公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly and use correct verb forms and natural expressions. Say “When I was a child” rather than “When I was as a child,” “loved going” rather than “loved go,” and “get some fresh air” rather than “gave me more fresh air.” Keep the explanation concise and connect the reasons with “because.” Also, use the past tense consistently: “could meet” instead of “can meet.”

示例: Yes, I loved going to the park near my home when I was a child. I often went there with my parents because I could get some fresh air and meet my friends. We usually played soccer on the field next to the park.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition, fillers, and unnatural phrases such as “I still like going to parks now,” “more tough time,” and “Park allows it to me.” Use “I still enjoy going to parks” and explain that work can be stressful, so parks help you relax and clear your mind. Use a specific activity or result to make the answer more effective.

示例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially after a stressful day at work. Walking among the trees helps me relax and clear my mind. I usually spend about half an hour there before going home.

建议: Your answer is relevant and includes several useful examples, but improve the grammar and naturalness. Add the article in “a significant place,” use “exercise” instead of “do some exercises,” and keep the verb forms parallel: “exercise, meet people, or take part in activities.” Replace “meet someone” with “meet friends or other residents” to express your meaning more clearly.

示例: Yes, I’d definitely like to see more parks in my city. They provide pleasant public spaces where people can exercise, meet friends, and take part in outdoor activities. For example, residents could play soccer, use outdoor gyms, or simply relax in a greener environment.

建议: You give a specific and relevant answer, which is effective. Improve the sentence structure by separating the two ideas with a full stop or a linking word. Use “see it for myself” instead of “see it by myself,” and say “at least once in my life” rather than “once of my life.” You could also add one specific feature you want to see there.

示例: In the future, I’d love to visit Yellowstone National Park. It’s one of the most famous natural landmarks in the world, and I’d like to see its geysers and wildlife for myself. I hope I can go there at least once in my life.

× When I was as a child, I loved go to park nearby my home with my parents because it gave me more fresh air to me and I can meet my friends who go there to play soccer on soccer field adjacent to the park.

✓ When I was a child, I loved going to the park near my home with my parents because it gave me more fresh air and I could meet my friends who went there to play soccer on the soccer field adjacent to the park.

The phrase was a child does not require the preposition as. The phrase to me is also unnecessary after gave me. Use was a child and gave me more fresh air.

× When I was as a child, I loved go to park nearby my home with my parents because it gave me more fresh air to me and I can meet my friends who go there to play soccer on soccer field adjacent to the park.

✓ When I was a child, I loved going to the park near my home with my parents because it gave me more fresh air and I could meet my friends who went there to play soccer on the soccer field adjacent to the park.

The verb love is followed by a gerund when describing an activity. Therefore, use loved going, not loved go.

× When I was as a child, I loved go to park nearby my home with my parents because it gave me more fresh air to me and I can meet my friends who go there to play soccer on soccer field adjacent to the park.

✓ When I was a child, I loved going to the park near my home with my parents because it gave me more fresh air and I could meet my friends who went there to play soccer on the soccer field adjacent to the park.

Use the definite article the before park and soccer field because both refer to specific places: the park near my home and the soccer field adjacent to the park.

× When I was as a child, I loved go to park nearby my home with my parents because it gave me more fresh air to me and I can meet my friends who go there to play soccer on soccer field adjacent to the park.

✓ When I was a child, I loved going to the park near my home with my parents because it gave me more fresh air and I could meet my friends who went there to play soccer on the soccer field adjacent to the park.

The answer describes repeated experiences during childhood, so the past forms could and went are needed instead of can and go.

× Yes, I still like going to parks now because you know, I still loving it because I have more tough time at my office and I want to refresh my mental health. Park allows it to me.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks now because, you know, I still love it because I have a tougher time at my office and I want to refresh my mental health. The park allows me to do so.

The simple present form love is required after the subject I. The form loving cannot stand alone as the main verb without an auxiliary verb such as am.

× Yes, I still like going to parks now because you know, I still loving it because I have more tough time at my office and I want to refresh my mental health. Park allows it to me.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks now because, you know, I still love it because I have a tougher time at my office and I want to refresh my mental health. The park allows me to do so.

The comparative form of tough is tougher, not more tough. Also, a is required before the singular countable noun phrase a tougher time.

× Yes, I still like going to parks now because you know, I still loving it because I have more tough time at my office and I want to refresh my mental health. Park allows it to me.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks now because, you know, I still love it because I have a tougher time at my office and I want to refresh my mental health. The park allows me to do so.

Use the before park because the sentence refers to a specific park or to parks as a previously understood place. The phrase should be The park.

× Yes, I still like going to parks now because you know, I still loving it because I have more tough time at my office and I want to refresh my mental health. Park allows it to me.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks now because, you know, I still love it because I have a tougher time at my office and I want to refresh my mental health. The park allows me to do so.

With the verb allow, the correct structure is allow someone to do something. Therefore, use allows me to do so instead of allows it to me.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. You know, it's very significant place for people who want to do some exercises or meet someone in public places or having activities to do with other people, just like playing soccer or outdoor fitness.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. You know, it is a very significant place for people who want to do some exercises or meet someone in public places or have activities to do with other people, just like playing soccer or outdoor fitness.

The singular countable noun place requires an article. Use a very significant place.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. You know, it's very significant place for people who want to do some exercises or meet someone in public places or having activities to do with other people, just like playing soccer or outdoor fitness.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. You know, it is a very significant place for people who want to do some exercises or meet someone in public places or have activities to do with other people, just like playing soccer or outdoor fitness.

The verbs after want to should be parallel: want to do, meet, or have. Use the base form have, not the -ing form having.

× In the future, I would like to visit Yellowstone National Park because it's one of the world's most famous natural landmarks, I want to see it by myself once of my life.

✓ In the future, I would like to visit Yellowstone National Park because it is one of the world's most famous natural landmarks, and I want to see it by myself once in my life.

The original sentence joins two independent clauses with only a comma, creating a comma splice. Use the conjunction and to connect the clauses correctly.

× In the future, I would like to visit Yellowstone National Park because it's one of the world's most famous natural landmarks, I want to see it by myself once of my life.

✓ In the future, I would like to visit Yellowstone National Park because it is one of the world's most famous natural landmarks, and I want to see it by myself once in my life.

The correct fixed expression is once in my life, not once of my life. Use in when referring to an occurrence during a period of time.