公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và trật tự từ để câu tự nhiên hơn; rút gọn và tuân thủ cấu trúc: câu chủ đề rồi tối đa 2–3 chi tiết hỗ trợ dùng liên từ. Tránh lỗi như “spend all time to walking” hoặc lặp từ (“the park” nhiều lần).

示例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often spent hours walking and riding my bike there, enjoying the fresh air and green surroundings.

建议: Rút gọn câu, sửa lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp (không dùng tên riêng ‘Ashley’, ‘go apart’). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó giải thích tần suất và mục đích bằng liên từ như “because” hoặc “so”.

示例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now. Although I am often busy, I try to visit a nearby park every weekend to relax and exercise.

建议: Làm rõ ý chính và dùng từ vựng phù hợp (ví dụ: “improve” thay cho “prove”, “plant more trees”). Tránh tiếng lắp và nói không rõ. Dùng liên từ để nêu lý do rõ ràng và cụ thể hơn.

示例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve environmental quality. For example, planting more trees would reduce pollution and make the city cooler in summer.

建议: Tránh lặp từ và cấu trúc lộn xộn; trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích. Nếu không có kế hoạch cụ thể, nêu rõ rằng bạn thường đi công viên gần nhà và lý do. Sử dụng các cụm từ chuẩn như “near my home” và “I’m not sure” để diễn đạt ý không chắc chắn.

示例: I’m not sure — there aren’t many well-known parks in my city. I usually visit the small park near my home because it’s convenient and peaceful.

× Absolutely. I love going to the park because I can spend all time to walking, riding a bike and feeling natural in the park.

✓ Absolutely. I loved going to parks because I could spend all my time walking, riding a bike and enjoying nature in the park.

The student mixes present and past. The question asks about childhood, so use past tense (loved, could). 'All time' is incorrect; use 'all my time'. 'Spend...to walking' is wrong; use 'spend time walking'. 'Feeling natural' should be 'enjoying nature'. Suggestions: keep tense consistent with the time frame, use 'spend time' + gerund, and use natural collocations like 'enjoy nature'.

× I think Ashley, I was very busy but I have to spend a little time to go apart every weekend to work for help and doing exercise.

✓ I think, Ashley, I was very busy, but I had to spend a little time going out every weekend to do volunteer work and exercise.

The student mixes tenses and uses incorrect verbs. For past reference use 'was' and 'had to'. 'Spend a little time to go apart' is incorrect; use 'spend a little time going out'. 'Work for help' is unclear; likely 'volunteer work' or 'helping others'. 'Doing exercise' should be 'exercise' or 'doing exercise' after 'to'. Suggestions: choose correct past tense, use infinitive or gerund correctly ('had to' + base verb or 'spend time' + gerund), and use clearer vocabulary.

× Yes, I would like to see more park in my city because it to prove your country, your city in protecting the environment and plan more trees help the uh the season.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because it shows that the country and the city are protecting the environment, and planting more trees helps the local climate.

Use plural 'parks' when speaking generally. The sentence structure is broken: 'it to prove your country' is incorrect; use 'it shows that'. Use definite article 'the' for 'country' and 'city' being referred to. 'Plan more trees' should be 'plant more trees'; 'help the season' is unclear—'helps the local climate' is clearer. Suggestions: match singular/plural nouns, use correct verbs ('shows', 'plant'), and form a complete clause.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you would like to visit in the future?

The original is understandable but slightly informal: 'want to go to' is acceptable but 'would like to visit' is more natural and polite for this question form. Suggestion: use 'would like to visit' for future preferences.

× I don't think so because I don't know have any park in my current in my city and I don't know what part I want to go and I go to the park near to my my living.

✓ I don't think so because I don't know of any parks in my current city, and I don't know which park I would want to visit; I usually go to the park near where I live.

Multiple problems: missing preposition 'of' after 'know', 'park' should be plural 'parks' when general, 'current in my city' is redundant—use 'current city', 'what part' should be 'which park', and 'I go to the park near to my my living' is ungrammatical—use 'near where I live'. Also tense/modal: 'would want to visit' for hypothetical future. Suggestions: use 'know of', pluralize general nouns, use 'which' for choices, and 'near where I live' for location reference.