公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng không chính xác và thiếu rõ ràng. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp với một câu chủ đề, dùng thì quá khứ đúng (I loved / I used to), sửa từ sai (park, bus → park, back/then) và thêm 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể bằng cách dùng liên từ như “because” hoặc “for example”. Giữ độ dài không quá 5 câu.

示例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I used to go with my mother every weekend because we enjoyed walking and having picnics. For example, we often brought sandwiches and watched the ducks, which made me very happy.

建议: Câu trả lời ngắn và có lỗi từ vựng/ ngữ pháp (bus → park; double word “have have”). Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No + reason), dùng thì hiện tại đơn hoàn chỉnh, và thêm một chi tiết ví dụ hoặc tần suất để cụ thể hơn.

示例: Not as often as before, because my schedule is quite busy at the moment. I usually only visit a park once or twice a month, mainly on weekends when I have more free time.

建议: Câu trả lời khó hiểu, cấu trúc sai, thiếu câu chủ đề rõ ràng và chi tiết cụ thể. Nên bắt đầu trực tiếp (Yes/No + reason), đưa số lượng chính xác nếu biết, nêu lợi ích cụ thể (exercise, relaxation) và dùng liên từ để liên kết ý.

示例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because we only have a few small ones at the moment. More parks would give people more space to exercise and relax, and they could include playgrounds and walking paths.

建议: Ý chính rõ nhưng diễn đạt sai (reduce the energy → reduce stress / recharge energy). Cần một câu chủ đề khẳng định (Yes, I would like to...), giải thích lý do cụ thể và nêu ví dụ về hoạt động bạn sẽ làm ở công viên. Giữ câu ngắn và tự nhiên.

示例: Yes, in the future I would like to visit a large city park to relax and recharge after a long day. I would probably go for a walk, sit by a pond, or do some light stretching to reduce stress.

× To be honest, in the past I am crazy going to the past.

✓ To be honest, in the past I was crazy about going to parks.

The student used present tense 'am' and an incorrect phrase 'going to the past'. The sentence refers to a past habit, so past simple 'was' is required and the idiomatic expression is 'crazy about going to parks'. Suggestion: use past simple for past habits and fixed prepositional phrases like 'crazy about'.

× In the last in the weekend, mom and I often go to the bus and I feel over the moon.

✓ At the weekend, my mom and I often went to the park and I felt over the moon.

Problems: wrong preposition/phrase 'In the last in the weekend', incorrect destination 'go to the bus' and tense mismatch. Use 'at the weekend' (or 'on weekends'), 'went to the park' is idiomatic, and past simple 'went/felt' matches past time frame. Suggestion: choose correct time prepositions and accurate nouns for places.

× Now my schedule is quite busy and I don't have have enough time to go to the bus.

✓ Now my schedule is quite busy and I don't have enough time to go to the park.

Errors: repeated word 'have have', incorrect place 'bus' instead of 'park'. 'Don't have' is correct present tense, but remove duplicate word and use the correct noun. Suggestion: proofread for duplicates and use accurate nouns.

× In my city have two or three to pass with many 3 and in many space to people to exercise and play in here.

✓ In my city there are two or three parks nearby with a lot of space for people to exercise and play.

This sentence has missing subject 'there are', incorrect number phrase 'many 3', awkward word order 'to people to exercise' and extra 'in here'. Use 'there are' for existence, 'two or three parks', 'a lot of space' and infinitive phrase 'for people to exercise and play'. Suggestion: use 'there is/are' structures and clear noun phrases.

× Uh, in the future I want to visit the park to reduce the energy after a long day.

✓ In the future I want to visit the park to relax and restore my energy after a long day.

Problem: 'reduce the energy' is incorrect collocation. Use 'relax and restore my energy' to express intended meaning. Tense 'want to' is fine for future desire. Suggestion: learn common collocations with 'energy' and verbs like 'restore' or 'recharge'.