公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: حاول أن تبدأ بجملة موضوعية واضحة وتستخدم زمن ماضٍ بشكل صحيح، وتقلل التلعثم والتكرار. قدّم سببًا محددًا واحدًا فقط وادعم كلامك بتفصيل بسيط ومرتبط. استخدم وصلات بسيطة مثل 'because' لربط السبب بالجملة الرئيسية، واحرص على صحة القواعد (was → were، bored → boring).

示例: No, I didn't like going to parks when I was a child. I preferred watching cartoons and playing football because the local park was small and boring. Also, my hobbies at that time were mostly indoor activities like swimming and watching TV.

建议: ابدأ بججملة واضحة عن الحالة الحالية واستخدم الزمن الحاضر بشكل صحيح. قلل التكرار ('the time, the time') واستخدم رابط منطقي مثل 'because' أو 'so' بطريقة أكثر سلاسة. أضف تفاصيل محددة عن الأنشطة مع الأصدقاء لتقوية المحتوى.

示例: Yes, I enjoy going to parks now. I often go with friends because we like chatting and playing casual games, so I never feel bored there. The nice weather and green surroundings make it a pleasant place to relax.

建议: استخدم تركيبًا أفضل للتعبير عن التغيير بمرور الوقت (I didn't care → I didn't care). كن محددًا في السبب: اذكر فوائد ملموسة مثل الهواء النقي أو مساحات للرياضة. تجنب الكلمات المكررة واللفظات المترددة، وانهي الجملة بشكل مكتمل.

示例: I didn't care much about parks a couple of years ago, but now I would like to see more of them in my city. Parks provide fresh air and green spaces for exercise and relaxation, which would improve people's well-being.

建议: ابدأ بجملة واضحة عن نيتك في زيارة متنزه معين واستخدم الأزمنة الصحيحة (traveled → travel/when I traveled, I saw; didn't went → didn't go). اذكر سببًا محددًا لزيارة ذلك المتنزه (مثلاً تصميمه، المساحات، المرافق). تجنّب التلعثم وأنهِ الفكرة كاملة بدليل أو توقع.

示例: Yes, I have a park I want to visit in the future. When I traveled to Qatar I saw many parks, but I haven't been to Al Bidah Park yet. I would like to visit it because I've heard it has shaded areas and good facilities for relaxing and walking.

× No, I don't when I was a child, I didn't like going to parks.

✓ No, I didn't. When I was a child, I didn't like going to parks.

The speaker mixed present and past tense incorrectly by using 'I don't' with 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'I didn't' to match the time reference. Also split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: Use consistent tense matching the time expression (when I was a child -> past tense).

× Uh, my hobbies was where, uh, watching TV, watching cartoon films, playing football, swimming, but not going to to park because it's too bored the park there without.

✓ My hobbies were watching TV, watching cartoons, playing football, and swimming, but I didn't like going to the park because it was boring there.

'Hobbies' is plural so the verb should be 'were' not 'was'. 'Watching cartoon films' is better as 'watching cartoons'. 'Going to to park' has a duplicate 'to' and needs the article 'the park'. 'It's too bored' is incorrect; use 'it was boring' to describe the park. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement, use correct article with 'park', and use adjective 'boring' to describe feelings about the place.

× When I got bigger, yes, I liked going to park because I enjoyed spending the time, the time with my friends that we talk about a lot of topics.

✓ When I got older, yes, I liked going to the park because I enjoyed spending time with my friends and we talked about many topics.

Use 'got older' rather than 'got bigger' in this context. 'Going to park' needs the article 'the park'. The sequence refers to past time so verbs should be past tense: 'enjoyed' and 'talked'. 'A lot of topics' is better as 'many topics' or 'a lot of topics'. Suggestion: Use appropriate idioms and maintain past tense consistency.

× So I feel I'm not bored anymore going to park and the weather there is very beautiful.

✓ So I feel I am not bored anymore when going to the park, and the weather there is very nice.

Mix of present and past/continuous needs clarification. 'Going to park' requires 'the'. 'Very beautiful' is acceptable but 'very nice' is more natural for weather. Suggestion: Use 'when going to the park' to show the condition and maintain consistent present tense 'I feel I am not bored'.

× I wasn't care about this like 2 years ago, but now, yeah, I would like to see a lot of parks in my city because parks give the the human, uh, a nice feelings that you see the green color all the time and whenever you turn your face.

✓ I didn't care about this about two years ago, but now I would like to see many parks in my city because parks give people nice feelings; you see green all the time wherever you look.

Use 'didn't care' for past negative rather than 'wasn't care'. 'Like 2 years ago' should be 'about two years ago'. 'A lot of parks' can be 'many parks'. 'Give the the human' is incorrect; use 'give people'. 'A nice feelings' should be 'nice feelings' (no article) or 'a nice feeling' singular. 'Whenever you turn your face' is unnatural; use 'wherever you look'. Suggestion: Use correct past tense forms and natural collocations (people, feel, look).

× Yes, when I traveled to Qatar and the settled in, I see a lot of parks here.

✓ Yes, when I traveled to Qatar and settled in, I saw a lot of parks here.

The sequence refers to past events, so use past tense 'settled in' and 'saw' rather than present 'see'. Remove extra 'the' before 'settled'. Suggestion: Keep verb tenses consistent for past events.

× I go to many of these parks, but uh, there is, uh, there is still parks I didn't went to, I didn't go to like uh, Al Bidah park, which is uh, a park with conditions that protect from.

✓ I went to many of these parks, but there are still parks I haven't been to, like Al Bidah Park, which is a park with facilities that provide shade.

Mixed tenses and incorrect past participle: 'I didn't went' is wrong; use 'I didn't go' or better 'I haven't been to' for experiences up to now. 'There is still parks' should be 'there are still parks' (subject-verb agreement). The clause 'conditions that protect from' is incomplete; I changed it to 'facilities that provide shade' as a plausible meaning. Suggestion: Use present perfect 'haven't been to' for actions not yet experienced and ensure subject-verb agreement; complete descriptive clauses.