公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundant phrases and fix tense/use of articles. Use linking words if you add details (for example, “because” or “however”).

示例: Yes, I did. I loved visiting parks as a child because they were places where I could play and explore. However, there was no park near my house, so I only went occasionally to parks that were farther away.

建议: Give a concise, natural response: state your current feeling, then give one clear reason and a brief example. Avoid repetition and mixed tenses; use linking words such as “because” and “so.” Keep to two or three sentences maximum.

示例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they remind me of my childhood. For example, when I visit a park now I like to relax on the grass and remember playing there as a child.

建议: Answer clearly and give a specific reason and one concrete suggestion. Avoid filler words and repetition. Use linking words like “because” or “so that” to connect ideas and be specific about what kind of park you mean.

示例: Yes, I would. I think more parks would improve the city because they provide green space and places for families to relax. For instance, I would like a large park with playgrounds, walking paths, and picnic areas so people can enjoy nature and exercise.

建议: Provide a clear statement about your plans, then give a specific example or reason. Remove hesitations and unclear phrasing. Use linking words such as “because” or “when” to explain timing or reasons and keep to two or three sentences.

示例: Yes, I plan to visit several parks in the near future. For example, when I study abroad I hope to explore famous city parks and botanical gardens because I enjoy learning about different landscapes and relaxing outdoors.

× Just for sure I like to go to the park when I was a child, but near my house there was no park.

✓ I definitely liked going to the park when I was a child, but there was no park near my house.

The sentence mixes present tense 'like' with past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'liked' and the gerund 'going' for habitual past actions. Also move 'near my house' to natural position: 'there was no park near my house'. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Yes, really, I love to go to the parks because I love it for my childhood and I was not having any park behind or besides my house.

✓ Yes, I really love going to parks because they remind me of my childhood, and there was no park behind or beside my house.

The sentence mixes present and past with awkward forms 'love to go' and 'I was not having'. Use 'love going' for present habitual liking, 'they remind me of my childhood' for clearer meaning, and past simple 'there was no park' instead of progressive 'was not having'. Also use 'behind or beside' (singular 'beside'). Grammar problem type ID: 5

× So now the time I like very much to go to the park when I when I see any park.

✓ So now I really like to go to the park whenever I see one.

The phrase 'the time I like very much' is ungrammatical and redundant; use 'now I really like' for present preference. Use 'whenever I see one' rather than 'when I when I see any park'. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Yes, I really like to see more parks in my city as I love it from my childhood.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because I have loved them since my childhood.

'Like to see' is acceptable but 'would like' fits the question better about wanting more parks. 'Love it from my childhood' is ungrammatical; use present perfect 'have loved' and 'since my childhood'. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× It is my it is my uh dream to see a huge and big park which can satisfy me as my childhood memory can be recreated.

✓ It is my dream to see a large park that can satisfy me and recreate my childhood memories.

The sentence is repetitive ('it is my it is my'), uses filler 'uh', and has awkward structure 'which can satisfy me as my childhood memory can be recreated'. Simplify wording: 'large' rather than 'huge and big', and use 'recreate my childhood memories'. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Uh, there are many parks I want to go to my near coming future because I am very lucky to have this opportunity to go to the park.

✓ There are many parks I want to visit in the near future because I am lucky to have the opportunity to go to them.

'Near coming future' is incorrect; use 'near future'. 'Want to go to' is okay but 'visit' is more natural. 'Go to the park' should match plural 'parks' as 'go to them'. Grammar problem type ID: 7

× Uh, I want, I'm going for the further, uh, studies in abroad, so I will make sure that there will be a park or not.

✓ I want to study abroad, so I will try to make sure there is a park or not.

'I'm going for the further studies in abroad' is ungrammatical; say 'I want to study abroad' or 'I'm going to study abroad'. 'Will make sure that there will be a park or not' is unclear; use 'try to make sure there is a park or not' or better clarify intent. Use 'abroad' without article. The modal 'will' is okay for future intention but pair with clearer verb 'try to make sure'. Grammar problem type ID: 4}]}<number></number>