公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản (thì, danh từ/động từ), sắp xếp câu rõ ràng hơn và tránh lặp từ. Nên bắt đầu bằng một câu trả lời trực tiếp (topic sentence), sau đó thêm 1–2 câu hỗ trợ với chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: hoạt động bạn làm ở công viên, cảm xúc cụ thể). Dùng liên từ đơn (because, so, and) để mạch lạc. Giữ không quá 3–5 câu.

示例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played on the swings and ran around with my friends, which made me feel very happy. I remember feeling relaxed and peaceful there because it was quiet and full of trees.

建议: Trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích lý do cụ thể. Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (infinitive/gerund, chủ ngữ-động từ), tránh câu ngắn lặp lại như “why not”. Nên nêu hoạt động cụ thể bạn làm ở công viên và lợi ích rõ ràng. Giữ mạch với liên từ như because hoặc for example.

示例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually go there to exercise, such as running or cycling, which helps me reduce stress and stay healthy. For example, I go jogging in the park three times a week to clear my mind.

建议: Cần diễn đạt ý rõ ràng, sắp xếp logic: bắt đầu bằng câu trả lời (Yes/No), rồi nêu lý do cụ thể với ví dụ. Sửa cấu trúc như “many small parks” thay vì “mall park”, tránh lặp từ và câu dài lủng củng. Dùng từ vựng chính xác (nearby, convenient).

示例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. Small local parks would be very useful because many people currently have to travel far to find green space. If parks were nearby, residents could relax and exercise more easily.

建议: Trả lời trực tiếp, nêu tên hoặc mô tả rõ ràng (Central Park) thay vì nói “I don't really remember the name”. Sử dụng cấu trúc gọn: reason + specific detail (why you want to visit, what you want to do there). Sửa ngữ pháp (a lot of parks → many parks; it’s in New York).

示例: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York. I have heard it is very large and beautiful, and I would like to walk around the lakes and see the gardens. It seems like a famous place to relax and enjoy nature.

× When I am child I'm very loving going to to the park.

✓ When I was a child I loved going to the park.

The sentence has incorrect verb tense and missing article. Use past tense 'was' for a past state and 'loved' for habitual past action. Add the article 'a' before 'child' and remove the duplicated 'to'. Suggestion: 'When I was a child, I loved going to the park.'

× The park is the place that the children can playing and everyone can play too.

✓ The park is a place where children can play and everyone can play too.

Wrong structure 'that the children can playing'—use 'where' for places and base verb 'play' after modal/ability. Use 'a place' instead of 'the place' for general statement. Suggestion: 'The park is a place where children can play, and everyone can play too.'

× And also for me it also like to order playing about park is make me feel very comfortable, really trash and everything feel feel very peaceful in the park.

✓ Also, for me, playing in the park makes me feel very comfortable, refreshed, and peaceful.

Multiple pronoun and verb form errors: 'it also like to order playing about park' is ungrammatical. Use gerund 'playing in the park' as the subject, with singular verb 'makes'. 'Trash' is incorrect word choice for 'refreshed'. Remove repeated words. Suggestion: 'Also, playing in the park makes me feel very comfortable, refreshed, and peaceful.'

× Just of course, why not? Going to park is the place for you to reduce stress and making sure they become more better.

✓ Of course. Going to the park is a way for you to reduce stress and make yourself better.

Use definite article 'the' before 'park'. 'Going to the park is the place' is awkward—use 'a way'. Parallel structure requires 'reduce' and 'make' (base forms) not 'making'. 'More better' is incorrect; use 'better' alone. Suggestion: 'Of course. Going to the park is a way to reduce stress and make yourself feel better.'

× Why? Because you can go exercise or the running and doing something like going some bicycle something like that.

✓ Because you can exercise, go running, or do things like ride a bicycle.

Incorrect articles and verb forms: 'go exercise' should be 'exercise' or 'go exercising', 'the running' should be 'go running'. 'Doing something like going some bicycle' is ungrammatical—use 'do things like ride a bicycle'. Suggestion: 'Because you can exercise, go running, or ride a bicycle.'

× From my opinion I think I think have a mall park in the city it actually very good idea is from some people say they live, not have the parks they need to go far distant, but now if they are half at the park, they can go it's very easy and have a mural park.

✓ In my opinion, having small parks in the city is a very good idea. Some people who do not have parks near them have to travel far, but if there is a park nearby, it is very convenient for them.

Multiple sentence structure and word choice errors: 'From my opinion' should be 'In my opinion'. 'I think I think have a mall park' is garbled—use 'having small parks'. 'Mural park' likely means 'small park' or 'local park'; here 'nearby' is clearer. 'They are half at the park' is incorrect. Suggestion: 'In my opinion, having small parks in the city is a very good idea because people who live far from parks can then go there easily.'

× In the future, I have a many park I want to go but the thing I want to go is not from this country it's from the United States in the New York, the park that I don't really remember the name, but I know it's very large and it's very beautiful.

✓ In the future, I have many parks I want to visit, but the one I most want to visit is not in this country; it is in New York, United States. I don't remember the name of the park, but I know it is very large and beautiful.

Incorrect articles and noun forms: use 'many parks' (not 'a many park'). Use 'visit' instead of 'go' for destinations. 'From the United States in the New York' should be 'in New York, United States.' Clarify 'the park that I don't really remember the name' to 'I don't remember the name of the park.' Suggestion: 'In the future, I want to visit many parks, especially one in New York, United States, which I believe is very large and beautiful.'

× One of the most parks in popular in the world.

✓ It is one of the most popular parks in the world.

Word order and agreement errors: 'the most parks in popular' is incorrect. Correct phrase is 'one of the most popular parks' — 'popular' modifies 'parks' and 'one of the most' expresses highest degree. Suggestion: 'It is one of the most popular parks in the world.'