公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời có nội dung rõ ràng và tự nhiên nhưng hơi dài và gồm hai ý khác nhau trong cùng một câu trả lời (quá khứ và hiện tại). Bạn nên tách thành câu chủ đề ngắn gọn về quá khứ rồi bổ sung chi tiết bằng một hoặc hai câu hỗ trợ, dùng liên từ thích hợp để kết nối ý (ví dụ: "because", "so"). Ngoài ra tránh lặp từ (ví dụ: "going to parks" lặp nhiều lần); dùng từ đồng nghĩa (ví dụ: "playgrounds", "green spaces") để đa dạng từ vựng.

示例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I made many friends there. I often played on the swings and played football with them, which was great fun. Those memories made parks one of my favourite places growing up.

建议: Trả lời ngắn, rõ ràng và tự nhiên. Tuy nhiên bạn có thể làm phong phú câu trả lời bằng cách thêm một chi tiết cụ thể giải thích vì sao hoạt động mới tiện lợi hơn (ví dụ: thời gian, địa điểm, chi phí) và dùng một liên từ để nối mạch suy nghĩ (ví dụ: "because", "so"). Hạn chế dùng cụm từ mơ hồ như "more convenient" mà không nêu lý do cụ thể.

示例: Not really — I don't enjoy parks as much now because I have less free time. Instead, I prefer reading books or watching movies at home since it's quicker to relax there after studying and I can do these activities anytime.

建议: Câu trả lời trực tiếp và có ví dụ cụ thể — rất tốt. Để cải thiện, bạn có thể bổ sung đánh giá ngắn về chất lượng công viên (ví dụ: sạch sẽ, an toàn) hoặc nhu cầu của các nhóm khác (trẻ em, người già) để làm câu trả lời toàn diện hơn. Dùng liên từ như "however" hoặc "for example" để làm rõ hơn mối quan hệ giữa các ý.

示例: I don't think we need more parks because there are already several good ones nearby. For example, two well-maintained parks near my house have playgrounds and walking paths, and they are clean and safe for families to relax and exercise.

建议: Câu trả lời ngắn và rõ ràng nhưng hơi chối bỏ ngay lập tức mà không cho biết lý do cụ thể hay điều kiện có thể thay đổi ý định. Bạn nên nêu lý do cụ thể vì sao công viên không phải ưu tiên (ví dụ: lịch học, sở thích khác) và có thể thêm một điều kiện hoặc ví dụ ngắn về khi nào bạn có thể thay đổi ý kiến để làm câu trả lời thực tế hơn.

示例: I don't have any plans to visit parks soon because I'm focused on studying for exams. However, I might visit a park if I need a break during holidays or if friends invite me for a picnic.

× I loved going to parks when I was younger because I made lots of friends and often played on the swings or football with them, which was great fun.

✓ I loved going to parks when I was younger because I made lots of friends and often played on the swings or played football with them, which was great fun.

The original sentence uses 'played on the swings or football' which mixes preposition use with the verb. Use parallel verb structures: 'played on the swings' and 'played football'. Maintain parallelism for clarity and correct verb+object structure.

× Now I don't go there as much as before because I'm busier with studying and other responsibilities.

✓ Now I don't go there as much as before because I'm busier studying and have other responsibilities.

The phrase 'busier with studying' is acceptable but slightly awkward. Use 'busier studying' or 'have other responsibilities' to avoid unnecessary preposition and improve naturalness. Maintain present continuous idea for current state.

× Actually, I don't think I enjoy it as much as I used to.

✓ Actually, I don't enjoy it as much as I used to.

The auxiliary 'think' is unnecessary and creates a wordier sentence. Removing it makes the sentence clearer and keeps present simple tense for general preference.

× Now I prefer reading books, watching movies or hanging out with friends because for me it is more convenient and also brings me more joy.

✓ Now I prefer reading books, watching movies, or hanging out with friends because it is more convenient for me and brings me more joy.

Reorder 'for me' to 'for me' after 'convenient' for natural word order: 'more convenient for me'. Keep parallel gerund forms and add a comma before the last item in a list for clarity.

× Well, I don't think it's necessary to have more parks in my city because we already have plenty of green spaces.

✓ Well, I don't think it's necessary to have more parks in my city because we already have plenty of green space.

Use 'green space' as an uncountable noun when referring to the general availability of natural areas. 'Green spaces' is not strictly wrong, but 'green space' is more natural in this context.

× For instance, there are two well maintained parks near my house that have playgrounds and walking paths so people can easily relax and exercise.

✓ For instance, there are two well-maintained parks near my house that have playgrounds and walking paths, so people can easily relax and exercise.

Add a hyphen in the compound adjective 'well-maintained'. Also add a comma before 'so' because it introduces a result clause relating to the whole preceding clause.

× Actually, I don't have any plans to visit any parks in the future, it's not on my priority.

✓ Actually, I don't have any plans to visit parks in the future; it's not a priority for me.

The original has a comma splice and awkward phrase 'on my priority'. Replace the comma with a semicolon (or period) and change to 'not a priority for me' for correct idiomatic expression.

× I would rather plan to study or do some other hobbies instead.

✓ I would rather study or pursue other hobbies instead.

'Plan to' is unnecessary after 'would rather'. Use bare infinitive 'study' after 'would rather' and 'pursue' fits 'hobbies' better than 'do'. This yields a more natural and grammatically correct sentence.