纸— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clear, grammatical and more specific. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct vocabulary (e.g., 'made paper crafts' not 'papercraft' and 'simple figures such as camels' not 'simple organs like camel'), and give one or two concise supporting details using a linking word. Avoid repetition and keep to 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I used to make paper crafts when I was a child. For example, I would fold simple figures such as camels and birds because they were easy to make and very relaxing. I enjoyed decorating them with colored pens and stickers.

建议: Answer directly and use correct grammar and vocabulary. Explain the reason briefly with linking words. Replace unclear phrases ('physical language', 'writing license') with 'handwritten letters' and 'emails'. Use present simple for habitual facts.

示例: No, I rarely write handwritten letters anymore. Instead, I usually send emails or messages because they are faster and more convenient for keeping in touch.

建议: Clarify your opinion and provide a brief reason or qualification. Use a linking word (e.g., 'however' or 'but') if adding nuance. Say whether some people still keep letters and why, to be more balanced and specific.

示例: Not many people keep handwritten letters nowadays, but some do for sentimental reasons. For example, older relatives often save letters as keepsakes because they value the personal touch.

建议: Correct the vocabulary and grammar. State a clear topic sentence and give a short reason. Replace unclear words with 'paper and pens' and explain when you might carry them. Keep it concise and coherent.

示例: No, I usually don't carry paper and pens when I go out because I use my phone for notes. However, I sometimes bring a notebook when I expect to study or attend meetings.

建议: Use correct tense and avoid repetition. Start with a clear past-tense statement and then give a reason. Use linking words like 'because' correctly and provide a specific detail (what you drew or how often).

示例: As a child, I loved drawing on paper because I wanted to be a painter. I often sketched landscapes and people and practiced with watercolors every weekend.

× Yes, I have made papercraft.

✓ Yes, I have made papercrafts.

The original uses 'papercraft' (uncountable or singular) but the student likely means multiple paper crafts. This is a singular/plural choice; use the plural 'papercrafts' after 'made' to indicate multiple items. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to more than one created item.

× I often put simple organs like camel when I was a child because it's easier and relaxing.

✓ I often made simple origami figures like camels when I was a child because it was easy and relaxing.

Multiple issues: 'put' is incorrect verb for creating paper figures; 'origami' is the correct term; 'camel' should be plural 'camels' if made repeatedly; tense should be past 'was' to match 'when I was a child'; 'it's' should be 'it was' and 'easier' compares to something missing — use 'easy' and 'relaxing'. The correction uses past tense and correct verb and noun forms.

× No, we don't you.

✓ No, we don't.

The phrase 'we don't you' is ungrammatical; likely the student intended 'No, we don't.' Remove extraneous pronoun 'you.' Keep the contraction 'don't' referring to writing letters.

× We don't write physical language now because I didn't think writing license writing emails are easier and faster.

✓ We don't write physical letters now because I think writing emails is easier and faster.

Several errors: 'physical language' should be 'physical letters'; tense should be present 'think' to match 'now'; 'didn't think' is wrong contextually. 'writing license writing emails' is garbled — replace with 'writing emails'. Use singular agreement 'writing emails is' since the activity (writing emails) is a singular idea. Overall, simplify to present tense and correct nouns.

× No, I don't think people still have to.

✓ No, I don't think people still do.

The phrase 'have to' implies obligation and is unnecessary. The examiner asked whether people still keep handwritten letters; the correct response is 'I don't think people still do' (do = keep handwritten letters). This removes incorrect modal meaning.

× No, I don't carry favorite and men with me, but I go out.

✓ No, I don't carry paper and pens with me when I go out.

The original is garbled: 'favorite and men' is meaningless. The question asked about carrying paper and pens; correct nouns are 'paper and pens' and include the time clause 'when I go out.' Use 'don't carry' for present habit.

× I would like to I would like to draw on the paper as a child, because when I was little I want to be a painter.

✓ I liked to draw on paper as a child because when I was little I wanted to be a painter.

The sentence repeats 'I would like to' and mixes present and past ('want' should be 'wanted'). To describe past habits, use simple past 'liked' and 'wanted.' Also use 'draw on paper' (no article) for general activity. Remove duplicated phrase.