公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence. Correct repetitions and grammar (e.g., “parents”), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., “because” or “for example”). Keep it under five sentences.

示例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because my parents often took me there on weekends. For example, we would feed the ducks and play on the swings, which made those days fun and memorable.

建议: Start with a clear response (yes/no) and give a specific reason using correct grammar and linking words. Fix verb forms and vocabulary (e.g., “study for my master’s abroad,” “I have a busy schedule”). Limit to two or three sentences.

示例: Not really. I am studying for a master’s degree abroad and I have a very busy schedule, so I rarely have time to visit parks. I hope to go more often once my timetable is less hectic.

建议: Answer the question directly (Yes/No/Maybe) and give a clear reason with specific details. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example”) and correct word choice (e.g., “people walk” not “phrase their moves”).

示例: Yes, I would like to see more parks because they give people space to exercise and relax. For example, in my neighborhood many people walk in the parks every morning, so adding more parks would reduce crowding.

建议: Give a direct answer and be specific about which park or what kind of park you want to visit. Use correct future forms (e.g., “I will go” or “I would like to visit”) and include a reason or detail about who you will go with and what you will do.

示例: Yes, I would like to visit the botanical garden near the city center because it has beautiful flower displays. I will go there with my friends and family to have a picnic and take photos.

× I remember, I remember that when I was a child, I generally went to the park with my parent parent and it is a wonderful experience for me and it gives me better answer and quality.

✓ I remember that when I was a child, I generally went to the park with my parents; it was a wonderful experience for me and it gave me better health and quality of life.

The sentence uses singular 'parent' when plural 'parents' is intended (singular and plural issue). Also the clause contains tense and word choice issues: use past tense 'was' and 'gave' to match 'when I was a child'. 'Better answer and quality' is unclear; likely intended 'better health and quality of life', so replace with a clear noun phrase. Suggestions: use 'parents' for more than one parent, keep past tense consistently, and choose appropriate nouns for meaning.

× Nowadays I am studying for my master in abroad that's why I am suffering from electric schedule so that's why I don't going to parks nowadays.

✓ Nowadays I am studying for my master's degree abroad; that's why I am busy with a tight schedule, so I don't go to parks nowadays.

Multiple grammar problems are present but corrected items follow the 'Present tense issue' rule: 'I don't going to parks' is incorrect because the base form 'go' must follow 'do' in present simple negative. Use 'I don't go'. Also use 'am studying' for current ongoing action and 'master's degree abroad' for correct noun phrase. Replace 'suffering from electric schedule' (unclear) with 'busy with a tight schedule'. Suggestions: use 'don't' + base verb for negatives, maintain consistent present continuous for ongoing study, and use clear collocations like 'master's degree' and 'tight schedule'.

× In my city, so many parks where I live, usually people on the morning walking walking in the parks and phrase their moves.

✓ In my city, where I live, there are many parks; usually people walk in the parks in the morning and exercise.

This sentence has sentence structure errors and incorrect word order: 'so many parks where I live' should be 'there are many parks where I live' (use 'there are' to introduce existence). 'Usually people on the morning walking walking' is ungrammatical—use 'people walk in the parks in the morning'. 'Phrase their moves' is unclear; likely intended 'exercise' or 'stretch'. Suggestions: use 'there are' to state existence, place time expressions ('in the morning') after the verb or at start, use correct verb forms ('walk' not 'walking' after auxiliary), and choose appropriate verbs like 'exercise'.

× If I get a chance to go to the park in the future, I obviously going to park with my friends and family.

✓ If I get a chance to go to the park in the future, I will obviously go to the park with my friends and family.

The error concerns future tense formation: 'I obviously going to park' is incorrect. To express future intention use 'will' + base verb ('I will go') or 'am going to' + base verb ('I am going to go'). Also include the article 'the' before 'park' if referring to a specific park. Suggestions: use 'I will go' or 'I am going to go' for future statements and keep correct word order: subject + auxiliary + base verb.