公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking language. Correct minor grammar ("good at playing football"). Avoid repeating the same idea.

示例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often played football there with my friends after school, which helped me improve my skills and made those afternoons really fun.

建议: Provide a clearer topic sentence and give a specific reason with linking words. Replace vague words like "they" with a clear subject and correct tense. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: Not really — I don't go to parks much anymore because they're quieter than before. Since my friends no longer play football there, I don't have anyone to play with, so I find it less enjoyable.

建议: Be direct and avoid contradictory phrasing. Use a clear stance and explain reasons with specific details and correct grammar ("crowded"). Use linking words to contrast ideas if needed.

示例: I wouldn't mind having more parks, but I'm worried they could make certain areas more crowded. For instance, extra parks might attract more visitors and traffic near my neighborhood.

建议: Give a clear affirmative answer and explain why with one specific reason. Avoid confusing or hedging language. Use a linking phrase to add the explanation.

示例: Yes — I'd like to visit Disneyland Park because it combines green spaces with rides and entertainment. For example, I want to try the themed attractions and see the shows there.

× I loved going to parks, especially to play football because I am good in playing football.

✓ I loved going to parks, especially to play football because I am good at playing football.

Use 'good at' not 'good in'. The correct preposition after 'good' when referring to a skill is 'at'. Suggestion: say 'good at playing football' or 'good at football.'

× No, now I don't like to go to the park because it is boring, not like before.

✓ No, now I don't like going to the park because it is boring, unlike before.

Use 'don't like going' to express a general dislike for the activity; 'unlike before' is a more natural contrast phrase than 'not like before.' Also use gerund after 'like' when speaking generally.

× Before I was going there to play football and now they don't play football.

✓ Before I used to go there to play football, and now they don't play football anymore.

'I was going' can be acceptable but 'used to go' better conveys a habitual past action. Also add 'anymore' for negative present habit clarity. Ensure subjects match verbs: 'they don't play' is fine if 'they' refers to people at the park; keep clarity.

× I do not mind that there is more parks in my city, but I rather that there is no park because it makes the city Crowder.

✓ I don't mind if there are more parks in my city, but I would rather there were no park because it makes the city more crowded.

Multiple issues: use 'if there are' (there + plural) for existence; 'more parks' is plural so verb 'are' required (there be issue/subject-verb agreement). 'I would rather' requires a clause in past subjunctive for hypothetical: 'there were no park' (better: 'there were none' or 'no parks'). 'Crowder' is misspelled and needs comparative form 'more crowded.' Use lowercase for 'crowded.'

× I would like to go to the Disneyland park. If you consider it a park but different than that, no, I don't want to go.

✓ I would like to go to Disneyland. If you consider it a park but different from that, then no, I don't want to go.

Use the proper name 'Disneyland' without 'the' in most contexts. Use 'different from' (not 'different than') to compare, and add 'then' for clearer logical flow. Maintain consistent conditional phrasing.