公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct, give one clear topic sentence and a couple of specific supporting details linked logically. Correct verb forms and plural/singular mistakes, avoid repetition, and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words (for example, “because” and “also”) correctly.

示例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I could make new friends there. I often played on the swings and slides with other children, and my parents would sit nearby while I played. Those visits were fun and helped me become more sociable.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and word choice, and add a brief specific detail with linking words. Use gerunds and articles correctly (for example, “go jogging”, “a suitable place”).

示例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, mainly to go jogging. On weekends I often jog there for exercise, and I also like to sit for a while because the parks are a great place to get fresh air and relax.

建议: Start with a clear direct response and give concise reasons with better grammar and coherence. Avoid unclear sentences and redundancies; use linking words to explain your opinion and provide one specific reason or example. Correct articles and phrasing (e.g., “parks”, “I rarely go to parks”).

示例: No, I don't think my city needs more parks because I rarely visit them. Instead, I believe the city should prioritize upgrading public transport so people can travel more easily to existing green spaces and other amenities.

建议: Keep a clear topic sentence and add specific details using correct grammar and prepositions. Use linking words like “because” or “for example” to explain why you want to go, and be concise (2–3 sentences).

示例: Yes, I would like to visit a nature park near my house that I heard about. It has beautiful gardens and scenic spots, so I think it would be a great place to take pictures with my family and friends.

× Yes, as a child I really like going to parks.

✓ Yes, as a child I really liked going to parks.

The speaker refers to childhood (past), so the past tense 'liked' should be used instead of the simple present 'like'. Use past tense when talking about habitual actions in the past: 'I really liked going to parks.'

× This is because I can make new friend there.

✓ This is because I could make new friends there.

'Friend' should be plural ('friends') when referring to more than one, and the modal/time reference matches past context: use 'could' for ability in the past. Use plural for countable nouns when referring to multiple items.

× I also like to playing.

✓ I also liked playing.

After 'like' use either 'to play' or the gerund 'playing'. In past context use 'liked'. 'Like to playing' is incorrect because it mixes infinitive marker 'to' with gerund form; choose one: 'liked playing' or 'liked to play.'

× I also like to play swings and slides there my parents often.

✓ I also liked playing on swings and slides there with my parents often.

The original sentence has word order and preposition errors. Use 'playing on swings and slides' and include 'with my parents' to show accompaniment. Use past tense 'liked' to match childhood context and place adverb 'often' after the verb phrase or at the end: '...with my parents often.'

× Yes I do. I usually do jogging.

✓ Yes, I do. I usually go jogging.

English uses 'go jogging' rather than 'do jogging'. 'Do' with exercise is possible ('do jogging' is uncommon). Use the verb 'go' plus gerund for activities like jogging: 'go jogging.'

× During the weekend, I also think that Parks is very suitable place to grab some fresh air.

✓ During the weekend, I also think that parks are very suitable places to grab some fresh air.

'Parks' as a plural noun should take plural verb 'are'. Also use plural 'places' or include an article: 'a very suitable place'. Capitalization of 'Parks' is unnecessary. Use consistent plural agreement: 'parks are ... places.'

× I don't think we need more park in my city.

✓ I don't think we need more parks in my city.

Countable noun 'park' needs plural when referring to additional parks in general: 'more parks.'

× This is honestly, I really went to park.

✓ Honestly, I don't really go to parks.

The original is unclear and mixes tenses. The student intended to say they don't go often now. Use present tense 'go' and plural 'parks' for general statement: 'I don't really go to parks.' Place the adverb 'honestly' at the start for clarity.

× So I don't think it will impact so much on me.

✓ So I don't think it will affect me much.

Use 'affect' rather than 'impact on' in this context; 'impact' can be used but typically without 'on' or rephrase. Also place adverb 'much' after the verb: 'affect me much.' This is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I think the government should the city should focus on upgrading public transport.

✓ I think the city government should focus on upgrading public transport.

The original repeats subjects ('the government should the city should') and has awkward word order. Combine into 'the city government should' to be concise and grammatical.

× Yes I do, it is nature park which located near to my house I once heard about.

✓ Yes, it is a nature park which is located near my house that I once heard about.

Use article 'a' before 'nature park'. Include the verb 'is' for the relative clause 'which is located'. Use 'near my house' (no 'to' after 'near'). Keep tense consistent. Alternatively: 'Yes, it's a nature park located near my house that I once heard about.'

× It has a beautiful garden that I think it is a great place to take pictures with my family and friends.

✓ It has a beautiful garden that I think is a great place to take pictures with my family and friends.

Remove the extra subject 'it' in the relative clause ('that I think is...'), and keep the clause concise. Preposition use 'with my family and friends' is correct. Ensure clause structure is 'that I think is a great place...'.