公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Улучшите грамматику и порядок слов: используйте простые правильные времена (Past Simple) и уверенную структуру предложения. Избегайте повторов (несколько раз упоминается «parks») и уточните, что именно делал брат, чтобы вы были счастливы. Сделайте предложение короче (1–2 предложения) и добавьте связующее слово для плавности.

示例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My brother used to play with me there and we would climb trees and run around, which made me very happy.

建议: Исправьте ошибки с грамматикой и порядком слов: используйте правильную форму глагола (isn't interesting → doesn't interest me) и укажите частоту более естественно. Дайте краткое объяснение причины и соедините фразы связующим словом (for example / because).

示例: Not really — parks don't interest me much now because I prefer indoor activities. I only visit a park about once a month for a short walk.

建议: Уменьшите заполнители («uh») и постройте более чёткие предложения: начните с прямого ответа, затем объясните причину и приведите конкретные примеры. Используйте корректную форму существительных и притяжательных конструкций (children → children; beneficial for children).

示例: Yes, I would. More parks would be beneficial for children because they offer space for activities. For example, kids could play games, climb trees and take part in organised outdoor events.

建议: Сформулируйте ответ более конкретно: назовите тип парка и причину. Избегайте повторов и неверных форм глаголов (to have → have). Добавьте связку (because / especially) и один-два конкретных примера развлечений.

示例: I'd like to visit large public parks or amusement parks in the future because they have many attractions. For example, I would enjoy the swings, roller coasters and organised shows there.

× When I was a child I always went to parks and in parks work my brother he make me very happy when I went to parks.

✓ When I was a child I always went to parks, and my brother used to make me very happy when we were there.

The original sentence has multiple structure issues: missing conjunction punctuation, incorrect word order ('in parks work my brother'), incorrect verb form 'make' for past habitual action, and repetition. Use 'used to' or past continuous to show habitual past action and reorder to 'my brother used to make me very happy when we were there'. This improves clarity and corrects subject-verb agreement and sentence structure.

× I would say no because for me it doesn't interesting and I when I go to parks one time a month.

✓ I would say no because it's not interesting to me, and I go to parks only once a month.

Errors: incorrect verb 'doesn't interesting' should be 'it's not interesting' (adjective requires verb 'be'), extra word 'I' misplaced, and incorrect expression 'one time a month' should be 'once a month'. Use present simple 'I go' for habitual actions and 'it's not interesting to me' for opinions.

× From my point of view, uh, it will be, uh, beneficial for children's, uh, to have a great time for them and, uh, through make, uh, some kinds of activities, uh, for example, uh, play, climb trees and so.

✓ From my point of view, it would be beneficial for children to have a great time and to offer some activities, for example playing, climbing trees, and so on.

Problems: wrong modal 'will be' (use 'would be' for opinion), incorrect possessive 'children's' should be the plural noun 'children', awkward infinitive and gerund use 'through make' incorrect — use 'to offer' or 'by offering'. Also list verbs correctly as gerunds: 'playing, climbing'. This corrects modal usage, noun form, and verb forms.

× I would say I want to go in public parks, for example, big attraction parks.

✓ I would say I want to go to public parks, for example large amusement parks.

Errors: preposition 'go in' should be 'go to', adjective 'big attraction parks' is unnatural — use 'large amusement parks'. Also use consistent noun collocation 'amusement parks'. This fixes preposition and adjective choice.

× When there are a lot of attractions you can swing on them or to have a great time there.

✓ When there are a lot of attractions you can swing on them or have a great time there.

The phrase 'or to have' is incorrect after 'can' — after modal verbs use base form, not 'to' + infinitive. Remove 'to' and use parallel structure: 'can swing ... or have a great time'.