公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 最初に「子どもの頃、公園に行くのが好きだった」と簡潔に答え、その後に野球をしたことを理由として加えましょう。“When I was a child”の繰り返しや、“practice for playing baseball”のような不自然な表現は避け、“to practise baseball”または“to play baseball”を使います。文を最後まで言い切り、友達と一緒に行ったことも自然につなげてください。

示例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my friends to play baseball, and it was a great way to spend time outdoors.

建议: 現在も公園に行くかどうかを最初にはっきり答えましょう。“go parks”ではなく“go to parks”と言います。子どもの頃より頻度が減ったことと、自宅近くの公園で余暇を過ごすことを、短い文で順序よく説明してください。“although”の後に続ける内容がない場合は使わないようにしましょう。

示例: Yes, I still go to parks sometimes, although less often than I did as a child. There’s a park near my home where I go to relax in my free time.

建议: 「もっと公園がほしい」という意見を、“I’d like to see more parks in my city.”の形で答えましょう。東京は人が多いという理由と、公園が少ないためにリラックスしにくいという影響をつなげると、回答が明確になります。“a crowded area”や“few parks”など、状況に合う表現を使い、言い直しや同じ語の繰り返しを減らしてください。

示例: Yes, I’d like to see more parks in Tokyo. It’s a crowded city, and there aren’t many green spaces where people can relax. More parks would give residents a peaceful place to spend their free time.

建议: 公園の名前を先に挙げ、そこへ行きたい理由を説明しましょう。回答からは、札幌に住んでいた頃に行けなかったモエレ沼公園について話しているようです。名前や「ガラスのピラミッド」の部分は正確か確認し、“I didn’t get a chance to visit it”のように自然な表現を使いましょう。過去に行けなかったことと、将来行きたいことを区別して話してください。

示例: Yes, I’d like to visit Moerenuma Park in Sapporo. I lived there before, but I didn’t get a chance to explore the park properly. I’ve heard it’s famous for its glass pyramid, so I’d love to see it in person.

× When I was a child And I liked and I liked to go to parks for practice for playing baseball and with my friends. Especially when I played baseball.

✓ When I was a child, I liked going to parks with my friends to practice playing baseball, especially when I played baseball.

The original contains repeated words and an incomplete sentence beginning with Especially. Combine the ideas into one complete sentence, and use to practice playing to express the purpose of going to the park.

× I sometimes go parks

✓ I sometimes go to parks.

The verb go requires the preposition to before a destination. Say go to parks, not go parks.

× So I went I go parks less than when I was a child

✓ I go to parks less often than I did when I was a child.

The answer describes the student's current habit, so use the present tense go for the current situation. Use did to refer back to the past habit, and less often to compare how frequently the student goes.

× My town Tokyo is a crowd crowd area

✓ My town, Tokyo, is a crowded area.

Crowd is a noun or verb, but an adjective is needed to describe area. Use crowded, and remove the repeated word.

× there are a little parks

✓ There are few parks.

Little is used with uncountable nouns, while parks is a plural countable noun. Use few or a few with plural countable nouns.

× Yes, I want to parks in my steep.

✓ Yes, I want more parks in my city.

Want to must be followed by a verb, but parks is a noun here. Use want more parks to express a desire for additional parks. City is also the appropriate word for the intended location.

× Yes, I have I have parked to go to go in the future

✓ Yes, there are parks I would like to visit in the future.

The original repeats words and does not form a grammatical sentence. Use there are parks I would like to visit to clearly describe future places the speaker wants to go to.

× when I lived in Sapporo I cannot I could not go some parks

✓ When I lived in Sapporo, I could not go to some parks.

The sentence refers to a time when the speaker lived in Sapporo, so use the past form could not, rather than the present form cannot.

× I could not go some parks

✓ I could not go to some parks.

Use the preposition to after go when naming a destination: go to some parks.