公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Speak with correct tense and clearer sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence, use past tense for childhood, avoid repetition, and give one or two specific supporting details connected with linking words (e.g., "because" and "also"). Watch pronunciation of names or unnecessary words.

示例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they helped me relax. For example, I often played football with my friends there, and we would have picnics on weekends, so those visits helped me build close friendships.

建议: Be concise and use present tense. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details with linking words (e.g., "for example," "because"). Avoid vague phrases like "make a good relationship"—say "make friends" or "socialize."

示例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. For example, I visit a park most weekends to walk and exercise, and I often meet classmates there, so it is a nice place to relax and socialize.

建议: Use natural phrasing (e.g., "I would like to see more parks"). Provide specific reasons in clear sentences with linking words like "because" and "also." Correct plural and article errors ("parks," "a place for entertainment").

示例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve air quality and provide green spaces. Also, parks offer safe places for children to play and for older people to meet and exercise.

建议: Answer directly and use future or present continuous clearly (e.g., "I plan to visit"). Give specific details (distance, facilities) with correct nouns and articles. Reduce repetition and use linking words like "because" and "for example."

示例: Yes, I plan to visit a large park near my hometown that is about five kilometers from my home. It has many recreational facilities such as walking trails and playgrounds, and plenty of benches where people can sit and relax.

× Yes, definitely. I like to go to the park when I was child because I need to relax myself and apart from that I also spend a quality time with my friend and make a good relationship with it. Babari.

✓ Yes, definitely. I liked going to the park when I was a child because I needed to relax, and besides that I also spent quality time with my friends and built good relationships there.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses and has article and plural errors. Use past tense (liked, was, needed, spent, built) because the question asks about childhood. Use 'a child' (article), 'friends' (plural) and 'there' instead of 'it'. Remove reflexive 'myself' and awkward phrase 'make a good relationship' -> 'built good relationships'. Use 'besides' for 'apart from that'. Suggestions: keep consistent past tense, use 'a child', pluralize 'friend' to 'friends', replace 'it' with 'there'.

× Yes, obviously I like to go to the park because especially I go on my weekend to spend a college day with my friend and the people come in the park, I talk with them and make a good relationship with them. And also we go like to spend the time by walking and exercising in the park.

✓ Yes, I still enjoy going to the park because I often go on weekends to spend time with my friends. When people come to the park I talk with them and get to know them. We also like to spend time walking and exercising in the park.

The original mixes awkward phrasing and singular/plural errors. 'I like to go' is acceptable but 'still enjoy' fits the question. Use plural 'weekends' and 'friends'. 'Spend a college day' is incorrect—replace with 'spend time'. 'Make a good relationship with them' -> 'get to know them'. Reorder ungrammatical segments and correct 'we go like to spend the time by walking' to 'we like to spend time walking'. Keep present habitual tense.

× Yes, I accept to see more park in my city because I think that if the park are more in the city then it will provide a fresh air. Apart from that, more park can make a entertainment for children and some older people spend a college time with their friends by gathering there.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because I think that if there are more parks in the city they will provide fresh air. Also, more parks can provide entertainment for children, and some older people can spend time with their friends by gathering there.

Use 'would like' to express preference rather than 'accept'. Correct articles and plural forms: 'parks', 'there are more parks', 'they will', 'fresh air' (no article). 'Make a entertainment' is wrong—use 'provide entertainment'. 'Spend a college time' is incorrect—use 'spend time'. Modal 'can' is fine but restructure for clarity.

× Yes, I am accepting accepting to go to the park which is situated on near my hometown. It is 5 kilometer away from my home. It is very big part and provide many environmental, many recreational and entertainment facilities. Apart from that there is a more benches so through that people can sit and spend quality time.

✓ Yes, I plan to go to the park which is situated near my hometown. It is 5 kilometers away from my home. It is very large and provides many environmental, recreational, and entertainment facilities. Apart from that, there are many benches so people can sit and spend quality time there.

Multiple errors: remove duplicated 'accepting accepting' and use 'plan to' or 'intend to'. Use 'near' not 'on near'. Use plural 'kilometers' and include 'away'. Replace 'very big part' with 'very large' or 'a large park'. Use 'provides' (subject-verb agreement) and proper list punctuation. 'There is a more benches' -> 'there are many benches'. Add 'there' at end for clarity. Fix prepositions and articles.