公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Travaillez la clarté et la structure de votre réponse : commencez par une phrase-thèse simple puis ajoutez 1–2 détails précis. Évitez les répétitions et corrigez l’ordre des mots (sujet + verbe). Par exemple, utilisez des expressions temporelles correctes (« every weekend », « during the holidays ») et employez des verbes au passé cohérents. Pratiquez des liaisons comme « because » ou « and » pour relier les idées.

示例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. Every weekend and during the holidays my parents took me to the local park, where we bought tickets for rides. I enjoyed playing many games there because it was fun and I could meet other children.

建议: Améliorez la concordance des temps et réduisez les hésitations. Démarrez par une réponse directe, puis donnez un ou deux détails précis en utilisant des mots de liaison (« since », « so », « and »). Évitez les répétitions de mots et les formes erronées comme « I go » au lieu de « I went » si vous parlez du passé.

示例: Yes, I do. After finishing my high school exams, I often went to parks with friends to take pictures and relax. We usually spent time talking about football and our studies, which helped us unwind.

建议: Soignez la précision et la grammaire : commencez par un accord clair, puis expliquez pourquoi avec des raisons spécifiques. Évitez les formulations vagues et les erreurs de pronoms (« make him relax »). Utilisez des structures comme « so that » ou « which » pour expliquer l’effet des parcs sur la communauté.

示例: Yes, I would. I think more parks would benefit everyone in the city because they provide green spaces for families and children to play. Parks also help people relax and reduce stress from work or school, which improves community health.

建议: Clarifiez le lieu et utilisez un futur simple proprement sans répétitions. Répondez directement puis donnez un plan concret (quand et avec qui). Évitez les répétitions de mots et préparez une phrase contenant l’emplacement correct et la période (« this summer », « with my family or friends »).

示例: Yes, I do. I hope to visit the park behind the museum in Algiers this summer. I plan to go there with either my friends or my family to explore and relax together.

× Yes, of course, especially when I was in the primary school, I every every weekend and every holidays I went with my my parents to park the and we bought tickets.

✓ Yes, of course. Especially when I was in primary school, every weekend and every holiday I went with my parents to the park and we bought tickets.

The student used incorrect present tense patterns and extra words. 'in the primary school' should be 'in primary school'; 'every every' and repeated words removed; 'every holidays' should be 'every holiday' (singular after every); word order 'I went with my parents to the park' corrects misplaced 'to park the'. Suggestion: read sentences slowly, remove repeated words, and use 'every' + singular noun.

× After that I go I want to play many games in the park.

✓ After that I wanted to play many games in the park.

The learner mixed present and past forms. The context is past (was a child), so use past tense 'wanted'. 'I go I want' are incorrect repeats. Also 'many games' is acceptable but 'play many games' is fine. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense and avoid repeating verbs.

× Yes, of course. When I finished my exams in high school I I go with my friends to to parks for for for take pictures and spending time to talk about football or studies in the parks.

✓ Yes, of course. When I finished my exams in high school I went with my friends to parks to take pictures and spend time talking about football or our studies in the parks.

Mix of past and present forms: 'When I finished' requires past 'I went' not 'I go'. Remove repeated words. Use infinitive 'to take pictures' not 'for take pictures'. Use 'spend time talking' instead of 'spending time to talk'. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent and use correct verb patterns: 'to' + base verb, or 'spend time' + -ing.

× Yes, I love this idea because I like to see more parks in my in my city for for our brothers and our children.

✓ Yes, I love this idea because I would like to see more parks in my city for our brothers and our children.

Repeated 'in my' and 'for for' removed. 'I like to see' is acceptable but 'I would like to see' is more natural when expressing desire. Pronoun use 'our brothers and our children' may be odd but retained; removed repetition. Suggestion: avoid repeating phrases and choose appropriate modal expressions for wishes.

× It's a beautiful thing for for people to spending time and make him relax from problems or work or studies.

✓ It's a beautiful thing for people to spend time and relax from problems, work, or studies.

Use infinitive 'to spend' not 'to spending'. 'Make him relax' is incorrect in meaning and pronoun; use 'relax' without 'make him'. Removed repeated 'for'. Suggestion: after 'for people to' use base verb; avoid unnecessary pronouns.

× Yes, of course I hope to visit the parks of Algiers is behind the museum.

✓ Yes, of course. I hope to visit the park in Algiers that is behind the museum.

Tense 'hope to visit' is fine but sentence structure is wrong: 'the parks of Algiers is behind the museum' mixes plural and singular and wrong verb. Use singular 'park' if referring to one, or 'parks that are' for plural. Added relative clause 'that is behind the museum'. Suggestion: match subject and verb number and use relative clauses to describe location.

× I think this summer I I will, I will visit, visit it with my friends or with my family.

✓ I think this summer I will visit it with my friends or my family.

Repeated words removed. 'I will visit' correctly expresses future intention. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary repetition; one 'will' + base verb is sufficient.