公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cố gắng nói câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn: bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, dùng thì quá khứ đúng (was/played), tránh lỗi ngữ pháp đơn giản và sắp xếp từ đúng. Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: tần suất, địa điểm, cảm xúc) và dùng liên từ phù hợp để câu tự nhiên hơn.

示例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I often went to a small park near our house, and my parents and I played football or badminton there almost every weekend. I loved those days because I felt happy and active playing outdoors.

建议: Sử dụng thì và cấu trúc ngữ pháp phù hợp (I am older, I still like), tránh dịch từng từ. Nên kết hợp câu với liên từ để logic (but/nevertheless) và diễn giải lý do cụ thể hơn (ví dụ: which sports, how parks help). Nói rõ cảm xúc với lý do chi tiết về chó lớn.

示例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks even though I am older. Parks give me plenty of space to play sports like football and run, but I am a bit afraid of large dogs, so I usually avoid areas where people bring big dogs.

建议: Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng và sửa các lỗi từ vựng/điều hòa số (opinion, parks, city). Giải thích cụ thể vì sao cần thêm công viên và nêu ví dụ cụ thể của vấn đề (ví dụ: rác thải, thiếu quản lý) và đề xuất giải pháp ngắn gọn để trả lời có chiều sâu hơn.

示例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide space for people to meet, exercise and relax. However, many existing parks are poorly maintained and have a lot of litter, so the authorities should improve cleaning and provide more bins.

建议: Nói rõ ràng về một công viên cụ thể: vị trí, đặc điểm, lý do muốn đến. Sử dụng thì tương lai cho dự định (I would like to visit / I want to go) và tránh lặp từ (really really). Thêm chi tiết tích cực và một câu kết hợp giải pháp hoặc cảm xúc để câu tự nhiên hơn.

示例: Yes, I would like to visit a large park near my college that has a big football pitch in the centre. It looks ideal for playing and relaxing, although I worry about stray dogs and cleanliness, so I hope the park managers will keep it cleaner in the future.

× Yes, I did when I was child.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a child.

Missing article 'a' before 'child'. In English, singular countable nouns need an article (a/an/the). Use 'a child' for general reference. Suggestion: add 'a' before singular nouns (e.g., 'when I was a child').

× I really like to go to the park that time.

✓ I really liked going to the park at that time.

Tense and verb form mismatch: the sentence refers to past time 'that time' so 'like' should be past 'liked', and 'to go' is better as the gerund 'going' after 'liked'. Also use 'at that time' for that period. Suggestion: match verb tense to time expressions and use gerund after 'liked'.

× I and my parents always playing football or badminton in the park.

✓ My parents and I always played football or badminton in the park.

Missing auxiliary verb and wrong word order: need subject-verb agreement and correct past tense 'played'. Also common English order places 'I' last: 'My parents and I'. Include the verb 'played' for a complete clause. Suggestion: use correct subject order and include past tense verb for completed past actions.

× Yes I'm get older now but I'm still like going to the parks because the park is give me a plenty of place for playing sports.

✓ Yes, I'm older now but I still like going to parks because they give me plenty of space for playing sports.

Several issues: 'I'm get older' is incorrect — use 'I'm older' or 'I'm getting older' (present continuous). 'I'm still like' should be 'I still like' (no 'am' before like). 'the park is give me' incorrect verb forms; use plural subject 'parks' with verb 'give'. 'a plenty of place' incorrect quantifier and noun: use 'plenty of space' (no 'a', 'space' instead of 'place'). Suggestion: choose correct tense ('I'm getting older' vs 'I'm older'), remove unnecessary 'am' before 'like', use plural agreement and correct quantifier.

× However I really scared of large dogs.

✓ However, I am really scared of large dogs.

Missing auxiliary verb 'am' required with adjective 'scared' to form passive/subject complement. Also add comma after 'However'. Suggestion: include appropriate form of 'be' with adjectives describing feelings (I am scared).

× In my opinions, I really want to see more parks in my cities because parts give a plenty of place for people to connect together, but however I feel disappointed now because the parks in my cities have a lot of garbage they need to change.

✓ In my opinion, I really want to see more parks in my city because parks give people plenty of space to connect, but I feel disappointed now because the parks in my city have a lot of garbage and need to change.

Multiple pronoun and noun choice errors: 'opinions' should be singular 'opinion' in the fixed phrase 'in my opinion'. 'cities' likely should be singular 'city' for one place. 'parts' is wrong; should be 'parks'. 'a plenty of place' incorrect—use 'plenty of space' and no 'a'. The clause 'they need to change' is unclear; rephrase to 'and need to change' to link to parks. Remove redundant 'however' and fix punctuation. Suggestion: use fixed expressions ('in my opinion'), ensure singular/plural consistency, and use correct nouns and quantifiers.

× Yes, there are as many parks I really want to go in the future.

✓ Yes, there are many parks I really want to visit in the future.

Incorrect structure 'there are as many' and wrong verb 'go' for visiting places. Use 'there are many parks' or 'there are so many parks', and use 'visit' for intention to go to specific parks. Suggestion: use correct 'there are' constructions and appropriate verbs for visiting places.

× Near my CD there's a really really big park with a large football yard in the middle.

✓ Near my condo there's a really big park with a large football field in the middle.

Abbreviation 'CD' is unclear; likely 'condo' or 'city'. 'football yard' is not idiomatic—use 'football field'. Reduce redundant 'really really' to 'really'. Suggestion: use clear nouns and common collocations ('football field', 'condo').

× However, I felt disappointed too because in the football yard there are a lot of large dogs that are really scared and they poop everywhere.

✓ However, I feel disappointed too because in the football field there are a lot of large dogs that really scare me and they poop everywhere.

Tense mismatch: the context is present feelings about current situation, so use present 'I feel' not past 'I felt'. 'are really scared' is wrong if speaker means dogs scare the speaker; use 'really scare me'. Maintain consistent present tense. Suggestion: match verb tense to the speaker's ongoing feelings and use correct verb to express cause of fear.