公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Fix grammar and be specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct tense and verbs, and give one brief specific detail (location or activity). Keep it under 3 sentences. For example, say whether you liked parks and why, using linking words if adding details.

示例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often played on the swings and had picnics with my family, which made those visits very memorable.

建议: Use correct verb forms and expand slightly with a reason. Start directly, then add one supporting detail with a linking word (e.g., "because" or "so"). Avoid redundancy.

示例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax and get fresh air, so I usually go there on weekends.

建议: Clarify your idea and correct grammar. Give a specific reason why more parks are needed and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid unclear phrases like "Have a peaceful high."

示例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for exercise and socializing, which would improve residents' health and well-being.

建议: Be specific about which parks and why. Use correct prepositions and provide one or two concrete examples or features you want to see. Keep it concise and coherent using linking words like "for example" or "such as."

示例: Yes, I want to visit several parks in the future, for example the new riverside park with walking trails and a botanical garden, because I enjoy nature walks and photography.

× Yes, I like to going to work as a child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child.

The original sentence incorrectly combines 'to' with the -ing form ('to going'), which is ungrammatical. After 'like' when referring to a habitual past preference, use either 'liked' + gerund or 'liked to' + base verb. Also the content 'going to work' does not match the examiner's question about parks; it should be 'going to parks.' Finally tense should be past ('liked') to match 'as a child.' Suggestion: use 'liked going to parks as a child.'

× Yes, I still like to going back now.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks now.

Again 'to going' is incorrect; use the gerund after 'like' ('like going') or 'like to' + base verb. The phrase 'going back now' is unclear in context; the examiner asked about parks, so say 'going to parks now.' Maintain present tense 'like' for current preference. Suggestion: 'I still like going to parks.'

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are more. Have a peaceful high.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they make the city more peaceful and provide fresh air.

The original contains unclear and fragmented clauses. 'Because there are more' is incomplete and meaningless without an object; 'Have a peaceful high' is ungrammatical and likely a wrong word choice. Rephrase to give a clear reason: parks make the city more peaceful and provide fresh air. Maintain conditional/modal 'would like' for preference. Suggestion: give a complete clause explaining why more parks are desirable.

× Yes, there are many parks I want to go in the future, like in local park on luxury park.

✓ Yes, there are many parks I want to visit in the future, such as the local park and the luxury park.

Problems: missing infinitive or correct verb ('want to go' needs 'to' plus location or better 'visit'); preposition use ('in the future' is okay but position can be after the clause), and awkward listing ('like in local park on luxury park' uses wrong prepositions and articles). Use 'visit' for places, include articles before 'local park' and 'luxury park' ('the local park and the luxury park'), and place 'in the future' after the verb phrase. Suggestion: 'I want to visit the local park and the luxury park in the future.'