纸— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Begin with a clear topic sentence and use one or two brief supporting reasons. Correct minor grammatical errors and avoid vagueness. For example say you haven’t tried paper crafts yet, give a specific type you’d like to try, and explain why.

示例: No, I haven’t made paper crafts before, but I would like to try origami in the future because it looks relaxing and I enjoy creating small decorative objects. For instance, I’d like to learn to fold cranes and flowers to decorate my room.

建议: Create one clear main sentence, then add concise, specific supporting details with linking words. Correct tense and repetition. Describe a single activity and explain briefly what you made and why.

示例: As a child I liked drawing on paper and cutting out shapes. For example, I often drew and cut out dinosaur figures and then decorated them to look like my family members, because I enjoyed imaginative play and making characters for my games.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence and one or two precise reasons with correct vocabulary and grammar. Avoid repetition and unclear words (e.g. 'leathers'). Explain who you write to and give a brief example.

示例: Yes, I still write physical letters sometimes because handwritten notes feel more personal and emotional than texts. For example, I send letters to my grandparents on special occasions to share memories and express my thanks.

建议: Answer directly, then give a specific example and a reason using linking words. Fix grammar and avoid repetition. Mention who keeps them and why they are valued.

示例: Yes, many people still keep handwritten letters because they preserve memories and emotions. For instance, I keep letters from close friends and family in a box in my room because they remind me of important moments and make me feel connected.

建议: Start with a clear simple statement, then add one brief reason and a contrasting detail if appropriate. Use linking words such as 'because' and avoid informal fillers.

示例: Not usually — I prefer to take notes on my phone because it’s more convenient and I rarely need paper. However, I sometimes carry a small notebook for quick sketches or to-do lists when I expect to be away all day.

× I haven't made before but I would like to do a paper craft maybe in the future.

✓ I haven't made one before, but I would like to make a paper craft in the future.

The sentence uses present perfect negative correctly but omits an object: 'made' needs 'one' (singular object) or a noun. Also 'do a paper craft' is unnatural; use 'make a paper craft'. Add a comma before 'but' for clarity. Suggestion: include the object and use the verb 'make' with 'paper craft'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I was generally drawing sometimes in the papers and cutting them like a dinosaur.

✓ I generally drew on paper sometimes and cut it into shapes like a dinosaur.

The speaker mixes past continuous 'was drawing' with adverbs awkwardly. For habitual past actions use simple past 'drew' and 'cut'. Preposition 'in the papers' is incorrect; use 'on paper' or 'into shapes'. 'Cut them like a dinosaur' is unclear; clarify as 'cut it into shapes like a dinosaur'. Suggestion: use simple past for habitual past activities and correct prepositions. Grammar problem type ID:5

× I'm always doing this like I'm doing for this to resemble my parents, my family members.

✓ I always do this to make my creations resemble my parents or other family members.

Present continuous 'I'm always doing' is awkward for habitual actions; use simple present 'I always do'. 'Doing this for this to resemble' is redundant and ungrammatical; rephrase to 'to make my creations resemble'. Use 'or' instead of a comma to list alternatives. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and simplify the purpose clause. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I'm doing a dinosaur for dinosaur version of them.

✓ I make a dinosaur version of them.

Present continuous 'I'm doing' is acceptable but simpler 'I make' suits habitual descriptions. The phrase 'for dinosaur version of them' is ungrammatical; correct to 'a dinosaur version of them'. Remove redundant words. Suggestion: use concise phrasing for describing what you make. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes, I'm still writing physical letters I choose this one instead of texting with someone in the phone because feeling and touching the leathers is more how it's more emotional to me.

✓ Yes, I still write physical letters. I choose them instead of texting because the feeling of touching the paper is more emotional to me.

Use simple present 'I still write' for habitual action. Separate into two sentences. 'I choose this one' is vague; use 'I choose them'. 'Texting with someone in the phone' should be 'texting'. 'Leathers' is incorrect for paper; use 'paper'. Remove redundant 'how it's more'. Suggestion: use correct noun 'paper', simple present for habits, and clearer phrasing. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes, there's still keeping handwritten letters today.

✓ Yes, people still keep handwritten letters today.

'There's still keeping' is ungrammatical: 'there is' requires a noun phrase, not a verb in -ing. Use a subject 'people' with verb 'keep'. This corrects the structure and clarifies meaning. Suggestion: use active subject and simple present for general truths. Grammar problem type ID:3

× I mean I saw in my room for for instance I'm keeping actually because it's been too much, too important things, any emotion for me.

✓ For example, I have kept letters in my room because they are very important to me and hold a lot of emotion.

Original sentence has repeated words, wrong tense, and unclear noun phrases. Use present perfect 'have kept' or simple present 'keep' depending on meaning; here 'have kept' fits past-to-present relevance. 'It's been too much, too important things' is ungrammatical; replace with 'they are very important' and 'hold a lot of emotion'. Suggestion: simplify and reorder the sentence: introduce example, state the action, and explain the reason clearly. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Not that much actually now I'm taking notes easily with my phone notes app.

✓ Not much, actually. Now I take notes easily with my phone's notes app.

Use simple present 'I take' for habitual action. Add possessive 'phone's' for the app. Add punctuation to separate ideas. 'Not that much' should be 'Not much'. Suggestion: use simple present for habits and correct possessive form for tools/apps. Grammar problem type ID:6