公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be careful with tense and sentence clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, avoid repetition, and add one specific supporting detail. Use one linking word if you add extra information.

示例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, I used to play football with my friends every weekend, which helped me make close friendships and stay active.

建议: Answer directly and naturally, avoid repeating previous phrases exactly. Use a concise topic sentence and a specific reason with a linking word. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'score above 90%').

示例: Not really. At the moment I prefer studying because I want to score above 90% in my Class 12 CBSE exams, so I spend most of my free time revising.

建议: Use correct verb forms and add a linking word to connect idea and consequence. Give a specific benefit or example rather than general statements.

示例: Yes, I would. More parks would give children safe places to play, and as a result they could reduce stress and improve their physical health by exercising outdoors.

建议: Structure your answer: start with a clear short response, then add one specific future plan using linking words. Avoid long run-on sentences and fix small grammar issues ('go to a park', 'for enjoyment').

示例: Not at the moment. However, in the future I would like to visit local parks with my family for short day trips because they are relaxing and a good way to bond with children.

× Yeah, when I was a child, I like to go in parks, but now as I was, I'm 17 years old now, I'm focusing on my future and my studies.

✓ Yeah, when I was a child, I liked to go to parks, but now, at 17 years old, I am focusing on my future and my studies.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. 'Like' should be past 'liked' to match 'when I was a child' (present tense issue). Use 'go to parks' rather than 'go in parks' because the correct preposition for visiting parks is 'to'. Also remove redundant phrase 'as I was' and clarify 'at 17 years old'. Suggestion: keep past tense for childhood activities and use 'go to' for places. Use consistent tense: 'When I was a child, I liked...' and correct preposition 'to'.

× No, as I said, I am focusing now on my future and my studies. I want to score 90% above in my board CBSE exam class 12th.

✓ No, as I said, I am focusing now on my future and my studies. I want to score above 90% in my Class 12 CBSE board exam.

'I want to score 90% above' is ungrammatical for expressing a target percentage. The correct phrasing is 'above 90%' or 'over 90%'. Also the word order for the exam name should be 'Class 12 CBSE board exam'. Keep present simple for current desire and use 'in' for exams. Suggestion: say 'I want to score above 90% in my Class 12 CBSE board exam.'

× Yes, as many children goes to park for their enjoyment and it brings happiness in their lives and reduce their stress.

✓ Yes, many children go to parks for their enjoyment; it brings happiness to their lives and reduces their stress.

'Children' is plural so the verb should be 'go' not 'goes' (subject-verb agreement). Use plural 'parks' or 'the park(s)' and correct preposition 'to parks' and 'brings happiness to their lives'. Also 'reduce' should be 'reduces' to match singular subject 'it' or better rewrite to 'and reduces their stress.' Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject number and keep parallel verb forms.

× No, not really. I'm not fond of parks right now but I will go with my kids and with my family for enjoying our small trips or like big trips and to reduce my stress I will go to park.

✓ No, not really. I'm not fond of parks right now, but I will go with my kids and my family on short trips or long trips to relax and reduce my stress; I will go to the park then.

Several tense and phrasing issues: 'for enjoying our small trips or like big trips' is awkward. Use 'on short trips or long trips' and 'to relax and reduce my stress' is clearer. 'Go to park' needs the article 'the park'. Maintain future intention with 'I will go' but improve parallel structure and word choice. Suggestion: use 'on short or long trips' and 'go to the park'.