公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cần sửa ngữ pháp ở thì và cấu trúc câu để tự nhiên hơn; rút gọn và tránh dư thừa; cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn về kỷ niệm hoặc cảm xúc để câu trả lời phong phú. Ví dụ: dùng quá khứ đơn nhất quán, chia động từ đúng, dùng từ nối hợp lý.

示例: Yes, I loved going to parks with my family when I was a child. We visited every weekend and I enjoyed jogging along the paths, watching different kinds of birds, and having picnics on the grass.

建议: Cần điều chỉnh ngữ pháp (possessive: school's assignment → school assignments) và nối ý mượt mà hơn; cân bằng giữa khẳng định và giải thích, thêm từ nối để tạo logic (e.g., although, because).

示例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, although I don't go as often now because I am busy with school assignments and preparing for my university entrance exam.

建议: Ngữ pháp sai (subject-verb agreement: city already have → city already has; possessive/plural: those money → that money); câu thiếu cụ thể và lý do rõ ràng; đề xuất dùng linking words rõ hơn (e.g., however, because, therefore) và nêu ví dụ cụ thể về cơ sở hạ tầng thay thế.

示例: It sounds like a good idea in principle, but my city already has a park. I think the local government could spend that money on other infrastructure, such as improving public transport or healthcare facilities.

建议: Cần sửa ngữ pháp và trật tự từ (e.g., 'I wonder if Disneyland counts as a park'; 'it has been my dream since I was a child'); tránh lỗi số ít/đa số (a cartoon characters → cartoon characters / a cartoon character); làm rõ cảm xúc và thêm chi tiết về lý do muốn tới đó.

示例: I'm not sure if Disneyland is technically a park, but it has been my dream since childhood to visit. I would love to meet the cartoon characters and enjoy the rides and shows.

× Well, certainly when I was younger, going to the park with my family is right up my alley.

✓ Well, certainly when I was younger, going to the park with my family was right up my alley.

The sentence refers to a past habitual preference ('when I was younger'), so the verb should be in the past tense. Use 'was' instead of 'is' to match the time frame. Suggestion: keep time references consistent by using past tense verbs for past situations.

× I come there every weekend and do many activities such as jogging, watch birds or have a picnic.

✓ I went there every weekend and did many activities such as jogging, watching birds, or having a picnic.

The speaker is describing past habitual actions ('as a child'), so verbs must be past tense ('went', 'did'). Also gerunds are needed after 'such as' to list activities consistently: 'jogging, watching birds, or having a picnic'. Suggestion: use past tense for past habits and maintain parallel gerund forms in lists.

× Well, I still love going to the park now.

✓ Well, I still love going to the park now.

This sentence is already correct; it describes a present habit and uses the present tense appropriately. No change needed.

× However, I'm currently very busy for school's assignment and need to prepare for my university entrance exam.

✓ However, I'm currently very busy with school assignments and need to prepare for my university entrance exam.

Use 'busy with' rather than 'busy for', and 'school assignments' (plural) is more natural than "school's assignment". 'Busy with' correctly links the adjective 'busy' to the noun. Suggestion: use correct preposition 'with' and pluralize countable nouns when appropriate.

× That's the most important exam in my entire life.

✓ That's the most important exam of my life.

The original is grammatically acceptable but wordy; 'of my life' is the standard idiom. No grammatical error other than style. Suggestion: prefer concise, natural expressions.

× It seems like a good idea, however my city already have one so I think that if they have to build another, they can spend those money for another infrastructure.

✓ It seems like a good idea; however, my city already has one, so I think that if they have to build another, they could spend that money on other infrastructure.

Multiple problems: subject-verb agreement 'city already has' (singular city needs 'has'), pronoun/number 'they' referring to the city is acceptable for authorities but adjust verbs modal 'could' is more polite; 'those money' is incorrect—use 'that money' or 'the money'; preposition 'spend...on' not 'for'; 'another infrastructure' is uncountable/awkward — use 'other infrastructure' or 'different infrastructure projects'. Suggestion: match subject and verb, use correct determiners for uncountable nouns, and use 'spend ... on'.

× I wonder if Disneyland is counted at a park, however, is my dream since I was a tiny child that I want to go there and meet a cartoon characters.

✓ I wonder if Disneyland is considered a park; however, it has been my dream since I was a tiny child to go there and meet cartoon characters.

Several issues: 'is counted at a park' is incorrect—use 'considered a park' or 'counted as a park'. The clause 'is my dream since I was a tiny child' needs present perfect 'has been my dream since I was a child' to link past to present. Also 'that I want to go there and meet a cartoon characters' is ungrammatical: remove 'that' and change 'a cartoon characters' to 'cartoon characters' (plural) or 'a cartoon character' (singular). Suggestion: use 'has been' for ongoing desires from past to present, correct verb patterns ('considered'), and ensure noun number agreement.