公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Focus on clear grammar and a simple structure: start with a direct statement about liking parks, then give one or two specific reasons. Avoid hesitation and repetition by planning a short answer before speaking. Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood (e.g., "I liked" not "I like").

示例: I liked going to parks when I was a child because they were peaceful and I could play with my friends. For example, we often played football on weekends, which made me feel happy and relaxed.

建议: Answer directly, then explain briefly using linking words such as 'but' and 'because'. Use present simple tense for current habits and compare clearly with the past. Be concise (max 3–4 short sentences).

示例: Yes, I still like parks, but I don't go as often as I did when I was a child because I am busier now. For example, I usually visit a park only on Saturdays instead of every day.

建议: Give a clear opinion sentence then give specific reasons with linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Use plural/singular correctly (children, healthy). Avoid filler words and be concise. Mention a concrete benefit or example to support your view.

示例: Yes, I would. I think more parks would benefit children and families because they provide space for exercise and outdoor play. For example, new parks could include playgrounds and sports areas that help children stay healthy.

建议: Give a direct answer about future plans using 'will' or 'going to', then add a clear reason or condition. Keep it concise and use linking words like 'when' or 'so'. Avoid repeating words and hesitations.

示例: I might visit parks in the future, but I expect to be very busy with work and studies. When I have free time, especially on weekends, I plan to go to nearby parks to relax.

× Is I like, is I like to going is I like to go, uh, like to go park when I was child, uh, because I'm uh, because, uh, because of because when I'm tired, I enjoy, uh, I want to, I want, I want a lot of.

✓ I liked going to parks when I was a child because when I was tired I enjoyed it a lot.

Pronoun and subject errors: 'Is I' is incorrect; use 'I' as the subject without 'is'. Verb tense: the question asks about childhood so past tense 'liked' fits. Article and noun number: use 'parks' plural or 'a park' and include the article 'a' before 'child'. Remove redundant fillers. Suggestion: Form a simple past sentence with subject 'I', past verb 'liked', correct article 'a child', and use 'enjoyed it a lot' to refer back to going to parks.

× Yes, uh, yes I do. But umm, I'm not going, uh, going to park. I'm not going to park rather than uh, then uh, rather than, uh, childhood days, umm, Saturdays.

✓ Yes, I do. But I don't go to parks as often as I did in my childhood; I usually go on Saturdays.

Present tense and comparison: 'I'm not going' implies continuous action; use simple present 'I don't go' for habitual activity. Comparative structure: 'rather than childhood days' is incorrect; use 'as often as I did in my childhood' to compare frequency. Clarify 'Saturdays' as the usual time by saying 'I usually go on Saturdays.' Suggestion: Use simple present for habits and a clear comparative phrase referencing past frequency.

× Yes, I like, yes, I like to see more parks in my city because it, it makes a uh, because it makes a child, umm, children, children feed healthy and enjoying their, uh, their time. So I choose uh, I like to park in my city.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they help children stay healthy and enjoy their time. So I support having more parks in my city.

Pronoun and subject-verb agreement: 'it makes a child, children' is inconsistent; refer to 'parks' plural so use 'they'. Verb forms: 'feed healthy' is incorrect; use 'stay healthy'. Gerund/participle use: 'enjoying their time' should be 'enjoy their time' to match the subject 'children'. Sentence clarity: 'I choose I like to park' is unclear; rephrase as 'I support having more parks.' Suggestion: Match plural subjects and pronouns, use correct verbs ('stay healthy', 'enjoy'), and state your opinion clearly.

× As I want, uh, as, as I wonder in my future, I'm, I'm, I'm be, I'm going to be of, I am going to be busy, a visit to my work and further studies. So, uh, when I am, I'm, uh, free from my work. So work, uh, work and weekend, uh, work weekend we visit.

✓ In the future I will be busy with work and further studies. So when I am free from work, I will visit parks on weekends.

Future tense and modal use: 'I'm be' and 'I'm going to be of' are ungrammatical; use 'I will be' or 'I am going to be' followed by the complement 'busy with work and further studies.' Sequence and clarity: express availability with 'when I am free from work' and habit with future 'I will visit parks on weekends.' Suggestion: Use a standard future construction ('I will be' or 'I am going to be') and clear phrases for activities and timing.