公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the response more natural by using correct tense and articles, reduce hesitation, and keep it concise (max 3–4 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail and a brief result or feeling. Use linking words like “so” or “because” to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I loved going to the park when I was a child. There was one near my home, so I went there every evening to play with several friends. Because of those outings, I have very happy memories of my childhood.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence, then explain the reason concisely and use correct grammar and linking words (for example “but”, “because”, “so”). Avoid listing too many details; be specific about time constraints and how often you could visit if circumstances change.

示例: I still enjoy parks, but I rarely go now because I am very busy. I attend university, take extra tuition classes, and I also tutor three students, so I don’t have much free time.

建议: Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then give a specific reason and one example of how extra parks would help. Use correct plural forms and smoother phrasing—avoid repetition and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they give people quiet places to relax. For example, extra green spaces would help busy workers and students find a peaceful spot to read or exercise.

建议: Answer directly and naturally; avoid contradictory or unclear phrases. If you prefer other places, say so clearly and give a specific reason. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “scenery” instead of “shield”) and structure sentences with linking words like “but” and “so”.

示例: Not really — I prefer going to the mountains now because I enjoy adventurous activities and beautiful scenery. However, if I have free time in the future, I might visit a local park to relax briefly.

× Yes, I love to go to park as a child, uh, luckily I got one near my home, so every evening I used to go there for playing.

✓ Yes, I loved going to the park as a child; luckily I had one near my home, so every evening I used to go there to play.

The sentence mixes present tense 'love' with past time reference 'as a child' and uses incorrect verb forms. Use past tense 'loved' to match 'as a child'. 'Go to park' needs the article 'the park'. 'Got one' is informal; 'had one' is appropriate past tense. 'For playing' should be 'to play' to express purpose. Suggestions: keep past tense consistently, use the definite article before specific places, and use 'to' + base verb for purpose.

× I got several friends there and I really enjoyed my childhood time.

✓ I made several friends there and I really enjoyed my childhood.

Using 'got' to mean 'made' is informal and ambiguous; 'made friends' is the correct collocation for forming friendships. 'Childhood time' is redundant; 'childhood' is sufficient. Use past simple 'made' and 'enjoyed' to match past timeframe.

× Yes, I still like going to parks, but unfortunately I need to do many kind of works.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks, but unfortunately I need to do many kinds of work.

'Many kind of works' is ungrammatical. Use plural 'kinds' after 'many' and the uncountable noun 'work' (not 'works') for general tasks. Maintain present simple 'need' which is correct for habitual situation.

× I have to go to university and I got some tuitions too.

✓ I have to go to university and I take some tuition classes too.

'I got some tuitions' incorrectly uses past tense 'got' and the countable plural 'tuitions'. For ongoing obligations, use present simple 'take' or 'attend' and 'tuition' or 'tuition classes'. Alternatively, 'I received some tuition' would be past. Use consistent present tense for current activities.

× I tutored 3 students so I don't have enough time to go any park now.

✓ I tutor three students, so I don't have enough time to go to any park now.

The original mixes past 'tutored' with present 'don't have'. If tutoring is ongoing, use present 'tutor'. Spell out numbers in formal writing as 'three'. Include the preposition 'to' before 'any park'.

× Yes, I think there should be more park in my city because park is one of the places where people can relax sitting alone in a bench, so it's necessary.

✓ Yes, I think there should be more parks in my city because a park is one of the places where people can relax, sit alone on a bench, so they are necessary.

'More park' needs plural 'parks'. Use 'a park' when defining a type of place. 'Sitting alone in a bench' is incorrect: use 'sit alone on a bench'. Also adjust pronouns and verbs for number: 'they are necessary' or rephrase 'so parks are necessary'. Ensure articles 'a' and prepositions 'on' are used correctly.

× No, I don't have interest in parks anymore, but if I get time after having done all of my works, I choose mountain because it's full of shield and I am into adventures.

✓ No, I'm not interested in parks anymore, but if I get time after finishing all my work, I would choose the mountains because they are full of scenery and I am into adventures.

Use 'I'm not interested' rather than 'I don't have interest'. 'Having done all of my works' is awkward—use 'finishing all my work'. 'I choose mountain' must be conditional and plural: 'I would choose the mountains'. 'Full of shield' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'scenery' or 'greenery'—use appropriate noun. Match plural subject 'mountains' with plural verb 'they are'. Use conditional modal 'would' to express hypothetical future choice.