公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Mejora la claridad y la gramática: usa tiempos verbales consistentes, evita información irrelevante (por ejemplo “now I am too old” no encaja con la pregunta sobre la niñez) y añade una o dos frases de apoyo con detalles específicos. Usa conectores simples para coherencia.

示例: Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because they were peaceful and fun. For example, I used to play on the swings and have picnics with my family on weekends. However, we did not go very often because my parents were usually busy with work.

建议: Evita respuestas demasiado cortas y corrige la gramática: utiliza artículos y preposiciones correctas (‘go to parks’). Añade un motivo claro y una posible excepción o alternative para enriquecer la respuesta.

示例: I don't usually go to parks now because I dislike crowded places and I have little free time. Sometimes I visit a small neighborhood green space early in the morning when it is quieter and less busy.

建议: Organiza la respuesta cronológicamente y usa tiempos verbales correctos. Evita palabras sueltas como “Anyone.” Explica por qué quieres más parques y proporciona ejemplos específicos o consecuencias positivas.

示例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve residents' health and provide places for children to play. When I was a child there were one or two small parks, but many have been replaced by buildings in recent years.

建议: Corrige nombres y número (singular/plural) y da razones más específicas: menciona qué te atrae (plantas, senderos, actividades). Usa un conector para unir ideas.

示例: I would like to visit the Harding Botanical Garden in Malaga because it has a large collection of exotic plants and scenic walking paths. I am especially interested in seeing the orchid house and taking photos of the gardens.

× Yes, I like it but I didn't go too much because my parents were so busy and now I am too old.

✓ Yes, I liked it, but I didn't go very often because my parents were so busy, and now I am too old.

The student mixed present and past tenses incorrectly. 'I like it' should be past 'I liked it' to match 'I didn't go'. 'Too much' is unnatural with 'go' in this context; use 'very often'. Also add a comma before 'and' in a compound sentence. Suggestion: Keep past tense consistent when talking about childhood: 'I liked it' and 'I didn't go very often'. Use collocations like 'go very often' rather than 'go too much'.

× No, I don't like to go parks because I don't like the crowded places and I don't have any time to go.

✓ No, I don't like to go to parks because I don't like crowded places and I don't have any time to go.

Missing preposition 'to' before 'parks' (go to parks) and unnecessary article 'the' before 'crowded places'. Use plural uncountable sense: 'crowded places' without 'the'. Keep present tense consistent. Suggestion: Use 'go to parks' and omit unnecessary articles: 'I don't like crowded places'.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks, but in my city there aren't any. Anyone. When I was child there is a park or maybe two or three parks, but now there isn't any.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks, but in my city there aren't any. When I was a child there was a park or maybe two or three parks, but now there aren't any.

Several 'there be' and article errors: use past 'there was/were' to describe the past ('When I was a child there was a park...'). 'When I was child' needs the article 'a child'. 'There aren't any' should be used consistently for the present negative plural. Remove the stray 'Anyone.' which is incorrect here. Suggestion: Use 'there was' for singular past, 'there were' for plural past, and 'any' in negative sentences: 'there aren't any'.

× When I was child there is a park or maybe two or three parks, but now there isn't any.

✓ When I was a child there was a park or maybe two or three parks, but now there aren't any.

Mixing past and present tenses: 'When I was a child' requires past tense 'there was' or 'there were'. Also use 'a child' with the article. For present negative plural use 'there aren't any'. Suggestion: Keep past tense in the past-time clause and match singular/plural with 'was'/'were'.

× I would like to go to Harding Botanical in Maraga or two Harding Botanical in Torremolinos because they are so big and so beautiful.

✓ I would like to go to the Harding Botanical Garden in Málaga or the Harding Botanical Garden in Torremolinos because they are so big and beautiful.

Missing article 'the' before specific garden names and incorrect noun form 'Harding Botanical' needs 'Garden' for clarity. Also 'Maraga' likely 'Málaga' and 'two Harding Botanical' is incorrect; probably meant 'the Harding Botanical Garden in Málaga or the one in Torremolinos'. Use definite article for specific places: 'the Harding Botanical Garden'. Suggestion: Use correct place names and include 'the' before known institutions: 'the Harding Botanical Garden in Málaga'.