公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it is slightly repetitive with multiple 'used to' phrases and could be more concise. Add a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details (what you did, how it felt), and vary vocabulary to sound more natural.

示例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my grandmother: she would walk slowly while I played tag and climbed trees with my friends, which made me feel free and happy.

建议: Good direct response, but the phrasing is awkward and repetitive. Use one clear sentence about your preference, then explain the reason with a concise time frame and smoother phrasing. Avoid repeating 'parks' and 'absolutely.'

示例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but due to my busy schedule I can usually visit only once a week or every ten days.

建议: Your idea is relevant, but the sentence structure is awkward and wordy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'green spaces' instead of repeating 'parks').

示例: Yes, I would. More green spaces in the city would give people easy access to nature and quiet places to relax, which could improve both physical and mental wellbeing.

建议: The response answers the question but is slightly repetitive and could be more specific. Mention the park by name or a distinctive feature, give a brief reason why you want to go, and use smoother linking words ('because', 'so that'). Avoid repeating 'would like'.

示例: Yes. There's a large, beautiful park in central Delhi that I've heard about; it has wide lawns and lakes. I'd love to take my children there to picnic and explore the gardens for a whole day.

× I do like going to the parks, but because of my busy schedule I am hardly able to go to the parks in once in a week or once in 10 days.

✓ I do like going to parks, but because of my busy schedule I am hardly able to go to the parks once a week or once every ten days.

Remove the unnecessary definite article before 'parks' when speaking generally; use the correct frequency expressions: 'once a week' or 'once every ten days'. Also remove the extra 'in' before 'once' which is ungrammatical. Use numerals spelled out or words consistently; here 'ten' is preferred in running text.

× What I personally feel that there has to be more parks in my city because that will give an environment for everyone to visit the parks and that would make them feel relaxed.

✓ What I personally feel is that there should be more parks in my city because that would provide an environment for everyone to visit and help them feel relaxed.

The original has a faulty 'that'-clause structure: 'What I personally feel that...' is ungrammatical. Use 'What I personally feel is that...' Also replace 'has to be' with the more natural modal 'should be' and change 'give an environment' to 'provide an environment' or omit 'an' and 'the parks' repetition. Simplify to avoid redundancy and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× There is one park in the central Delhi which is quite beautiful and I have also heard that the park is very big.

✓ There is one park in central Delhi which is quite beautiful, and I have also heard that the park is very big.

Do not use the definite article 'the' before 'central Delhi' when referring to the area in general; 'in central Delhi' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also add a comma before the coordinating conjunction for clarity.

× Given a chance, I would like to go there along with my kids and would like to spend a day over there.

✓ Given a chance, I would like to go there with my kids and spend a day there.

Avoid redundant 'would like' repetition; after 'would like to go' use parallel infinitive structure 'and spend'. 'Along with' is acceptable but 'with' is more natural here; 'over there' is wordy—'there' suffices.