaurs or paper flowers.

✓ Well, when I was a child, I loved to make a lot of paper crafts and handicrafts; for example, I made paper dinosaurs or paper flowers.

The sentence mixes past context ('when I was a child') with present tense 'love' and base forms. Change 'love' to past 'loved' and use past 'made'. Also correct pluralization to 'paper crafts' and 'handicrafts', and improve sentence structure by adding a semicolon or connecting words.

× Yes, I still write physical letters to my best friend which is in Taiwan.

✓ Yes, I still write physical letters to my best friend who lives in Taiwan.

Use 'who' for people rather than 'which'. Also 'is in Taiwan' is awkward; 'lives in Taiwan' is clearer. This corrects relative pronoun and improves clarity.

× She is my best friend from elementary school and we keep writing letters each other since we graduate from junior high school for now.

✓ She is my best friend from elementary school and we have been writing letters to each other since we graduated from junior high school.

The time reference requires present perfect continuous ('have been writing') or present perfect ('have written') with 'since' plus a past event 'graduated'. 'Each other' needs to follow 'to'. 'For now' is unnecessary and incorrect here.

× Yes, people still write letters for formal purposes, such as applying to government office or submitting official requestions, because those interviews often require signed documents.

✓ Yes, people still write letters for formal purposes, such as applying to a government office or submitting official requests, because those processes often require signed documents.

'Government office' needs an article ('a'). 'Requestions' is not a correct word; use 'requests'. 'Interviews' is the wrong noun for administrative procedures; 'processes' or 'applications' is better. This corrects word choice and article usage.

× Well actually paper is not easy to carrying into the bag because it's easier to crack it out and easy to broke. So I only carrying pants in my bag.

✓ Well, actually paper is not easy to carry in a bag because it can tear or get damaged easily. So I only carry pens in my bag.

'Carrying' should be base form 'carry' after 'easy to'. 'Carry into the bag' is awkward; use 'carry in a bag'. 'Crack it out and easy to broke' is incorrect: paper 'tear' or 'get damaged', and 'broke' is wrong; use 'get damaged'. 'I only carrying pants' is wrong word and form: 'carry pens' is intended, using base verb 'carry'.

× make a paper dinosaurs or paper flowers.

✓ make paper dinosaurs or paper flowers.

When listing countable nouns in plural after a verb like 'make', do not use the singular article 'a'. Use plural nouns 'paper dinosaurs' to match the plural sense or use 'a paper dinosaur' if singular. This removes the inconsistent article usage.