公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the answer grammatically correct, more concise and add a clear topic sentence plus one specific supporting detail. Use linking words for coherence. Avoid repetition and keep within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I usually went in the morning because the air was fresh and it felt peaceful. For example, I often did simple exercises like running and stretching with my friends, which made me feel energetic for the whole day.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence, correct verb forms, and separate morning and evening reasons clearly using linking words. Be specific about activities you do.

示例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now. In the morning I go for a brisk walk because the air is fresh and calm; meanwhile in the evening I meet friends to chat and do light exercise such as jogging or calisthenics.

建议: Clarify your main idea with a clear topic sentence and use correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘elderly’ not ‘old people’, ‘walking’ not ‘warning’). Provide one or two specific benefits of more parks and link them logically.

示例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they benefit many groups. For example, elderly people could use them for daily walks and socializing, while young people could use them for running and outdoor exercise with friends.

建议: Start with a clear short answer naming the park, correct noun forms, and give one specific reason why you want to visit using linking words. Avoid repeating words and fix prepositions.

示例: Yes, I plan to visit Vish Park in the future because it is a peaceful and well‑maintained place. For instance, I have heard that it has large green lawns and quiet walking paths, which would be perfect for relaxing and exercising.

× Yes, I like to going to park as a children.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child.

The student used 'to going' which mixes 'to' + gerund incorrectly. After 'like' for past preference we use 'liked' (past) or 'like' (present); the question was about childhood, so past tense is appropriate. Also 'park' should be plural 'parks' or 'the park' and 'children' should be singular 'child' to match 'I'. Suggestion: use 'liked going to parks as a child.'

× I prefer to go in a park in the morning.

✓ I preferred going to the park in the morning.

The student wrote 'go in a park' which is unnatural; use 'go to the park' or 'go to parks'. The question refers to childhood, so past tense 'preferred' fits. Also include the definite article 'the' for a habitual time of day: 'in the morning.' Suggestion: 'I preferred going to the park in the morning.'

× Time goes, I feel very refreshment and I can do any exercise on the park.

✓ At that time I felt very refreshed and I could do any exercise in the park.

Multiple errors: 'Time goes' is incorrect for past context; use 'At that time' or 'Back then.' 'Feel very refreshment' is wrong: 'refreshment' is a noun, use adjective 'refreshed.' 'Can' should be past 'could' to match past narration. Use 'in the park' not 'on the park.' Suggestion: 'At that time I felt very refreshed and I could do any exercise in the park.'

× Yes, I still like to going to park because in the morning time I feel very refreshment and uh, in evening I want to spend more time with my friends and uh, do exercise.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park because in the morning I feel very refreshed and in the evening I want to spend more time with my friends and do exercise.

Again 'like to going' is incorrect; use 'like going' or 'like to go.' Use 'the park' for a specific habitual place. 'Feel very refreshment' should be 'feel very refreshed.' 'In evening' needs article 'in the evening.' Suggestion: 'Yes, I still like going to the park because in the morning I feel very refreshed and in the evening I want to spend more time with my friends and exercise.'

× Yes, I like see more parks in my city go old people can go to go for warning work, evening work, 4 runnings for summer exercise with our friendship.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city so older people can go for morning walks, evening walks, or runs for summer exercise with their friends.

Many issues: 'like see' should be 'would like to see' or 'like to see.' 'go old people' is incorrect order; use 'so older people can.' 'Warning work' is likely 'morning walk.' 'Evening work' should be 'evening walks.' '4 runnings' is nonsensical; use 'runs.' 'Our friendship' should be 'their friends.' Also tense/modal 'would like' expresses desire. Suggestion: 'Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city so older people can go for morning walks, evening walks, or runs for exercise with their friends.'

× Yes, I want to go parking in the future in my city.

✓ Yes, I want to go to parks in the future in my city.

'Go parking' is incorrect; use 'go to parks' or 'go park' is wrong. Use plural 'parks' if speaking generally. Keep present tense for future intention using 'want to.' Suggestion: 'Yes, I want to go to parks in the future in my city.'

× Man Park is a valuable here.

✓ Man Park is a valuable place here.

The sentence lacks a noun after 'valuable.' 'Valuable' is an adjective that needs a noun like 'place.' Suggestion: 'Man Park is a valuable place here.'

× That is Vish Park.

✓ That is Vish Park.

This sentence is correct as a proper noun identification. No grammatical change needed. Explanation: 'Vish Park' is a name; using 'That is Vish Park.' is appropriate.

× When I go to there there I can feel very refreshment.

✓ When I go there I feel very refreshed.

'Go to there there' is redundant and incorrect; use 'go there.' 'Feel very refreshment' uses noun instead of adjective; use 'feel very refreshed.' Present tense 'feel' is acceptable when speaking about general impression. Suggestion: 'When I go there I feel very refreshed.'

× It is a very peaceful place.

✓ It is a very peaceful place.

This sentence is already correct. 'A very peaceful place' is a proper adjective-noun combination describing the park. No change needed.