公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: พัฒนาความเป็นธรรมชาติและความชัดเจนของประโยค ลดความซ้ำซ้อนและแก้ข้อผิดพลาดไวยากรณ์ ใช้ประโยคหัวข้อแล้วตามด้วยรายละเอียดสนับสนุนโดยมีคำเชื่อม เช่น 'because' หรือ 'so' เพื่อให้คำตอบกระชับและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น

示例: Yes, I loved going to parks with my family and friends when I was a child because we used to walk around the paths and play games together. These outings created many happy memories that I still remember clearly.

建议: แก้โครงสร้างประโยคและความถูกต้องของไวยากรณ์ ใช้ประโยคเริ่มต้นตอบตรงคำถามแล้วขยายด้วยเหตุผลและตัวอย่าง เลือกคำและสำนวนที่เหมาะสมเช่น 'nowadays' 'to relax' และหลีกเลี่ยงประโยคไม่สมบูรณ์

示例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks nowadays, but my reasons have changed. I usually go to exercise and relax alone because I find it a peaceful way to clear my mind.

建议: ปรับคำศัพท์และโครงสร้างเพื่อสื่อความหมายชัดเจนขึ้น อธิบายเหตุผลอย่างเฉพาะเจาะจงและใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล เช่น 'although' หรือ 'however' รวมข้อเสนอเป็นตัวอย่างการใช้พื้นที่สาธารณะ

示例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because, although we need economic development, we also need green spaces. Parks provide areas for exercise, family activities and social gatherings, which improve residents' quality of life.

建议: แก้ความคลุมเครือและไวยากรณ์ ให้ประโยคหัวข้อชัดเจนและลดความซ้ำ ใช้เหตุผลที่ชัดเจนและตัวอย่างประกอบ เช่น ความใหญ่ของสวน กิจกรรมที่อยากทำ และความรู้สึกเกี่ยวกับเมืองนั้น

示例: I would love to visit Central Park in New York City in the future because it is one of the largest and most famous urban parks. I want to walk its trails, see the lakes and enjoy the busy city atmosphere nearby.

× Yes, I like to go into a park with my family and my friends.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks with my family and my friends.

The examiner asked about childhood (past), so the student should use past tense 'liked' and plural 'parks' to reflect habitual action in childhood. Use 'going to parks' or 'going to the park' consistently. Suggestion: use past simple for past habits (I liked going to the park).

× We walk along the park and we have so many activities to do and that's what the memories that I view remember it for a long time.

✓ We walked around the park and did many activities, and those are the memories I have remembered for a long time.

Preposition 'along' is odd with 'park'—use 'around' or 'in'. Tense should be past 'walked' and 'did'. The phrase 'that's what the memories that I view remember it' is ungrammatical; use 'those are the memories I have remembered' or 'those are memories I still remember.' Suggestion: simplify sentences and keep tense consistent (past for childhood).

× For now I like to go in the park but for my destination and my purpose has changed from when I was young.

✓ Now I like to go to the park, but my purpose has changed since I was young.

Use present simple 'like' for current habits and correct preposition 'go to the park'. 'For my destination and my purpose has changed' has subject-verb mismatch and awkward phrasing; use 'my purpose has changed' and 'since' to indicate time from past to present. Suggestion: keep subject and verb agreement and use appropriate time expressions.

× I just like going to park to exercise and to relax myself.

✓ I just like going to the park to exercise and to relax.

Missing article 'the' before 'park'. 'Relax myself' is unnatural in English; use 'relax' or 'relax myself' rarely—prefer 'relax'. Suggestion: include definite article for specific places and use natural verb phrases.

× I like to go in alone because I want to live my.

✓ I like to go alone because I want to be by myself.

Phrase 'go in alone' is incorrect preposition; use 'go alone'. 'Live my' is incomplete and incorrect pronoun usage. Use 'be by myself' or 'have time to myself'. Suggestion: use complete expressions for solitude (be by myself, have some time alone).

× I think more park is really important because in my city we need economic growth, but we still need natural.

✓ I think more parks are really important because in my city we need economic growth, but we still need nature.

Use plural 'parks' and plural verb 'are'. 'Natural' is an adjective; the correct noun is 'nature'. Suggestion: match noun number and choose correct noun/adjective forms.

× We can live with the nature and the trees and some space that we can do some activities with our close friend and our family.

✓ We can enjoy nature, trees, and open spaces where we can do activities with close friends and family.

'Live with the nature' is awkward; use 'enjoy nature' or 'live near nature'. 'Some space that we can do some activities' should be 'open spaces where we can do activities'. Use plural 'friends' for general meaning. Suggestion: use natural collocations (enjoy nature, open spaces, close friends).

× In the future, I want to go to Central Park in New York City, because New York City is on has been my destination and my dream country, my dream city that I wanna go and wanna see there have so many huge park and a large park that I can stay along with my.

✓ In the future, I want to go to Central Park in New York City because New York has always been my dream destination; it has many large parks where I can spend time.

Use 'want' for future intentions but simplify and correct tense: 'New York has always been my dream destination' instead of 'is on has been'. Avoid informal 'wanna'. Use plural 'parks' and correct 'spend time' instead of 'stay along with my'. Suggestion: use standard future expressions, avoid contractions like 'wanna' in formal speech, and simplify complex clauses.