公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答をより自然で明確にするために、主語と時制を一貫させ、語彙を正確に使いましょう。また、余計な繰り返しを避け、例を具体的に述べると良いです。例えば「I liked playing on the swings and jumping rope」など短い主旨文の後に理由や具体例を一つか二つ加える構成にします。発音や単語選び（例："excite exercise"→"exciting exercise"や不要な語の削除）も改善しましょう。

示例: Yes, I did. I enjoyed playing in parks because I liked running and jumping rope. For example, I often spent hours on the swings and practised skipping with my friends, which was fun and good exercise.

建议: 現在の習慣について話すときは時制と主語を正しく使い、理由を簡潔に述べてください。冗長な語や繰り返し（"I did" を現在形にするなど）を避け、リンク表現（"however", "because"）を適切に使って論理的につなげましょう。例えば『I still like parks, but I go less often because my friends prefer shopping』のように。

示例: I still like parks, but I go less often now. For example, I usually go downtown to shop with my friends because they aren’t interested in visiting parks.

建议: 理由を明確にして、情報を整理して話しましょう。繰り返しを避け、具体的な問題点と期待を簡潔に述べると自然に聞こえます。接続詞（"because", "so"）を正しく使い、最後に望む結果を加えると良いです。例えば『I would like more parks because tall buildings block views of nature』のように。

示例: Yes, I would. There are many tall buildings in my city, so I rarely see green spaces or views of nature. More parks would give residents places to relax and enjoy the outdoors.

建议: 行きたい場所を述べるときは、正確な語順と表現を使い、具体的な理由や期待する体験を付け加えましょう。曖昧な表現（"there I hear that from it's so big"）は避け、"I've heard it's very large and scenic"のように情報源や感想を明確に。感情を一文でまとめると効果的です。

示例: Yes, I would like to visit Nayukara Falls. I’ve heard it’s a very large and beautiful natural site, and I want to see the waterfalls and walk in the surrounding forest.

× I like to excite exercise and I like to run and use jump rope and I also like the hopping like Trumpley, something like that.

✓ I like exciting exercises; I like to run, use a jump rope, and also like hopping, something like that.

The original uses 'to excite exercise' which is incorrect. Use the gerund 'exciting' after 'like' when referring to activities, or use the infinitive 'to' with a verb (e.g., 'to run'). Also 'use jump rope' needs an article 'a jump rope'. Punctuation and coordination ('and') should be clearer. Suggestion: choose either 'I like exciting exercises' or list activities with correct forms (gerund or infinitive consistently).

× Yes I did but I I sometimes go downtown and I just go shopping because my friends doesn't like parks and after junior high school many people doesn't go to parks.

✓ Yes I do, but I sometimes go downtown and I just go shopping because my friends don't like parks, and after junior high school many people don't go to parks.

The response should be in present tense ('do' not 'did') because the question asks about current habit. Subject-verb agreement: 'friends' is plural so use 'don't' not 'doesn't'. Repetition 'I I' removed and clauses connected with commas. Suggestion: use correct present simple for habits and match verb to plural subjects.

× Yes I yes I would like to see more parks in my city because there are too many high buildings so I can't see nature and trains from my house and also many Japanese parks I think.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are too many tall buildings, so I can't see nature from my house; I think many Japanese cities lack parks.

Original sentence is wordy and unclear. 'Would like' is fine as a modal expression for desire, but 'high buildings' is better as 'tall buildings'. 'Can't see nature and trains' is confusing; likely meant 'can't see nature' — separate idea about trains removed or clarified. Rephrase for clarity and concision. Suggestion: simplify and ensure modifiers ('tall') are appropriate.

× Yes, there are big. For example, I want to go to Nayukara Falls because there I hear that from it's so big and so nature and it's so huge. I really want to go there.

✓ Yes, there are big parks. For example, I want to go to Nayukara Falls because I heard that it is very large and very natural; it's huge. I really want to go there.

'There are big' is incomplete — needs a noun ('parks'). Use past tense 'heard' for reported information. 'From it's so big and so nature' is ungrammatical; replace with 'it is very large and very natural'. Maintain consistency in tense and use correct pronoun 'it'. Suggestion: specify the noun after 'there are', use 'heard' for something you were told, and use adjectives correctly ('natural', 'large').