公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Keep answers grammatical, concise and directly relevant. Begin with a clear topic sentence (past tense), avoid repetition, correct verb forms and word choice (e.g., 'liked', 'greenery'), and give one specific supporting detail. Use one linking phrase if needed.

示例: Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because they were full of greenery and fresh air. For example, I often played near the big oak tree with my friends, which made afternoons feel relaxing and fun.

建议: Answer directly using present simple and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'because' and 'also'), correct verb agreement, and clarify vague phrases like 'important works' by giving a concrete example (e.g., exercise or reading). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they have a lot of greenery and offer clean air, which is refreshing in a polluted city. I also go there to exercise and read, so parks are both relaxing and useful.

建议: Be concise and coherent: use present tense and correct grammar. Avoid repeating reasons and unclear phrasing. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'therefore') and give a specific reason or effect of more parks (e.g., reduced air pollution, better community spaces). One clear supporting sentence is enough.

示例: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they would help reduce air pollution caused by heavy traffic. More parks could also provide pleasant public spaces for newcomers who move here for work.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence and use correct future expressions. Avoid awkward adjectives ('heartwarming' for roses is odd) and use concise, natural descriptions. Add one specific detail about why you want to visit (e.g., seasonal blooms, layout, events).

示例: Yes — I would like to visit the Rose Garden in Chandigarh in the future because it is famous for its large variety of roses and beautiful landscaping. I imagine walking among the flower beds during bloom season would be lovely and very relaxing.

× Yes, I like to going to parks as a child because in the park there was Green Day that make us feel fresh and the fresh air feels very soothing.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because in the park there were green trees that made us feel refreshed and the fresh air felt very soothing.

The phrase 'like to going' mixes infinitive and gerund forms; use 'liked going' for past habitual action (Verb + -ing form and Past tense). 'As a child' indicates past, so change 'like' to 'liked'. 'There was Green Day' is unclear and likely meant 'there were green trees' (singular/plural and article). 'Make' should be past 'made' to match past tense. 'Feel fresh' should be 'feel refreshed' for natural collocation. Also adjust 'feels' to 'felt' for past tense consistency.

× Yes, I like still like going to the parks these days because the parks serves a lot of greenery and in today's era there was a lot of pollution.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks these days because the parks have a lot of greenery and there is a lot of pollution nowadays.

Redundant 'like still like' should be 'still like' (word order). 'the parks serves' is subject-verb agreement error; 'parks' is plural so use 'have' (Present tense/Subject-verb agreement). 'in today's era there was' mixes present/time expression with past tense; use 'there is' or 'nowadays' to match present tense. Also drop unnecessary 'the' before 'parks' when speaking generally.

× So in the park we can feel the fresh air.

✓ So in the park we can feel the fresh air.

This sentence is grammatically fine; no change needed. It uses modal 'can' with base verb 'feel' correctly and the tense fits the present general statement. (Included because instruction 2 allows only correcting listed types; here none required.)

× Also the parks can help us do important works.

✓ Also the parks can help us do important work.

'Important works' is unnatural in English; 'work' as an uncountable noun is appropriate for general activities. The sentence structure and verb use are otherwise correct. Use 'help us do important work' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there was too much pollution in my city because of the cars and public transport.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there is too much pollution from cars and public transport.

The clause 'there was too much pollution' uses past tense while the speaker is referring to the present situation; change to present 'there is'. Avoid repeating 'in my city'. Use 'from cars and public transport' for correct preposition use.

× As our city provides a lot of job opportunities for people like to travel here.

✓ Our city provides many job opportunities that attract people to travel here.

Original sentence is ungrammatical: 'for people like to travel here' mixes structures. Use 'that attract people to travel here' or 'which lead people to move here'. Also change 'a lot of' to 'many' for countable 'job opportunities'. This addresses sentence structure and clarity.

× So by improving the parks and making it more they it can be improved air pollution.

✓ So by improving the parks and making them larger and greener, air quality can be improved.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Making it more they' is incorrect. Use plural pronoun 'them' to match 'parks'. Rephrase to 'making them larger and greener' for clear meaning and change 'it can be improved air pollution' to 'air quality can be improved' for natural English.

× There is a park that I want to go in the future, that is the Rose garden in Chandigarh.

✓ There is a park that I want to visit in the future; it is the Rose Garden in Chandigarh.

Use 'visit' instead of 'go' with a direct object for clarity. 'In the future' is fine, but comma splice fixed with semicolon. Capitalize proper noun 'Rose Garden'. 'That is' replaced by 'it is' for natural phrasing.

× I want to say the pleasant and heartwarming roses there which can be a breathtaking experience for me.

✓ I want to see the pleasant and beautiful roses there, which would be a breathtaking experience for me.

'Say the pleasant and heartwarming roses' is incorrect verb choice; use 'see'. 'Heartwarming' describes emotions, not roses; 'beautiful' is more appropriate. Use conditional 'would be' to indicate hypothetical future experience. Also add comma before 'which'.

× So whenever I got chance in future, I will definitely go there.

✓ So whenever I get the chance in the future, I will definitely go there.

'Got' is past tense but speaker refers to a future or general condition; use present simple 'get' in time clauses referring to the future (when + present, then 'will'). Add article 'the' before 'chance' and 'in the future' for natural phrasing.'