公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be careful with verb tenses and reduce hesitation. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one specific detail and a brief reason. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas and avoid repeating the same phrase.

示例: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. For example, I used to go to the local park every afternoon because I was very energetic and enjoyed running and playing on the swings. This routine helped me make friends and stay active.

建议: Use the present simple to describe current habits and be concise. Avoid repeating words like "actually." State your main point first, then give one clear reason and one brief specific example (use linking words like because or however).

示例: Not really — I rarely go to parks these days because I'm very busy with work. For instance, I usually only visit a park once every few weeks to get some fresh air when I have free time.

建议: Make your response smoother and more natural by using a clear topic sentence and precise vocabulary (e.g., "green spaces" or "vegetation" instead of "visuality"). Explain one concrete benefit and use a linking phrase to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because green spaces help reduce stress and improve air quality. For example, having a small park near my apartment would give me a calm place to walk and relax after work.

建议: Use correct future tense and be concise. Begin with a clear statement about your desire, then give specific details (what you will do there and why). Avoid filler words and pronunciation issues like unclear place names.

示例: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York in the future. It's on my bucket list to have a picnic there, listen to music, and read a book because it seems like a peaceful and iconic place to relax.

× Yeah, I really like to go to the park when I was child, umm, because I was a very active child, so I really like to hang around and run in the park.

✓ Yeah, I really liked going to the park when I was a child because I was very active, so I liked hanging around and running in the park.

The speaker mixes present simple ('like') with past time marker ('when I was a child'). Use past tense consistently: 'liked' and gerunds 'going', 'hanging', 'running' are more natural after 'liked'. Also insert the article 'a' before 'child'. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs and gerunds when talking about habitual actions in the past.'

× So I especially used to go to the park.

✓ So I especially used to go to the park.

This sentence is acceptable but word order is slightly awkward. 'Used to' already indicates a past habitual action, which fits the question about childhood. Suggestion: Keep as 'I especially used to go to the park' or 'I used to go to the park a lot.' (No tense change required.)

× Actually I don't like to go park in these days because actually I'm really busy now, so I often go to the park and not that many time.

✓ Actually I don't like to go to the park these days because I'm really busy, so I don't go to the park very often.

The speaker uses present tense but has several problems: missing article 'the' before 'park', incorrect phrase 'in these days' should be 'these days', and contradictory/incoherent second clause. Use present simple negative 'don't like' for general preference and 'don't go... very often' for frequency. 'Not that many time' is ungrammatical; replace with 'very often'. Suggestion: Use correct articles and adverbial phrases for frequency.'

× Yeah, I absolutely want to see the park more in my city because the park is really green as a visuality, so if I look the park I feel more comfortable and calm.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because the parks are very green visually, so when I look at them I feel more comfortable and calm.

Errors: 'the park' is wrong when speaking of parks in general; use plural 'parks' and 'more parks'. 'See' is better as 'would like to see' for preference. 'As a visuality' is unidiomatic; use 'visually'. 'If I look the park' is incorrect; use 'when I look at them'. Also adjust verb forms and plurality for consistency. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for generalization and correct preposition 'look at'.'

× At the future, I really wanted to go to the Central Park at the Madison umm, one of my buck list is do the picnic in the Central Park and just listen to the music and reading the book.

✓ In the future, I really want to go to Central Park in Manhattan. One item on my bucket list is to have a picnic in Central Park and just listen to music and read a book.

Multiple errors: 'At the future' should be 'In the future'. 'Really wanted' mixes past with future intention; use present 'want' or 'want to' for future plans. 'The Central Park at the Madison' is unclear; 'Central Park in Manhattan' is likely intended. 'Buck list' should be 'bucket list'. Use infinitive 'to have a picnic' and parallel gerunds: 'listen to music and read a book' (not 'reading the book'). Suggestion: Use 'in the future' and correct noun phrases and parallel verb forms.'

× So I really like to go to the Central Park in future.

✓ So I would really like to go to Central Park in the future.

Mixes present 'like' with future intent; use 'would like' for polite future desire. Use article/noun form 'Central Park' without 'the' when naming the park, and include 'in the future'. Suggestion: Use 'would like to' for expressing future wishes and include 'in the future' phrase.