纸— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cümlelerde zaman uyumuna ve fiil çekimine dikkat etmelisiniz. Cevabınızı doğrudan bir konu cümlesi ile verin, ardından kısa detaylar ve bir örnek ekleyin. Ayrıca tekrarları azaltın ve maksimum 4-5 cümleyle sınırlayın.

示例: Yes, I used to make paper crafts when I was a child. I often made origami figures like cranes and flowers by myself, and I remember using colorful paper to decorate them. It was a hobby that helped me concentrate and be creative.

建议: Cümlenin amaç ve zamir kullanımını netleştirin; ayrıca ifadeyi daha doğal hale getirmek için gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın. Bağlaçlar kullanarak nedeninizi kısaca açıklayın ve iki ila üç kısa cümleyle sınırlandırın.

示例: Yes, I still prefer writing notes on paper. I find it easier to remember things when I write them by hand, and holding a pen helps me focus better.

建议: Fikrinizi daha düzenli ve mantıklı bir sırayla ifade edin; belirsiz kelimeler ve anlamsal hatalar (ör. “loud letter”) yerine uygun kelimeler kullanın. Bir görüş cümlesi kurun ve bunu bir gerekçe veya örnekle destekleyin.

示例: I think it depends on the type of letter. People often keep sentimental handwritten letters, such as love notes or cards, because they have emotional value; however, most everyday correspondence is now digital.

建议: Cümlenizi daha doğrudan ve akıcı hale getirmek için konu cümlesiyle başlayın ve koşulu bağlaçlarla netleştirin. Gereksiz kelime tekrarlarından kaçının ve iki-üç kısa cümle kullanın.

示例: It depends on where I'm going. If I'm heading to class, I usually bring a notebook and a pen, but when I go to a cafe or library I prefer to use my tablet for taking notes.

建议: Dilbilgisi ve kelime sırasına dikkat edin; ‘be into’ yapısını uygun şekilde kullanın. Cevabınızı bir konu cümlesiyle başlatın, ardından kısa destekleyici detaylar verin ve cümleleri birleştirerek akıcılık sağlayın.

示例: I was really into making origami as a child, especially using colorful paper like pink and green. I often folded paper into flowers and other simple shapes, which I then gave to my family as little gifts.

× Yes, when I was a child, I always play with some craft toys.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I always played with some craft toys.

The action refers to habitual past behavior, so the past simple tense 'played' is required instead of present 'play'. Use past tense for past time expressions like 'when I was a child'. Suggestion: Replace present simple verbs with past simple when describing past habits.

× I made it by myself and I was really into origami too.

✓ I made them by myself and I was really into origami too.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect because 'craft toys' is plural; use 'them'. This is a singular/plural reference error. Also 'was really into origami' is correct. Suggestion: Match pronouns to the number of the noun (singular/plural).

× Yes, of course, I would like to take my notes in paper so I can fill the paper and the pen in my hand so it's kind of feels more easier to me.

✓ Yes, of course, I like to take my notes on paper because holding pen and paper feels easier for me.

Multiple issues: 'would like' implies conditional desire rather than habitual preference; use present simple 'like' for general habits. 'in paper' should be 'on paper' (preposition error). 'fill the paper and the pen in my hand' is ungrammatical and unclear; rephrase to 'holding pen and paper'. 'it's kind of feels more easier' duplicates degree and incorrect structure; use 'feels easier'. Suggestions: Use present simple for habits, use correct prepositions (on paper), avoid redundant comparatives ('more easier' -> 'easier'), and simplify phrase structure.

× I guess it depends what kind of letters.

✓ I guess it depends on what kind of letters they are.

Missing preposition 'on' after 'depends' and incomplete clause; also need a verb to complete the sentence. Suggestion: Use 'depends on' + noun phrase or 'depends on what ... are' for clarity.

× If it's a loud letter for your Valentine, I think you should keep it as a memory, but I don't know any kind of handwritten letters. Keep in today.

✓ If it's a sentimental letter from your Valentine, I think you should keep it as a memory, but I don't know of many handwritten letters kept today.

'Loud letter' is incorrect word choice; likely 'sentimental'. 'Keep in today' is ungrammatical; intended meaning is 'kept today'. Also 'I don't know any kind of handwritten letters' is awkward; use 'I don't know of many handwritten letters kept today.' Suggestion: Choose correct adjectives ('sentimental'), use passive/participle 'kept', and use 'know of' for existence.

× It's usually depends where I'm going.

✓ It usually depends on where I'm going.

'Depends' requires the preposition 'on'. Remove 'It's' or keep 'It' with 'depends on'. Suggestion: Use 'depends on' followed by location/clause.

× If I'm going to my class, I prefer to keep my notebook and my pen, but if I'm going into a cafe or library, I would like to take my tablet with me to take notes.

✓ If I'm going to my class, I prefer to keep my notebook and pen, but if I'm going to a cafe or library, I take my tablet to take notes.

Maintain consistent habitual present: 'prefer' and 'take' are habits. 'would like' is conditional/unnecessary here. Also 'going into a cafe or library' is less natural than 'going to a cafe or library'. Suggestion: Use simple present for habits and parallel structure.

× I always into making origami with colorful papers, especially pink or green.

✓ I was always into making origami with colorful paper, especially pink or green.

Missing verb 'was' for past state: 'I was always into'. 'Papers' is unnecessary; uncountable 'paper' fits better. The timeframe is past, so use past tense. Suggestion: Include the correct auxiliary/verb and use uncountable 'paper' when referring to material.

× I always was making flower. From paper.

✓ I was always making paper flowers.

Word order is incorrect: 'always was making' is less natural than 'was always making'. 'Flower' should be plural 'flowers' and 'from paper' should combine into 'paper flowers'. Suggestion: Use natural adverb placement 'was always making', pluralize nouns when appropriate, and combine fragments into one sentence.