公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve clarity and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question (Yes/No). Then give 1–2 specific supporting details (memories, activities) linked with simple connectors (because, and, when). Keep to under five sentences and avoid unclear phrases.

示例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I especially enjoyed playing on the swings and running around with my friends because there was a big grassy area. Those visits were fun and energetic, and they helped me make close childhood memories.

建议: Provide a direct answer (Yes/No) and give specific, relevant reasons. Avoid unrelated phrases. Use linking words (because, so, and) to connect your reason. Keep the response concise and natural.

示例: Yes, I still like going to parks because they are peaceful and a good place to exercise. For example, I often go for a jog or read on a bench to relax.

建议: Expand the short answer with one or two clear reasons and a brief example. Use linking words such as because or for example to make your point coherent. Be specific about benefits (health, environment, community).

示例: Of course. I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve air quality and provide recreational space for families. For example, more parks would give children safe places to play and neighbors places to meet.

建议: Answer directly and give a specific example of a park you want to visit or type of park (botanical garden, national park) and why. Use correct grammar (want to go, visit) and linking words to add a reason or plan. Keep it concise and clear.

示例: Yes, I want to visit the new botanical garden that recently opened in the city because I enjoy seeing different plants and taking photos. I plan to go there next month with a friend to explore the gardens.

× Yes, when I had child unruly giving. Is don't alike.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I behaved unruly. I didn't like it.

ID 26: The original contains multiple structural errors and ungrammatical word order. 'Had child' incorrectly attempts to express 'was a child' (use 'was a child' for age/state). 'Unruly giving' is ungrammatical; use 'behaved unruly' or 'was unruly'. 'Is don't alike' is not a valid clause; intended meaning seems to be 'I didn't like it.' Suggestion: reorganize into two clear clauses: 'When I was a child, I behaved unruly. I didn't like it.' Use past tense ('was', 'behaved', 'didn't') to match the time frame.

× First, because it's my fifth first place.

✓ Firstly, it's my favourite place.

ID 26: The sentence is unclear and uses incorrect phrases 'my fifth first place' which is nonsensical. The examiner asked if you still like going to parks; a concise answer is 'Firstly' or 'I still like them because...'. If the intended meaning is that a specific park is the student's favourite, use 'my favourite place.' Maintain present tense 'it's' for a current preference.

× Of course I want to. I want to giving to the bash another park in the future.

✓ Of course I want to. I want to go to another park in the future.

ID 8: 'Want to' must be followed by the base form of a verb (infinitive), not a gerund. 'Giving' is the -ing form and is incorrect after 'want to.' 'Giving to the bash' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended 'go to another park.' Use 'go' (base form) after 'want to' and correct the object: 'another park.' Also keep future intention simple: 'I want to go to another park in the future.'