公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and use correct tense and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concise supporting details with proper grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words.

示例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because I loved the greenery and colourful flowers. For example, I often played under big trees which made me feel relaxed, and the fresh air boosted my mood.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and then support it with specific details about how and why you still visit parks. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct verb forms; avoid trailing off.

示例: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks because they remind me of my childhood. For instance, I often walk there to recall happy memories and to relax, which helps me unwind after a busy day.

建议: Clarify your main point and avoid filled pauses. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'parks' not 'power play') and give one or two specific reasons with linking words (because, since, for example). Keep within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide quiet green spaces for people to relax. For example, parks encourage exercise and social gatherings, and their plants and flowers improve air quality.

建议: Answer directly and use correct tense for future plans. State the park name, why you want to go, and when you might visit. Use linking words (so, because, when) and avoid repetition.

示例: Yes, my dream is to visit the Rose Garden in Chandigarh because I have heard it has thousands of roses and a peaceful atmosphere. I plan to visit it next year when I have enough time and money so I can fully explore the gardens.

× Well yes of course I like to going back when I am a child because I love the greenery of parks and the beautiful flowers.

✓ Well, yes, of course I liked going to parks when I was a child because I loved the greenery and the beautiful flowers.

Tense is inconsistent: the question asks about childhood, so past simple should be used (liked, was, loved). Also incorrect verb form 'to going' should be 'going' or 'to go'; 'going to parks' is natural. Use 'when I was a child' instead of 'when I am a child'. Suggestion: use past simple for actions in the past and correct infinitive/gerund forms (e.g., 'liked going to parks when I was a child').

× Whenever I I went to here I feel so relaxed and fresh up that boost my.

✓ Whenever I went there I felt so relaxed and refreshed; it boosted my mood.

Multiple issues: repeated word 'I I', incorrect word order 'went to here' should be 'went there', tense mismatch (went = past, so feel should be felt), incorrect adjective 'fresh up' should be 'refreshed', and sentence fragment 'that boost my' is incomplete—clarified as 'it boosted my mood'. Suggestion: remove repetition, use 'there' for place, keep past tense consistent, and complete the thought ('boosted my mood').

× Yes, of course I still like going to parks now because I am emotionally connected with parks from my childhood.

✓ Yes, of course I still like going to parks now because I have been emotionally connected to parks since my childhood.

'From my childhood' is less natural than 'since my childhood' for an ongoing connection; use present perfect ('have been') to express a state that started in the past and continues to the present. Also use 'connected to' rather than 'connected with'. Suggestion: use present perfect with 'since' to indicate continuity (e.g., 'have been connected to parks since my childhood').

× I have a lot of memories in parks whenever for my childhood period to still today.

✓ I have many memories of parks from my childhood to the present.

Word choice and order problems: 'a lot of memories in parks' is better as 'memories of parks'; 'whenever for my childhood period to still today' is ungrammatical—use 'from my childhood to the present'. Suggestion: simplify and reorder: 'I have many memories of parks from my childhood to the present.'

× I love to.

✓ I love them.

Sentence fragment: 'I love to' requires an infinitive (e.g., 'I love to go') or an object. Context implies 'parks', so 'I love them' or 'I love going to parks' is appropriate. Suggestion: complete the sentence by adding the object or infinitive ('I love going to parks' or 'I love them').

× Well, of course, I like to see more parks in my country in future because uh, uh, uh, power play a very important role in human's life.

✓ Well, of course, I would like to see more parks in my country in the future because parks play a very important role in people's lives.

Use of tense and modal: 'like to see more parks in future' should be 'would like to see more parks in the future' to express a wish. 'power' is likely a mispronunciation of 'parks'. 'play' needs plural subject agreement with 'parks'. 'human's life' should be 'people's lives'. Suggestion: use 'would like' for wishes and correct nouns/possessives ('parks play an important role in people's lives').

× They attract people due to its silence and due to greenery and a vibrant flowers, which attract me a lot.

✓ They attract people because of their quietness, the greenery, and the vibrant flowers, which attract me a lot.

'Due to' is less natural than 'because of' here. Pronoun agreement: 'its' should be 'their' to match plural 'they'. 'a vibrant flowers' is incorrect article/number: use 'vibrant flowers' or 'a vibrant flower'. Suggestion: use 'because of' and ensure pronoun and article agreement ('their quietness', 'the greenery', 'vibrant flowers').

× That's thing I think I.

✓ That's what I think.

Ungrammatical fragment and word order: 'That's thing I think I' should be the fixed phrase 'That's what I think.' Suggestion: use fixed expression 'That's what I think.'

× But I am a park lover person because whenever I I go, I go in parks, I feel so relaxed.

✓ But I am a park lover because whenever I go to parks I feel so relaxed.

Redundancy 'park lover person' should be 'park lover' or 'I love parks'. Remove repeated 'I I'. Use correct preposition 'go to parks' not 'go in parks'. Suggestion: simplify to 'I am a park lover' and use 'go to parks'.

× My dream park is Rose Garden which is in Chandigarh.

✓ My dream park is the Rose Garden in Chandigarh.

Minor article and phrasing: use 'the Rose Garden' for a specific named park and omit 'which is' to make it more natural. Suggestion: use definite article with named places when appropriate ('the Rose Garden in Chandigarh').

× So whenever I have enough money and time, I went here and explore Rose Garden.

✓ So whenever I have enough money and time, I will go there and explore the Rose Garden.

Tense inconsistency: 'have' is present/future reference, so use future 'will go' and 'explore'. 'went here' is past and 'here' should be 'there' when referring to a different place. Suggestion: keep future reference consistent with 'will go there and explore the Rose Garden'.