公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời có nội dung rõ ràng nhưng cần cải thiện về ngữ pháp (thì quá khứ), phát âm của một vài từ và cấu trúc câu để tự nhiên hơn. Hạn chế lỗi như 'I love' (hiện tại) khi nói về quá khứ, dùng 'used to' hoặc thì quá khứ đơn cho hành động trong quá khứ, và sửa các cụm sai như 'ride the bike' → 'ride my bike'. Ngoài ra rút ngắn câu để không quá dài (tối đa 3–4 câu) và dùng liên từ phù hợp để nối ý.

示例: Yes, I loved going to the park as a child. I usually went there with my father and rode my bike, and sometimes I played with my dog after school. Those visits were fun and helped me stay active.

建议: Ý tưởng tốt và có chi tiết cụ thể (jogging, thư giãn, đông đúc). Cần chỉnh ngữ pháp (ví dụ 'Partly' không tự nhiên, dùng 'I still enjoy' hoặc 'I do enjoy'), thì và trật tự từ ('it has helped me' thay vì 'it's helped me'), và dùng liên từ tự nhiên hơn. Giữ câu ngắn gọn (tối đa 3 câu) và dùng từ vựng phù hợp (crowded, rarely).

示例: I still enjoy going to parks for jogging because it helps me relax and keeps me fit. However, I don't go very often since I am quite busy, and because parks can be crowded I usually go with friends rather than alone.

建议: Nội dung rõ ràng, có lý do hợp lý. Tuy nhiên có lỗi từ vựng nghiêm trọng ('choking' sai ngữ cảnh); nên dùng từ như 'shopping' hoặc thậm chí gạch bỏ. Cần tinh chỉnh để tự nhiên hơn: câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng linking words như 'Furthermore' hoặc 'In addition', và tránh lặp ý. Kiểm tra collocation: 'pleasant surroundings' và 'fresh air' là tốt.

示例: Definitely. Parks are more than places for walking or recreation; they give people a place to relax after work or study and help reduce stress. Furthermore, more parks would provide pleasant surroundings and fresh air, improving both physical and mental health.

建议: Câu này khó hiểu do nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, thứ tự từ và lựa chọn từ không phù hợp ('love go to being wonder park in footwork with my families' không rõ nghĩa). Cần nói rõ tên công viên nếu có, mục đích đi (tham quan, chụp ảnh, học hỏi), và dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: chủ đề → lý do → ví dụ. Viết ngắn gọn 2–3 câu, dùng thì hiện tại tương lai 'I'd like to visit... because...'.

示例: Yes, I'd like to visit a famous park called Wonder Park with my family in the future. I want to go not only to play but also to admire the scenery and see places I haven't seen before.

× Yes, of course I love going to the park.

✓ Yes, of course I loved going to the park.

The examiner asked about liking parks as a child (past time). The verb should be in the past tense to match the time frame. Change 'love' to 'loved' to indicate a past habitual preference.

× When I was young I usually go with my father and play some outdoor games like ride the bike, work with my dog after school.

✓ When I was young I usually went with my father and played some outdoor games like riding a bike and taking my dog for a walk after school.

Several past-tense verbs are required to describe past habitual actions: 'go' -> 'went', 'play' -> 'played'. Activities should use correct verb forms: 'ride the bike' -> 'riding a bike' (gerund after 'like'), and 'work with my dog' is unnatural; use 'taking my dog for a walk'. Use parallel structure for listed activities.

× But now I'm quite busy so I don't go to the park often.

✓ But now I'm quite busy, so I don't go to the park often.

Sentence is mostly correct; only minor punctuation needed: add a comma before 'so' when linking clauses. The tense 'don't go' correctly describes the present situation.

× Partly I love jogging in the park every morning because it's helped me relax and get some exercise, but I'm quite busy now.

✓ I partly love jogging in the park every morning because it helps me relax and get some exercise, but I'm quite busy now.

The original used 'it's helped' (present perfect) which conflicts with 'every morning' (habit). Use simple present 'it helps' to describe a regular effect. Also place 'partly' in a natural position: 'I partly love jogging' or better 'I do enjoy jogging'.

× Also, the parks are often very crowded so I rarely go alone and usually visit them with my friends.

✓ Also, the parks are often very crowded, so I rarely go alone and usually visit them with my friends.

Sentence is correct grammatically; add a comma before 'so' for clarity. Pronouns are used correctly ('them' refers to parks). No tense change needed.

× Definitely. Parks aren't just places for walking or choking.

✓ Definitely. Parks aren't just places for walking or exercising.

'Choking' is incorrect and likely a wrong word choice. Use a verb or gerund that makes sense in context like 'exercising' or 'playing'. 'Choking' has an unrelated meaning.

× They improve a space for people to relax after work or study and help reduce stress.

✓ They provide spaces for people to relax after work or study and help reduce stress.

'Improve a space' is unidiomatic. Use 'provide spaces' (plural) to match general statement about parks. Also plural 'spaces' matches 'parks'. This fixes article and noun choice issues.

× Moreover, more parks would give pleasant surroundings and fresh air, which would improve people's physical and mental health in my city.

✓ Moreover, more parks would provide pleasant surroundings and fresh air, which would improve people's physical and mental health in my city.

Use 'provide' rather than 'give' for more natural collocation with 'pleasant surroundings'. The rest is correct; this is a word choice/quantifier collocation improvement.

× Yes, of course I love go to being wonder park in footwork with my families, ones of my life, not only a playing game but also broaden my eyes to see the pictures, sceneries that I haven't seen before.

✓ Yes, of course I would love to go to a wonderful park in the future with my family; it would be one of the highlights of my life, not only for playing games but also to broaden my horizons and see scenery I haven't seen before.

This sentence has many problems: use 'would love to go' for future desire, 'wonderful' instead of 'being wonder', 'family' is usually singular or 'my family' not 'families', and 'ones of my life' is incorrect—use 'one of the highlights of my life'. Use infinitive 'to go' after 'would love', and parallel structure 'not only... but also...' should connect similar forms: 'not only for playing games but also to broaden my horizons'. 'Scenery' is an uncountable noun; avoid 'pictures, sceneries'. Use 'haven't seen before' correctly.